There's a story here. And a story that is compelling, and appeals to my nerdy cyberpunk tastes.
However, the writing style needs polish. A lot. Any attempt at writing suspense arrives DOA, since there's so much exposition. It's like Action Scene, cut in 10 minutes of exposition, Action scene resumes, a couple words of dialog, 10 minutes of exposition, then explain how the MC feels about that exposition, etc.
— Dec 29, 2019 04:08PM
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