Andres’s Comments (group member since Jul 29, 2020)

Andres’s comments from the Gathering Of Dedicated Scribblers group.

First and foremost, write the story the way you intend it to be told. We are only seeing a single piece of your puzzle. If your reviewers are asking questions you will answer later on in your own way, continue to answer them that way. Once those subjects are explained and more pieces are available to the readers, we can at that point tell you if it does or does not work as well.

As of right now, yes, it seems a problem to the reader however, after your next chapter it may no longer be an issue. The reader and you will not know until you have all the information together.

The only person holding the answers is you, so write down the questions on a sheet of paper and as long as you address them the way you want to, this is your story. =D

I see. Wouldn't the act of not burying her with her parents tarnish the Wilcox name? Or did he cover up her death altogether?

the first link /review/abcdef… works. The second link is simply a /submit link.

I was able to post on your chapter outline. I hope it helps.

I think Liavali hit most of my suggestions. The only part that confused me was,.. Julian married her older sister. Are they not brother - sister in law? Why does she call him uncle? Or did I miss something.

@B.C. I would recommend not resubmitting your work unless you did a complete change to the chapter. (Basically re-writing the entire chapter) You will lose all feedback and reviews from that chapter when you resubmit. The best course of action is to write down important feed back, makes the changes and continue on to the next chapter. When you reach a milestone, you will ask someone to read your work from that point on i.e. chapters 1-9. That reviewer will be able to read your updated version.

@Liavali I'm sorry that's happening. It might be the page not loading properly. You can try to push refresh or F5 and see if it helps. If not, it might be a cookie setting. Try going to the forums first and then to your chapter submission and see if it opens then.

@Maria I don't feel any particular way about any of those. I've read authors whom have linked past experiences and flashbacks and POV's in many different ways. Some I have liked, some I have not.

Currently I am writing in a manner that changes the POV between 3 separate characters. This is kind of tricky because I am rotating them POV 1, 2, 3, 1, 2, 3, so they have to link and continue on while maintaining the same fluidity through the story.

I do enjoy a past experience being the first 25% of the chapter, for each chapter and somewhere towards the middle the past and present link. That seems tricky but it always provides this type of 'aha' moment. Otherwise dialog seems to help with the better flash backs.
"Do you remember back when Ma made that knife?"
I sit back and think to myself for a moment. I do remember. I was approximately 9 years old at the time. Father had a small forge...

@ Gigi In the folder you wish to add your story, click 'New Topic'

@ M.L. Gotcha, I'll send you an email today after work.

@Maria Can you not see it as the author or as the character?

Welcome Gigi and Liavali to the group. I'm sorry the slack didn't work. If you'd like to send me an email @ ArodDaMonster@gmail.com I'd be happy to send you an invite from the slack itself. Maybe it will work that way?

Either way, anything I could do to help the group please don't hesitate to ask.

@Maria lol. Okay well I'm on a quest for Camelot. I'm going to try and do the story justice however, with more of a YA romance borrowing heavily from the Leonardo DiCaprio and Clare Danes modern version of Shakespeare.

@Maria Thank you for catching all those errors. I really need an editor I know, hopefully amazing community members like yourself will stick around =D. I try to tell myself that someone with a better eye like yourself can pick out my mistakes rather quickly. It's more important that I try to get my story on paper. I'll go fix those mistakes right now, I greatly appreciate your help.

Admittedly, I'm not very knowledgeable about the King Arthur tale so I am learning a lot about these characters and the different variations of the legends as I skim through the information i'm mainly gathering from Wikipedia. I think the extent of my knowledge is from Disney's sword in the stone lol. So if I have your interest, well that's a huge compliment! I will try my best to not disappoint you =D.

@M.L. Thank you! My biggest weakness is tense's. I think maybe because I have native blood in me and they were always mixing up their tents. I've never heard of past tense for books so thank you for that, i'll try to stick to past tense from now on. Thank you so much.

If it was of any help then I am happy for you. Hopefully they are suggestions that you like or could use in some fashion.

@S. I'm glad something helped, I often feel like I'm simply rambling lol.

Yeah, I think courser attempts to have you review the submissions that are in most neglect to help out the writers and get them some feedback. Thankfully we can post our sharable link and through a community like ours, we can get notification to each other and expedite that feedback process.

Great job, I submitted a review and my recommendations.

@Dominga,
It's okay. Remember these are tools that I am using to offer help. In no way are you required to use them just know that they are here if you want to use them. We'll get you on the slack and as I keep promoting advertising hopefully that grows as well. If not you can always drop in here when you need any help.

I left a review.

jointhegods.slack.com doesn't work? When I get off work I'll try to post a link in here.