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message 351: by (S) (last edited Aug 16, 2010 08:57AM) (new)

(S) ((intresting...))

Siki glanced at him and layed down too. She looked at the wall, thinking about what had happened today, she glanced at Felway.


message 352: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen began scrawling stuff down on a notepad, facing the wall.


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(S) Siki heard Zen, magic, she thought, she untied her hair.


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Angel sighed as she cleaned the floor. "He will come..." She told herself.


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen pulled a pen from his bed and clicked it. It turned into a bar. He attached it to the wall and curled his legs around it, hanging upside down. He began doing crunches, arms folded across his chest.


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(S) Siki glanced at Zen, she wondered where the bar came from, then frowned when she figured it out, she reached for the scroll and studied the strange symbols.


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen let himself hang. He closed his eyes.


message 358: by (S) (last edited Aug 16, 2010 09:05AM) (new)

(S) Siki found herself wondering what power the scrolls had.

Back in the town they grew up in, Cassandra lite a candle, "Happy 16 birthday sis." she said quietly, reading a spell book.


message 359: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen felt a tingle of magic. "Hey Siki, are you using magic?" He asked, not bothering to open his eyes or drop from the bar.


message 360: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at him. "I dont use magic." she said flatly. "Are you." she asked.


message 361: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shook his head. "Someone is." He said, opening his eyes. "Erm. You said your sister wants to be a mage?" He asked, he realized the magic wasn't intermiediate.


message 362: by (S) (new)

(S) "Yeah... ever since she found out she could be, i tried to talk her out of it.... well she still doesnt listen." siki said, wondering why he was askeing.


message 363: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "Eh." HE said remembering a memory when he was 6. His mom coming home with news. "Ooh it's your birthday!" He said, realizing.


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(S) Siki looked at him. "Really? I didnt know." she said with a shrug. "Great, fours years....." she trailed off.


message 365: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded and dropped, landing on his hands standing. He flipped back onto his feet and pulled out a small gold pendant. It had a ruby in it. He opened the back and there was a lock pick. He tossed it to her. "Happy Birthday." He said.


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(S) Siki caught it. "What? Oh..." she said still thinking about home. She realisied she what just happened. "Thats, okay Zen, i dont need anything." she said starting to give it back.


message 367: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shook his head and pulled the same one out of his pocket but the gem was blue. "I got to many." He said. "And plus you can pick locks." He said.


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(S) Siki looked at it. "Thanks." she said, smiling a bit. She put the scroll away, and looked at the pendent. She looked up suddenly. "Whats that?" she said, she realised she had no reason to say that, and now was confused why she did at all.


message 369: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments "What's what?" Zen asked.


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(S) Siki shook her head. "I- I dont know." she said frowning. "Im going crazy." she said, a bit angry at herself.


message 371: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shrugged. "If we didn't laugh we'd all go insane." He said. "Gotta laugh a bit." He said.


message 372: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at him. She nodded. She leaned back, slipping the pendent in her pocket. "yeah..."


message 373: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen resumed his up=sid-down=crunches


message 374: by (S) (last edited Aug 16, 2010 06:26PM) (new)

(S) She didn't mind it was her birth day and it was hard to believe that this whole thing started 4 years ago.

Siki glanced at Felway, she still was having a hard time taking in that he remebered nothing, it was so differnt, everything was.


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Angel was sent up from her room. She devised a plan in her helpless mind. While the wash-maids where cleaning, she'd have to escape with the laundry shoot that would end near the rubbage placed at the back. Of course, there would be guards. Angel spent years making an exact guards outfit. She stood in her room, placing the finishing touches on her outfit.

The time came for the daily laundry. Betty, the wash-maid was doing her duties as usual. "Betty, the guards are requesting you do their clothings. They seem slightly annoyed." Angel said sweetly. Betty nodded and walked out of the room. That's when Angel dove into the dirty rack of clothes that weren't in use anymore. Betty came back in, ready to dunk the worn out clothes out the shoot. Inside the clothes, Angel was changing slightly, pieces at a time so Betty wouldn't see. Betty released all the clothes into the shoot and at once, Angel flew with all the worn out clothes. Once she landed, she quickly hid in a nearby tree. She had the guards outfit on and everything seemed to be according to plan. Angel walked steadily toward the large gate to the outside gate. She opened it gracefully and ran. She ran for hours, never stopping. She was in the outside world. The world she barely got to see. Angel was at her breaking point, she collaslped on the ground.


