(…) “the scent which had been from the kitchen.”
Just weird. Try:
“The oven timer went off, and when Greer looked up, she spotted a frozen pizza sitting atop the middle rack through the oven window.”
“The oven timer went off, and when Greer looked up, she spotted the empty box atop the counter beside the oven and realized what the apartment had smelled like since she’d walked in earlier—Pizza.”
— Jun 04, 2023 01:40PM
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