S.E.’s Comments (group member since Jan 16, 2013)

S.E.’s comments from the S. E. Lund - Author group.

What about:

THE AGREEMENT : Love Was Never Part of It

Or does that make it sound as if love doesn't happen? If you read the blurb you will know they do go beyond the agreement ...

I use FSOG as my guideline for what is now possible. Ana had just graduated and got a job. FSOG is not NA despite the age of the heroine. It's more than that which is used to place a novel. The content and tone and level of explicitness is what really categorizes a book as YA or NA or Adult or erotica. The Agreement is def Adult Contemp Romance when it comes down to explicitness and tone. It goes beyond NA in that way. The good thing about Amazon eBooks is that we only get two category tags so I will go with adult contemporary romance when I tag it. I know that sounds like three categories but contemporary romance is considered one tag.

As to Kate's age, I want her a grad student. It's what I know as I spend a lot of my twenties in grad school (6 years!) and they say you should write what you know...

Here's another go:



I think this is it -- I checked other CRs and there were no subtitles except for "A Novel" or bestseller info or "Book 1 of the Darkfire Trilogy"...

A letter to my sub.

You trust me completely to know what you need.

And I do know what you need. I know what to whisper in your ear to make you need me even more. I know how to touch, where to touch, when to touch.

I know you.

You can relax completely with me. You can feel everything possible with me. You can respond with total abandon with me.

That is what I most desire.

So begins an enticing letter from an anonymous Dominant to his new submissive.

While graduate student Kate McDermott waits in a Manhattan cafe to meet the Dom who will help with her research on BDSM, she reads the letter again, telling herself her interest is strictly academic. If she's honest, Kate must admit it's more than that – it's a deeper need she can't deny.

When Drake Morgan, MD, neurosurgeon, bass player, philanthropist walks through the cafe door to talk to her about the lifestyle, Kate is mortified. The son of her father's oldest and best friend, Drake is far too desirable and too much a part of her social circle for comfort. If she decides to go through with this, can the carefully-worded agreement she draws up restrain their undeniable desire for each other?

Unable to resist his determined seduction, Kate begins an intense relationship with Drake that pushes all of her, and Drake's, boundaries. Highly erotic, The Agreement is a love story that will stay with you long after you finish reading.

Crap. Who knew this would be so hard?

Is "Can love be restrained?" too cheesy? I could have nothing there...



Which title do you prefer -- one line or separate lines?

Here are three options -- what do you like the best?

Michelle (Angelique Beau Pre) wrote: "S.E. wrote: "I agree as long as you don't think I will get attacked for not including a warning... I'd rather have the blurb contain info that lets a reader know what's in the book than include a w..."

Yeah the word BDSM should give it away. ;)

Paris (kerbytejas) wrote: "what no hugs for me....

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Smooches and hugs for all my first and beta readers!

Charlene wrote: "I like the first option personally.

I think this is the best blurb yet, but I had one other thought - what if you left out the "D/s" and just called it an "intense relationship". Leaves a bit to t..."

I agree as long as you don't think I will get attacked for not including a warning... I'd rather have the blurb contain info that lets a reader know what's in the book than include a warning. For some, it wouldn't be a warning but an enticement!

Michelle (Angelique Beau Pre) wrote: "S.E. wrote: "Michelle (Angelique Beau Pre) wrote: "I like it, E! I think your editor needs a raise. Just sayin'..."

All I can afford to give at this point in my so-called career is two huge smooch..."

3 extra hugs!

What works better?

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So begins the enticing letter from an anonymous Dominant to his new submissive that Kate McDermott reads as she prepares to meet a Dom in person and explore her curiosity about BDSM. Kate tells herself it's just research but it's more than that – it's a deeper interest she can't deny.

So begins the enticing letter from an anonymous Dominant to his new submissive. Kate McDermott reads the letter as she prepares to meet a Dom in person and explore her curiosity about BDSM. Kate tells herself it's just research but it's more than that – it's a deeper interest she can't deny.

Charlene wrote: "S.E. wrote: "I will send all beta readers the final revised novel so you can read / review once more. Hope to have it by this Friday."

ok perfect!

I just read the Cerise Sinclair book you're ref..."

Oh good. Don't want her fans attacking me for copying! Very aware of the power of fans and readers now...

Michelle (Angelique Beau Pre) wrote: "I like it, E! I think your editor needs a raise. Just sayin'..."

All I can afford to give at this point in my so-called career is two huge smoochies instead of one! ♥♥♥

Michelle (Angelique Beau Pre) wrote: "E, just sent you an email."

Thanks - got it!

A letter to my sub.

You trust me completely to know what you need.

And I do know what you need. I know what to whisper in your ear to make you need me even more. I know how to touch, where to touch, when to touch.

I know you.

You can relax completely with me. You can feel everything possible with me. You can respond with total abandon with me. That is what I most desire.

So begins an enticing letter from an anonymous Dominant to his new submissive.

While graduate student Kate McDermott waits in a Manhattan cafe to meet the Dom who will help with her research on BDSM, she reads the letter, telling herself her interest is just theoretical. If she's honest, Kate admits it's more than that – it's a deeper need she can't deny.

When Drake Morgan, MD, neurosurgeon, bass player, philanthropist walks through the cafe door to talk to her about the lifestyle, Kate is mortified. The son of her father's oldest and best friend, Drake is far too desirable and too much a part of her social circle for comfort. If she decides to go through with this, can the carefully worded agreement she draws up restrain their undeniable desire for each other?

Unable to resist his determined seduction, Kate begins an intense relationship with Drake that pushes all of her, and Drake's, boundaries. Highly erotic, The Agreement is a love story that will stay with you long after you finish reading.

I will send all beta readers the final revised novel so you can read / review once more. Hope to have it by this Friday.

Charlene wrote: "Is there much else that's changed since you sent out the latest version? Just thinking I don't want to be including any inaccuracies when I post a review!"

Just that she is a grad student who works at Geist - there is a journalist -exposee plot by Cerise and I don't want TA to be too close to that. Kate isn't out to do an exposee but to understand and explore.

Charlene wrote: "S.E. wrote: "Michelle (Angelique Beau Pre) wrote: "S.E. wrote: "When journalism grad student Kate Hayden explores the world of BDSM, she tells herself it's just research and not due to her real, bu..."

No, she is back to being a student the way I had her at the start. She still works for Geist but it's a student newspaper. I didn't want her to be too similar to other heroines and stories out there.

Michelle (Angelique Beau Pre) wrote: "S.E. wrote: "When journalism grad student Kate Hayden explores the world of BDSM, she tells herself it's just research and not due to her real, but reluctant, interest in the lifestyle. She can't b..."

Getting my heroines mixed up... Not enough caffeine yet LOL!