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Kia settled into a tree, watching the tent. She didn't need any sleep--she could stay there all night long


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Angel heard nearby voices from afar. She thought they were guards. They are going to take me away... she thought. She heard a girl and a boy talking. Resting? She wasn't sure. She crawled over to the voices. She was so tired.


message 378: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at Felway, and Zen. She shrugged, must have been the wind.


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((HAHA! That's soooo mean, S! :D))

"Help..." She called out faintly.


message 380: by (S) (new)

(S) ((lol, she doesnt know!))

Siki jumped at the noise. She carefully stood up and folded the tent back, seeing the girl. She kneeled down next to her, cheaking a pulse. "Who are you." she asked hard.


message 381: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
A noise from outside of the tent made both Felway and Siki jump. Zen didn't seem interested. Felway grabbed his sword and Siki folded the flap back. 'There was a girl?' Felway thought. Siki checked her pulse. Felway looked at Zen, he had opened his eyes. Nothing more.

"Are you the one that has been following us?" Felway asked. He has his sword down. She showed no threat.


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(S) Siki looked at her. "She could be under a apperence spell." she said. She sat the girl up. "She doesnt seem hurt, maybe she'd weak, but... she seems fine."


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Angel closed her eyes. She was still in the guards outfit! "Escape...castle..." Her mouth was dry. She hears a voice that sounded fimilar, but she was still exhausted.


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(S) Siki looked at her, she frowned. "She needs water." she said. "You rest." she instructed the girl. she pulled out her cantean and dribbled the rest of the water into the girls mouth.


message 385: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen sighed. Came over to them. "She's not the one. The one that's following us never rests." He explained. "The one who follows has dark arts. Quick bring her in the tent." He said, picking he rup and bringing her in the tent. He rummaged in his bag and brought out some honey.


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(S) Siki followed him, glancing at Felway. "Could it be the same castle that we...."


message 387: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen rolled his eyes. "Siki, I was there when you did that." He said. "I was up in the balcony, and jumped out." He said.


message 388: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Felway and Siki looked at the girl. She laid down and barely had her eyes open. "If you trust this girl Siki. So do i." He said to her.


message 389: by (S) (last edited Aug 16, 2010 07:10PM) (new)

(S) Siki nodded, "But is she from there?" she looked at her. "I havent ever seen her. Fel?" she asked hopefully. "And i dont trust anyone yet."


message 390: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen raised an eyebrow, smirking. "Aye mate. Ya came around." He said in a british accent. "Luuuuv doves." He sang under his breath, mixing honey and water in a bowl and inspected the girl. He held his ear to her mouth. "Well she's breathing." He said and tilted her chin back so her airway was open. He trickled some honey-water onto her tonguge.


message 391: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki puzzled over the girl. "Yes, she's alive, but she's weak, and doesnt seem to have much endarnece, the castle not that far away." she didnt mind Zens ever changing accents.


message 392: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "GUard clothes. She had a well thought out plan." He said.


message 393: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at her. "She must have, i wonder how she got out without a cut."


message 394: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shrugged. "Laundry, toliets, etc." He said.


message 395: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki nodded. "And know one knows who she is?" she asked again. "She doesnt have any weapons." she said, thinking of what it would be like. "She must have some determination."


message 396: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "When I went on my first mission, I had my nail clipper and no magic." He said.


message 397: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at him. "Hmmm.. well you came far." she said, more to herself. She looked at her sword and her other weapons, wondering what it would be like to have nothing again.


message 398: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shrugged. "I just had to break in, and pick a lock grab something and leave before the guard killed or noticed me." He said.


message 399: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki nodded, she always wondered what happened while they were away. "Thats not too bad..." she trailed off.


message 400: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
"Rest is best for her now. And it won't help much if are tiered in the morning. Let's all get some rest and ask questions in the morning." Felway said. He looked at the light that was lit by magic. He turned his back to all of them and closed his eyes.


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