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message 101: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen raised an eyebrow. "Nothing about a curse. Just what could make him lose his memory? I mean a Dark Arts?" He said.


message 102: by (S) (last edited Aug 12, 2010 07:08PM) (new)

(S) Siki scowled. It was almost like they used to do, pick apart puzzles, but this time it was much bigger. "I really don tlike mages." she looked at Felway, then rolled up her scroll and put it back in her inside pocket. "And standing here isnt going to help much."


message 103: by [deleted user] (new)

Kia had followed them to the town and watched them deliberate from a shadowy corner. Getting the scrolls would be easy, she mused.


message 104: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Felway was out of it. He heard what Siki said, and it kept picking at him in the back of the mind. "'What protection without danger.'" Felway whispered. It came to him. He grabbed Siki by both shoulders. "The one who told you that, 'What protection without danger', is the same jerk that promised you safety!" Felway started to become mad, partly at the remembrance of being lied to, and part that he couldn't remember who promised Siki's safely.
"Who was it. Do you know?" Felway looked straight in her eyes still holding her by the shoulders. "Who said that to you?"


message 105: by (S) (last edited Aug 13, 2010 08:53AM) (new)

(S) Siki looked at him, surprised. "Felway.... it was you." she said looking at him, he didnt even rember the day he left. "Felway....." she was shocked, he didnt remeber. She looked at his eyes, they looked so forien and... confused.


message 106: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments A dark look crossed Zen's face. "Siki, it was him. But also it was me." He looked ashamed. "When you were a little child you got hurt, I was twelve and I tolf my father I'd never let anything happen to you. I'm sorry." He said.


message 107: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at Zen, confused. "What-" she didnt recall that. "But nothing ever happened to me... I - I"


message 108: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen sadly smiled. "You were six, I don't think you'd remember." He said.


message 109: by [deleted user] (new)

A falcon dropped out of nowhere and dropped to Kia's shoulder. She pulled a slip of paper from the chamber attached to his foot. A smile spread across her face as she read it. She patted the falcon and gave it something to eat. After eating, the falcon jumped to a perch on a roof.


message 110: by (S) (new)

(S) She looked at Felway, and then at Zen. "I dont need protection." she said crossly.


message 111: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen heard the flapping of wings and raised an eyebrow. He looked at Kia but didn't see anything. He shrugged it off.


message 112: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked where Zen was, she cocked her head toward the sound. She scowled. "We should go."


message 113: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "Sure." He said. Attis was eating some grass a few yards away. He whistled and he came galloping.


message 114: by [deleted user] (new)

Kia slipped her cloak off and changed a few things about her appearance while haggling a vendor for his horse. She made a signal to the falcon, which took off


message 115: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at the horse. She looked around again. "Three people cant ride a horse."


message 116: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen sighed. "Siki. I know you haven't seen me in four years, but wouldn't you of all people remember? Rules don't accuire to me. You guys will ride on the saddle. I'll ride on the foot hold." He said.


message 117: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki smiled. "Fine, Zen, but dont fall off, remeber last time you did that." she recalled years ago when zen fell off the horse they were all riding and they left him.


message 118: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen chuckled. "Yes. I remember, a killer weggie and a cast for a month. Well I ripped it off at two weeks but, ya know." He said.


message 119: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki nodded. She looked to Felway. "You dont remeber do you."


message 120: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Siki was already on the the saddle and Zen was climbing on the foot hold. Felway looked to the shiny grass off the the side. "No." He answered. Siki stuck out her hand and helped him up. Felway knew that for them this was like a get together for an old friendship, but something had changed, everyone left and was set off to get the scrolls for their own reason. It was like their childhood was gone and they were enemies, and patching the gash to their friendship would take the world.
Felway blinked off the thought of friendship as the horse moved on.


message 121: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki kicked the horse into a gallop. "Hang on." she said, and snapped the reins to get the horse into a full feleged run. She smiled. She leaned forward on the hourse and laughed, almost osing her grio on the reins, she felt like she was flying.


message 122: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Some time passed before the three of them and Attis arrived at the rocky ledge that started the maze of caverns. They all got off and looked into the dark cave. Day had almost passed now and the moon could be seen.
They stood there for a moment just looking in the cave.
"What you you going to do with your horse Zen?" Felway asked not taking his eyes off the cave.


message 123: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shrugged. "Attis is not my horse. He is my partner. And he'll wait, notify us if anyone is coming. If I need him, I whistle." He said, wiping dirt out of his eyes.


