J’s Comments (group member since Aug 22, 2013)

J’s comments from the Bisky's Twitterling's Scribbles! group.

A gal named Briannah from my old book hated strong scents, too. Her sense of smell's so sensitive. xD

I guess if Cam'ael cleans a lot and Starling visits, Starling can't stand the strong smells of Pine-sol or other cleaners.

This scene doesn't happen until around 11,000 words in. xD "The point of no return" area.

I'm actually transcribing the edits I made for the first chapter on paper into Scrivener. :3 My goal is to get it posted in a couple weeks.

I managed to get a couple free hours. I've been kind of sick the past week, so I drew instead. I got tired of coloring what others had drawn for me, so I drew my own stuff. haha

haha. English is crazy. lol

I hate flip-flop sounds, too. Footsteps while wearing them sound so clumsy, clumsier than heels even.

I'm using the past tense with limited third person. :3

My problem is determining what the narrator knows and doesn't know. lol If Nelly's drunk, does the narrator still see what's happening clearly around her, or is he drunk, too? But then I thought of that video tape concept earlier. lol - I'm confusing myself now. lol

@G.G. - Is English his second language or his native and just had difficulty learning it?

oho, we got you to leak another character. :3 I suppose Nelly would be the opposite of Blood because she has that regard toward sweets.

The Scarlet Ribbon
Nelly is very annoyed by the footsteps of people wearing flip=flops. It drives her nuts. She's a sneakers and boots person.

Vladimir is annoyed with technology. He can't stand cell phones and computers. His mother raised him to abstain from technology.

Scarlet is annoyed that her former lover is happy with another girl. :3

You made sense haha. I'm going to save that word tipsy for this scene. haha

It would be much easier if it were first person, but I doubt I could pull off a female first person narrator. xD

But I guess the narrator doesn't have to a person following a character around, either. Let's say every person has a video tape in their heads. My book could be what's recorded on the tape. The narrator is reciting the tape... Nelly's eyes are the cameras and her ears and thoughts make up the audio...

I don't know. lol

That's what I figured, but I wanted to ask anyway. xD

Being interrupted is my biggest pet peeve, too, so I understand his pain.

My story is called "The Scarlet Ribbon" and I've done Google searches in the past and just searched on Goodreads for the title. There are two different novels with the same title.

Does anybody know what laws there are pertaining to titles? I understand song lyrics, movie footage, and book text are copyright-protected, but are titles protected?

My writing motive is similar, Giulia. :3 My passion is storywriting/making. If I look back, story-making has been involved in many of my previous hobbies.

List 2 or 3 of your characters in your current story or a recent story and tell the class what annoys them and why. :3

I think it's because our muses are fueled by our subconscious to which we don't commonly have access. :3

Yay, you found the fountain of ideas! lol

I have a problem, too, somewhat.

I have a limited third person narrator. So if the character my narrator follows is drunk, would the narrator be drunk, too? Or would the narrator remain sober but still know what's going through the character's intoxicated mind?

Absolutely! :3

Clothes can tell a lot about a person in a way. And my inner fashion-designer likes describing them. xD

If you have an epic gun battle in our footy-pajamas, please make note of that! :3

Perhaps not responding is a sign of flight? lol That's a good question. Maybe flight is no response and fight is a response? D8 lol

Cruelty intrigues me, J. David.

I'm such a bad person xD

I have fun creating my character's colors, but I won't make a habit of reminding the reader in every scene that my character has blonde hair and really pink lips or something. Or when a character's wearing different clothes, I throw in a sentence or two because my limited third person narrator follows my protagonist, and she's interested in fashion, so she'll pay attention to people's clothes. Within the page of a character's debut, I paint a pithy picture of them of two sentences tops, not a thick paragraph. I've read that writers need to trust their readers to remember things.

Most of my males have blonde and brown hair. And the two main girls in my current story have green and blue eyes. xD Maybe just state a description that distinguishes them from the person nearby. Her hair's a lot brighter than his.

Sorry, I'm babbling. lol

I don't smoke either. I haven't had alcohol very often, but my characters do both lol

I like the smell of books and newspapers and dry erase markers. o.O (I don't make a habit of smelling the markers that often. xD)

I'll keep it in mind to sneak in a few smell-related descriptions in each scene or each page or every other page.