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With the book I'm writing now this was quiet a feat because Merlin is known to have some type of mythical powers but how? Where did they come from? What could he do?So I had the challenge of trying to create a background for that character.
When you hover your mouse over the links they should appear slightly different. It could be that my reviews have already been submitted and its not taking me to yours. But my mouse over shows the /submit ending.
@Faye - The link to your own work will end in a /submithttps://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...
When you click sharable link the link will change and end in a review/abcdefg….
https://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...
That's a really good question. I've seen multiple discussions on this topic. For me, I like to have a hard rule on how you acquire the ability to perform magic however, once you have magic, a soft rule on what spells/abilities you can actually perform/create. An example would be like Captain Planet. If you have a magic ring you could create the element of fire. However, the ring doesn't say it only creates a fire ball or a wall of fire. The form of fire is soft while the rule of the ring is hard.
OH! So great. Disregard everything I said about chapter 1. If that's how it ends, then its perfect! It totally caught me. I was like, pfft, it couldn't happen like that AND it didn't. It was a test. HAHA. Loved it. Best way to end your first chapter is Alistair running out into the woods. Then chapter 2 your like, OH okay. That break in timeline, great stuff!
Oh, I have a question. Are things going to start looking better for the marriage with Shayan and Rheana and just when you have hope for the couple they find about Ivannah's child which starts to dismantle the marriage? He would have wanted a loveless marriage but Rheana is doing everything write and he starts to change, starts to like her and then BAM the woman I really love has my baby and the twine begins to unwind. Oh great, I haven't even read your story and now I'm sad.
"Alistair nearly leaped six inches in his seat using nothing but the power of his flinching ass cheeks. "I'm glad I wasn't drinking anything when I read that. I would have had to wipe my nose. I think its great. You have a lot of humor which makes the intro's for the beginning of the book run smoother. The conversation makes the characters feel like the have a history together, its fluid.
The only thing I feel you can do to strengthen it is adjust your timeline. It feels like the second Alistair notices his signal is going berserk, everyone in the city has already gone crazy. It feels a bit rushed. At the start Alistair is about to say something to Max but the tender leaves. Maybe at this point add that a strange shake/vibration was felt and Alistair went to comment about it but Max left. This gives you more time. Something could have occurred in the city before Sparkplug comes in. It doesn't feel so instantaneous. The power went out the same time as the looting and rioting. If there is a tv their could be a "JUST IN" or "BREAKING NEWS" -rioting has started out as power grids in the city are systematically shutting down. Max being a prepper has a small generator running but it goes out a short while after. "Well I just moved in, I hadn't filled it up yet."
@Faye the link didn't work for me. It took me to MY chapter 1 lol. @ML if you post on coursera the review stays private, which is nice because a criticism could be taken a bit negatively but there is no embarrassment because no one else can see it. On a positive note, you also get credit for reviewing your peers.
@Kaylin I posted a review. I hope it helps!
@ S.I'm having that problem right now. I'm retelling the Arthurian legend and I have to find a way to incorporate the sword in the stone, sir lancelot, etc. Sometimes I write the chapter and i'm not entirely happy with it however, when writing the next chapter I come across a way to incorporate that information in a much nicer way. This is why having a good reviewer or two comes in handy. You could email us a few different approaches and see which we like better and maybe someone will even recommend you a way that you hadn't thought of. There are a lot of possibilities if we build this writing community correct. Especially if we can establish a few people with trust, this is after all everyone's precious masterpiece.
@Dominga, Absolutely, whatever works best for you.JointheGods.slack.com
Please feel free to use it and invite your own Coursera group there. Some might like using both, some might prefer one or the other. At least this gives you options. Feel free to not have to check into this site until you've completed a chapter and would like some feedback.
Dominga, JointheGods.slack.com
It's there for you to use it in anyway that would help you continue writing just like this group. If there is another tool that you would like me to set up for the group just let me know.
When reviewing someone's story you are correct, there is no way to directly give feedback **UNLESS** we post our email or something at the end of each submission. Please create a topic for your personal work and use that http link to post at the bottom of your chapter. This way you can invite someone who has reviewed your story to continue following you. Also, post your coursera sharable link in your topic so that friends here on GoodReads can give you feedback as well.
Welcome Maria! I had two groups fall apart so I know exactly where you were coming from. I hope we can all promote and grow our Coursera community on this site. The more members we can gather the more reviewers are available etc. It does get hard trying to do 5 random reviews for each chapter. At least this way you can review someone's story and help them grow rather then 5 chapters of a story you might never see again. The incentive to be detailed in your review begins to disappear after a while.
Just a bit of advice. When you post a new chapter, your reviewers will not be able to contact you or you them. I would recommend leaving something at the bottom of your chapter so that someone who is interested in your story can keep in touch and either continue reviewing or allow you to ask further detail about questions they had when reviewing your work. You are more then welcome to use the GODS slack or goodreads page to do this so you don't have to give out your personal email.
https://www.goodreads.com/group/show/...
I've started to leave this link at the bottom of my submission so someone can get in touch with me. Also, create a topic with the title of your story so you can notify the group when you have posted a chapter. This will help you achieve your reviews while allowing other members to conduct their 5 peer reviews.
There ya go! Invite away. The more the merrier!
Yes, unfortunately I haven't read 'le mort de arthur' or any of jack whytes books. So, i'm going into this with a large amount of ignorance lol. I'm hoping that because this is a legend rather than written history the fans of Arthurian Fables will accept my work and not become too angry with me lol. I am trying to tie in Arthur, Excalibur, the lady of the lake, sir lancelot, and tales of Morgan la fey.
Lmao. I sure hope there will be no cracking of skulls necessary. It simply grants you access to tools. Allows us a move around topics or create new folders depending on what everyone needs. It can help us keep things fluid and organized, delete old topics that no one is using etc.
Absolutely. When you post your chapter there is a sharable link button, copy and paste the URL here and ask for others help in reviewing your work.
Hi Sangeeta. Welcome to the GODS. As you progress through the course you will find that random peers can review your work. At first there will be many new students to help you accomplish this. As the course progresses a majority of the students will not continue. This will be hard on the amount of feed back that you receive on your work.
Thankfully here you can post a sharable link whenever you need assistance to your posted chapter. Because everyone writes at a different pace, linking your chapter will not interfere with where everyone is in the course at that time. They can simply read your chapter and give you advice as you need it.
Furthermore you can connect here and create topics to speak with other students that are writing in your specific genre or even a primary language. This would allow you guys to basically have your own channel for conversation while not flooding a messenger service or phones with chiming notifications. Your peers will simply log on and see that someone has posted in the topics/channels that they participate in. You can also send private messages through your profiles so you can keep your emails separate from spam.
Another example you can see from above was I had the ability to link book recommendations that could aid Mrs. Faye in her writing. Of course once you have written your book you can link your book to your profile and fans can leave reviews on your work. This creates advertisement. You can also create book giveaways and connect with fans. But, for now. This is how we support each other. You are communicating with us, other students aspiring to publish a novel. If you need any help, just ask!
