Boy, I'm having a hard time reading this. The sentence structure with the first person is choppy, to say the least. The sequence in the hospital when Day goes to steal the vaccine. I realize it's first person POV, but holy crap I, I, I, and all the derivatives of I (I've,I'm, I'd, etc) 181-times in 8-pages. Thinking back over the other books I'd read that were first person ... I can't recall this structure.
— Dec 15, 2013 08:24PM
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