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message 11251: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
((Where does the new plot start?))


message 11252: by [deleted user] (new)

((Ditto.))

Ben was kicking himself about it.


message 11253: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
Abby got a handle on her emotions and unlocked the stall door. She looked in the mirror and splashed some water on her face to clear the tears and stains. She patted her face dry with the brown paper towels and frowned at her reflection. She hated her ugly brown eyes that looked like mud and brown blonde hair that looked like dirty water. She frowned even deeper when she noticed the pimple on the corner of her chin. No wonder no one liked her enough to be her friend or stick around for her. She was ugly, stupid, and way too shy. She checked under the stalls for feet, just to make sure no one had witnessed her break down and left the bathroom, sure she wouldn't fall apart anymore- today.


message 11254: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments Alice Adelaide (Lavendarlol) wrote: "((Where does the new plot start?))"

((I'm trying to find it. :P))


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Ben heard Abby walk back in and turned to face her. "I'm sorry," he whispered.


message 11256: by Elliott (new)

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"Okay," Abby blinked, hard. What a surprise. No tears. She smiled to herself, a bitter smile.


message 11257: by [deleted user] (last edited Jun 19, 2010 10:20PM) (new)

Shannon sipped her cocoa and listened to the awkward silences that started to enclose the three people. Her thoughts found their way to Ben. How was that girl? What was he doing? Was he thinking about her?
"Shannon," Jordan almost shouted, bringing her back to reality.
"Oh, sorry!" She said and turned her attention back to them.


message 11258: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben studied her face carefully.


message 11259: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"Stop doing that!" Abby snapped. "You're creeping me out."


message 11260: by [deleted user] (last edited Jun 19, 2010 10:22PM) (new)

Ben shook his head and ruffled her hair, "Whatever you say, Kiddo."


message 11261: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"So how's your life been?" Since you left.


message 11262: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben shrugged, not looking at her.


message 11263: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"Met any pretty girls?" Abby asked with an almost smile.


message 11264: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben chuckled, "Yeah, actually. She hates me, though. I think you two would be amazing friends or despice each other to the death."


message 11265: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"A girl? That hates... you?" Abby contorted her face into an exaggerated expression of mock shock. "Not the irresistible, perfect Ben!"


message 11266: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments ((the new plot tentatively starts around page 42. But I'd suggest skipping a lot and just skimming though stuff. :P))


message 11267: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
((Holy cow! That's a lot of pages. I'll read it, eventually. And I'll def skim.))


message 11268: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments ((Don't read it. *shudders* A lot of it sucks. And most of it until in the 100's is just random. So you can start skimming anywhere after that. Though the newest newst plot starts in the 200's.))


message 11269: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben laughed. "Pretty much."


message 11270: by [deleted user] (new)

((Lav...))


message 11271: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
((oops! Didn't see that. And here I was waiting for you.))


message 11272: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
Annana Flambe du Mort (Erica) wrote: "Ben laughed. "Pretty much.""

"Theeeere's a shock," Abby dragged out the words.


message 11273: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben laughed. "Yeah. She hates my guts even though I've saved her from diferrent people like 3 times..."


message 11274: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"Sounds exciting," Abby said honestly. She tucked a lock of hair behind her ear.


message 11275: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben shrugged.


message 11276: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"Or you can just not tell me," Abby said. "It's all good."


message 11277: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben sighed. "It's a long story, you sure you wanna hear it?"


message 11278: by Elliott (new)

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"Does it look like I have anything better to do?" Abby said, flopping down into a chair.


message 11279: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben laughed then started, "It all started about... Six hours ago. I was walking down an alley, when I see these this girl up ahead being harrassed. I try to rush over to help, but this other girl beat me to it. She yelled the guy's ear out." he chuckled.


message 11280: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
Abby smiled, and listened attentively. She hadn't realized how much she'd really missed the sound of her brother's voice.


message 11281: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben noticed how much he'd missed having a sister to talk to. "But then the idiot, whose name turned out to be Dave, starts harrassing her. I ran and tackled him and we got into a brawl, until finally I knocked him unconcious. Then I asked the girl if she was okay and she said she was. I introduced myself and found out her name's Shannon..." Ben grinned.


message 11282: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
Abby rolled her eyes with a smile. "My big brother the hero."


message 11283: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben laughed. "You wish. I asked Shannon what happened then told her that I thought she was pretty heroic. She made a sarcastic comment, then I made a sarcastic comment and then we both kinda glared at each other and left..."


message 11284: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"Smooth."


message 11285: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben raised his eyebrows. "I know. So I come home all disoriented and bruised. I kinda looked like I did when Jay got mad at me," he winced at the memory, then continued, "Anyway, I'm trying to clean myself up when Shannon suddenly walks in. I can't even think straight and wonder if maybe I'm in someone else's apartment..."


message 11286: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"And then, all of a sudden, an anvil falls from the sky and you shove her out the way!" Abby grinned widely.


message 11287: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben rolled his eyes but ignored the comment. "It was my apartment. I kicked her out and it turns out she lives next door. So then we did like a billion things to annoy each other..."


message 11288: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"And you found out she was part of a secret government plot to take over the world," Abby couldn't resist throwing one more snarky comment at Ben.


message 11289: by [deleted user] (new)

"Then, some people snuck into her house and there was a crash and I was annoyed. I go over thinking, 'what now?!?'"


message 11290: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"Sounds like Shannon is a bit accident prone," Abby said. Or someone's out to get her.


message 11291: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben smiled faintly. "Thats what I thought. So I knock on her door and she says that she's just fine, but I can hear the fear in her voice. I walk in and this guy who was trying to kidnap her jumps out the window. Shannon's all freaked out, but we both apologize and I help her lock the windows..."


message 11292: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
"I get the feeling something's going on with this chick," Abby said. "Like someone's out to get her?"


message 11293: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben nodded. "Yeah. She got dragged off and I went after her and almost got her out. Then she decided she wanted some answers and went back," he rolled his eyes, "I stopped her after her second try and since I wasn't letting go of her, she kissed me. I still didn't let go and got het home buy she just ran off about fifteen minutes ago."


message 11294: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
Abby's eyes widened when he mentioned the kiss. "Maybe she really couldn't resist you. But that's really weird. And it doesn't make sense."
But you know something else that doesn't make any sense? You did more to help some girl you barely know then you've ever done to help me in a long time.


message 11295: by [deleted user] (new)

"Yeah. I think I'm going insane. Anyway, it is way late, so you take the bed and I'll sleep on the couch," he said and yawned.


message 11296: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
Abby was too tired to argue that he sleep in his own bed, so she just walked to his bedroom and collapsed on his bed. Even though she was deathly tired, she couldn't fall asleep so she just lay in bed thinking.


message 11297: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben sat there thinking for a few minutes before he went to check on Abby.


message 11298: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
Abby rolled over onto her back, trying to keep the troubling images from her brain. David laughing at her haircut she'd been so proud of, Kyle ripping page by page out of her book. Josh standing back with a smug smile on his face. Brooke pretending to be her friend and then dropping her as soon as Josh commanded it. Her family, if you could call it a family. Jay slamming her into the wall time and time again, telling her she'd never be good enough. A message she had heard so many times she truly believed it. But as much as she wanted to cry the tears wouldn't come.


message 11299: by [deleted user] (new)

Ben leaned against the doorframe to his room. "Hey."


message 11300: by Elliott (new)

Elliott | 22634 comments Mod
Abby tried to force her breathing to become even so Ben would think she was asleep. It always seemed to work in books.


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