some thoughts: when a backstory is already sad, you don't need to keep adding little details to make it worse slipped in throughout the book and also why is this authors sense of time so weird?? this character went to sleep (not passed out, just asleep) in a room, scene ends. the very next paragraph shes being woken up by the consequences of the past scene but three days later with no transition it was so confusing
— Aug 09, 2021 10:03AM
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