Billie's Not So Secret Diary > Recent Status Updates

So far I like this. It's to the point, and not overly descriptive to add to the word/page count. But my only complaint is while it's centered around the MC, Jai, there are a lot of characters/'tribes' and they're not introduced as slowly as they should be. There's no time to 'relate' to one before the next is introduced, and then another, and another.

There wasn't enough supernatural aspect. Not scary, not suspenseful. More of a typical murder mystery instead of a supernatural horror.

There is too much rambling, explaining, and mumbling. Take some of the pointless repetitive blabber, and it might be a better story, as is I'm skimming 'cause I'm bored hearing the same things