message 124: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at the both of them. She tied her hair back and ripped off her glove, and tieing it like her bandana, "Anyone have a match or something?" she asked.


message 125: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen tossed her a match box.


message 126: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki nodded a thank you and found a nearby branch, she broke off a torch sized peice and with some dried leaves, coaked it into a flame. She tossed the box back to Zen.


message 127: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen caught it, "What are you doing?" He asked curiously.


message 128: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki raised her eyebrows at Zen. "I've heard stories about this place, i'd prefer not to go in blind, only to be attack by something." She'd only had a few missions here and they were all in broud daylight.


message 129: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen smiled. "Of course, of course." he said, rummaging around in his leather bag. He took out a torch shaped piece of metal filled with kindling and twigs and mulch. She lit a match and stuck it in. It began to blaze. "It has a burch center, will burn for days." He said, "Of course it's enhanced." He said.


message 130: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki scowled. "You always got the enchanted objects." she said have joking half not.


message 131: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "Part of my job. You should look into it, it's called Theif. Well I steal from the Rich, give to the poor." He said, "Sometimes keep handy object like theese." He said, gesturing to the metal torch.


message 132: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki glared at him. "Lcuky you." she said bitterly. While he was away doing good she'd been forced to steel, lie, and kill. She didnt even know what would happen to her sister if she didnt complete her mission.


message 133: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen snorted. "Near death experiences with guards? Yep, lucky me." He said.


message 134: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki shrugged. "I dont know these parts, where do they let out?" she asked, she didnt like the topic they were on. She didnt like the angry pit feeling she got when she talked about things like that.


message 135: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments "The caves? Well there are 5 tunnels. First, you go in a few minutes later there are three tunnels. Pick the wrong one, you're sent to the dead land. Lots of blood thirsty animals no way out. Go through the right one, you go to the next passage way, or you pick the dead end and just retrace your steps to the first hall. The second one only has two tunnels. The first one you're slid down, under ground then have to walk up a lot of steps to the other side of thees moutains." He getured to the long landscape of mountains. They looked like they'd never end. "The other one, well no one knows. No one's ever came back." He said with a shrug. "The only reason the know about the other one is that he made friends with the animals some how and slipped out when they were sleeping." He explianed.


message 136: by (S) (new)

(S) She frowned as he talked. When he finished she looked at him. "Great, that leaves us a 1 in 150 chance of sureving." she said sacastically.


message 137: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
"You were the one that choose this way Siki." Felway brushed past the two. "Let's go." He finished with a snarl.


message 138: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "Well, actually 40% since there's only two definite death traps. then 50% that we will and 10% unknown." He said, doing the math in his head.


message 139: by (S) (last edited Aug 13, 2010 04:22PM) (new)

(S) Siki scowled. "I dont want you to live memoryless forever." she said at Felway, and followed him, ingnoring Zens statictics.


message 140: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen snorted a little. Attis fit throught the cave. "Erm, I know the dead end is farthest to the right." He said. He glanced at Fel and sighed. "Poor compadre." He murmered.


message 141: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
"But you wouldn't trade my memories for your sisters life." Felway said to her. "Would you now?"


message 142: by (S) (last edited Aug 13, 2010 04:30PM) (new)

(S) Siki didnt reply. She felt like pushing Felway into a wall. She readied a knife and looked at Felway, it was strange seeing him years later, remebering almost nothing.


message 143: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen was taken aback. "Felway. You are being a jerk. I don't think you're Felway anymore." He said.


message 144: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki pushed ahead of Felway and continued on faster.


message 145: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen sighed and followed her, leading Attis.


message 146: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
"Not Felway?" He yelled ahead. "What would i act like if i were, Felway?"


message 147: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki exchanged a look with Zen. She stopped and looked at Felway, she looked straight into his eyes. She shook her head.


message 148: by Kat (last edited Aug 13, 2010 04:38PM) (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen stopped and turned around. "Nice, mischeivous, charming, laughable." He said, softness in his voice. "A guy who doesn't care. Who cares about his bestfriend " he gestured to Siki. "And his practically brother." He said, gabbing a thumb to himself,


message 149: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked up at Zen, what happened to them, the three of them, they were so close. She blew out her torch and stepped into the blackness, she couldnt look at the either of them, she continued on.


message 150: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen sighed and resisted the urge to thump Felway.


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