S.E.’s Comments (group member since Jan 16, 2013)

S.E.’s comments from the S. E. Lund - Author group.

OK I just sent out the final revised novel "The Agreement" to everyone who volunteered to be line editors! I'm asking for any typos and spelling mistakes or grammatical errors. We have several eyes on so it will be interesting to see what we all miss and what we catch in common!

Thanks again to everyone for your help. You will see several new sections in this final draft. There is a dungeon party, an extension to the first charity fundraiser, another scene at the end and tying up some loose ends that people noted. I hope I took all your suggestions into consideration but if I missed anything, please feel free to remind me in an email.

Now, I am going to attack Dominion and I'm not going to even THINK about The Agreement until I get all your comments back.

;) <3

❃ Brandy ❃ wrote: "I think you mentioned that someone fed them once, while she was at Michel's, but I don't think anything was said when she stayed away from them at per parts of the book. I'm about to start reading ..."

Eve should have refused to live with either Michel or Julien until they promised to have her cats come live with her too.

❃ Brandy ❃ wrote: "Anyhoo... I know Eve's cats were being taken care of in D... E just left that part out, that's all. I know she wouldn't intentionally starve them to death, so I gave her the benefit of the doubt! Haha! "

Thank you! Yes, I thought I mentioned somewhere that Eve's cats were being looked after by VASILY or something...

Alisa wrote: "S.E. wrote: "Alisa wrote: "I haven't gotten far. Unforeseen life drama. Small error in chapter one. When she falls & then runs into Drake in the kitchen she says she's 5'3. A few minutes later ..."

No problem - just want to keep things really general on the thread. But I seriously appreciate the feedback and corrections!

Alisa wrote: "I haven't gotten far. Unforeseen life drama. Small error in chapter one. When she falls & then runs into Drake in the kitchen she says she's 5'3. A few minutes later when describing herself in ..."

Thanks, Alisa -- but could you keep spoilers off the thread and send me a Private message with any corrections? Thanks!

So, it's often common for authors to have blog tours instead of book tours. I have been thinking of doing my own and am looking for blogs to 'tour' whatever that means! If you can think of a blog that would be appropriate or are willing to contact blog owners you know who host these kinds of events, I would be forever in your debt. <3

❃ Brandy ❃ wrote: "Wow! I've been out of touch! I totally agree with Charlene & Wendy's comments. Don't worry E, your book is great! Definitely a 5 star, for me, even without any revisions. People are going to s..."

Of course, Brandy! I'd love to have you as a beta reader for the revised version!

❃ Brandy ❃ wrote: "I think that the revisions that I read on the first 5 chapters (I think it was) a while back were perfect with giving more background to SCU & Blackstone. I think most readers will be p,eased wit..."

OH GOD YES THE CATS!

Wendy wrote: "You're welcome E, and if/when I get to the same point I imagine I will have to give myself several severe talkings to about the same thing. At my current productivity rate I will probably be, ooh..."

Have to revise Dominion first ... THEN I get to work on Resurrection ... ;)

I guess, when you look at the big picture, you read in a genre and of a type of book because you enjoy it and once one book is finished, you want more, but with a unique take or different voice or fresh characters or twists. But you still want to read that genre with its particular elements, or else you'd move to a different genre. I hope TA is unique enough to satisfy and similar enough that people get what they are looking for when reading an erotic contemp romance with a bit of kink.

Charlene wrote: "You're right...no getting around the fact that there is a D/s relationship here that involves a fairly young woman and a powerful older man. However, I didn't feel myself making a comparison to oth..."

Thanks Charlene -- glad you felt it was unique enough to be of value!

Wendy wrote: "I don't think Doubt is your friend at this point in the game E, a genre necessarily has similarities with others in that genre. Doms have to have jobs that reflect authority, subs have to have eno..."

Thanks Wendy -- just a few jitters before the book is released. I was freaking out before I released Retribution, afraid it sucked and I just didn't realize it! Anytime you put anything out there in public, you're afraid... I just wanted to hear what others felt about the issue. I think from what my other beta readers have said, there are similarities as you said because of genre and topic. Those can't be avoided.

*smooch*

There's no way to get around the fact that this is a novel with a female novice submissive and a male Dominant. That's the point I guess. I think most of the main aspects of the story are different -- those who have read will know the points of departure. In your view, are the similarities enough to warrant accusations of copyng / turn others off from TA?

OK just got some feedback from a beta reader. Her one critique was that there were too many similarities in the book - I take it she means to other novels of its kind. So a quick brainstorm. What parts are too close to other novels of its kind? I will cogitate on how to make it more unique. Don't need to be accused of doing a hack job knock off...

OK I got my quota of beta readers for the line edit. What I need is a line by line check for typos and spelling. It is also a last chance for any big boo boos. If all goes well, I can just do a once-over and correct any mistakes and then I can get it ready for eBook and print and order proofs. Then, it's time to start generating buzz for the release date.

Thanks guys for helping! YOU ROCK!

OK. My plan is to have all revisions done by Friday and send this baby to those who are willing to do a very close line edit. If you want to help, send me a message or email. As incentive, I'll send you a print book on e they are ready! I hope to get the line edits done by the 31st and then formatting and proofing and published by the 11th or 15th whichever works out. Are you in?

Michelle (Angelique Beau Pre) wrote: "Found the links for Ascension:


US: ‪http://tinyurl.com/bmve9zl
UK: ‪http://tinyurl.com/98uusjl"

Thanks for positing these!

Thank you everyone! *smooch*

Ascension is free Monday and Tuesday, March 11th and 12th. If you can promote it, please do! Right now it's #6 in its category in the Free Kindle Store - Paranormal Fantasy.

Katya wrote: "Wow SE you are brave to share this and look for suggestions. I loved the book and I don't think any of what you suggested would make me think any differently about the book. I like the more Julia..."

Thanks so much for your comments, Katya! I will keep that in mind as I revise Dominion. More Julien for sure, and I will include a bit more D/s with Michel but towards the end so that it's a bit more established as an idea before anything really intense happens. As to the threesome... I will think on it. (view spoiler)[Eve feels torn about it because she knows how Marguerite tried to play it up and force it, but it never appealed to the brothers. Eve hates Marguerite and so she doesn't want to put them in that position. I think a few daydreams about having them both in her bed might not be out of the question. But she fights her attraction to Julien in Book 1 and 2 for quite a while. Her mind won't let her go there. (hide spoiler)] But ours can, as far as any of us want them to go.

Thanks again and if you have any more thoughts, I would be glad to hear them. Once the revision is done I will send it to people for a response so if you want in, I will send it once it's done.

:)