Andres’s Comments (group member since Jul 29, 2020)

Andres’s comments from the Gathering Of Dedicated Scribblers group.

I didn't write anything today. I went over ML's notes on my first 10 chapters. Still, its a time for rejoicing because after both of your notes I feel as though the first 10 chapters are in stone. Thank you both for all your help, I hope you enjoyed the story a little and it wasn't too much of a burden.

Now there's an idea.

Awesome! Today was productive for me as well. I pumped out around 1450 words into chapter 18. Halfway done. Hopefully tomorrow I get a chance to finish it.

I was in a good flow too. Squeezed my lashes between my fingers. Puckered my lips and tried to feel a bit more feminine as I wrote from Guinevere's perspective. Then a visitor came by and destroyed my writing mojo. Oh well, hopefully tomorrow I get back in that groove.

@ Amy congrats! What an accomplishment. I can't wait to cross that finish line with the rest of you.

@Tomas congrats buddy! That's big news.

M.L. wrote: "I haven't haven't even looked at my novel in about a week now. You gotta take a break every now and then. Since our little trio were reading and reviewing the first 9 chapters of each other's work ..."

You are a machine. I barely managed to finish chapter 17 for this week. Is the outline for a script and a novel completely different?

For some reason I'm imagining a deep Ursela laugh (the little mermaid) after that sentence.

Or even Jafar. Your reward. Your eternal Reward...

A whiskey soaked cookie shaped like sushi.

You can always write two version and see which your readers prefer.

Nice! Got fancy with the kanji =D
You know, a lot of times the kanji is unfamiliar and we have to use the furugani to read what the kanji says. Kinda funny but that's what happened when their old tongue had no written word. So when they were conquering China they stole most of their writing kanji and then adopted it into their native tongue. Now a Chinese kanji can have multiple meanings in Japanese so its more common to use furu or katakana to write outside of the 1 thousandish most common kanji.

This makes Japanese very hard. They have Hiragana which is their native alphabet. The women were not allowed to write in Hiragana so the princesses created their own version of the alphabet called Katakana so they could write each other. Now they use this alphabet to depict words that are foreign to Japanese such as Hamburger. Ha-N-Ba-Ga. Then you add the 3 thousand fluency Kanji (Chinese) characters which represents an entire word rather than spelling it out. On top of that they write romanji which is a phonetic latin pronunciation of the words.
In your sentence the double box is a representation of the sun, it is pronounced Ni. Ni also means 2. This is also ni に, this is also ni ニ.

Yes, thank you. I tend to shy away from speaking Spanish now that my confidence is decreasing. However, with amazing peers like you guys, its possible that things could change =D. Thank you.

Hmm. I will probably have both.

ni ho n go ga su ko shi ha na shi ma su.
nihon go ga sukoshi hanashimasu.

Japanese language (ga =particle) littlebit speak.

I'm sure it would. However, the probability of that happening now, is highly unlikely. Its okay, writing with everyone here and doing reviews is strengthening my English proficiency.

I think multiple POV changes are well done in cinema but not read as well. I think if you have a POV chapter it is extremely easy to follow. If in a chapter you switch between 2 pov's it goes well if each chapter is similar.

If a random chapter jumps between POV's, it could feel very much out of place. What is the importance that another character has to have their point of view come across in the next paragraph?

From Liavali's example, I would read that more as a narrator and not as though I am in the POV's shoes. So what type of writing is taking place? Is it a narration? Are you wanting the reader to experience it from the Antagonist Protagonist POV?

What if you left out chapters altogether and simply had POV named page breaks? That could be cool.

Du hast mich!

Haha, so many talented writers in this community. I can't help but hope for a lengthy friendship between many of us.

Soy vaquero de un rancho en Trincheras, Mexico. Pero, cuando murio mi abuelito, nadien tenia tiempo a llevar mi para visitar mi familiar ayi. Entonces no tengo chance para practicar espanol. La ultima vez que fue era en el ano '92. Que triste soy.

にほんご が すこし はなします. 2年間日本語を勉強しています.頑張ってください! Ja mata ne!

Liavali wrote: "No matter what the weird course tutor says, you write as it suits your time, and just keep going and hopefully it gets done!"

@ML Exactly. Who knows, next year you might have out 3 books while we only have 2. =D As long as we can keep helping each other out for years to come our community can help us put out the best versions of ourselves regardless of our pace. Excelsior!

Not a problem. If you ever need any help please just ask. Were all here to make each others stories that much stronger.

I reviewed your first chapter!

I submitted a review.

I started writing this novel when I joined the course in April I believe. I'm going on 4 months in the course but I only write for an hour when I'm at work. Weekends, vacations and holidays are for family time.

Well I had a busy weekend. My body is tired but I got a Mexican omelet burrito here and hopefully that fuels me to start writing something today. I'll start my hour timer in a bit and hopefully some words will magically appear on the screen =D.