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message 51: by (S) (last edited Aug 12, 2010 09:23AM) (new)

(S) Siki looked around. "No, you already have a bounty on your head." her bandana concieled her grin. "I think though that Addanc will have to go."


message 52: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen laughed. "You remembered my violoin and got fidgetty. Siki, Siki, Siki" He tsked. "Haven't I taught you anything? Never show realization. Unless you're trying to realize them." He said, chuckling a bit. All his accent was gone.


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(S) Siki looked at him. "Yeah, cause i didnt want to kill you." she said oddly. "And i still might."


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "Good. Because I don't want to kill you. Remember all those years I was gone? When I turned 18? I was training." He reminded her.


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(S) siki shrugged. "I was only train for two, and by the way, when you left, i killed the shop keeper."


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen sighed. "Siki, why do you kill? Do you find joy in it?" He asked her.


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(S) Siki looked at him. "No, i dont want to kill, i never have, but if i dont Addanc will kill my sister, just like he did my mother and father."


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen sighed. "Why did Addanc want to kill the shop keeper?"


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(S) "He wouldnt tell me, the same way he wont tell me why he wants you and Felway dead." she said, eyeing him carefully.


message 60: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "I see, but are you sure you aren't the one he wants dead?I mean he knows about my endless training. What if he wants you to die so he can kill you sister and get what is left of your family heritage?" He suggested. "And every blow you make will just heal." he said with a shrug.


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(S) Siki glared at him. "You underestemate me. He wants something from me, but i dont know what, yet."


message 62: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen laughed. "Underestimate you? No, no, no. I overestimate you, but then compare that to me." He said with a shrug. "You know how many more years of training I have had, and when your my age you'll be just as strong but Siki why would he set you off on an impossible mission?" He said.


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(S) "Its not impossible, i've took out people harder then you. But im not sure, he wanted me to use this." she took a knife out of her boat, coated in poison.


message 64: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Felway tried to follow along in the conversation but it was too confusing and it wasn't making sense. He thought that Siki was on his side for returning for 9 secret scrolls.

He tried hard to remember who was on his side, but couldn't, and the only way for him to remember, were those scrolls.

Felway looked at the saddle of the horse. Perfect. A bright and shiny knife stuck out of a pocket. He made the sudden move and took the sword and put it to Siki's neck. "I can't let you be having those scrolls. Even if you are the real Siki."


message 65: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen blinked but his facce went straight as he looked away. "Is there any place he wanted you to exactly stab me if possible?" He asked. "Like the neck or he heart?" He finished.


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(S) Siki sighed. "Kill me, the scroll is yours then." she looked at him, then pulled off her bandana. "I dont want to die as some masked killer, anyway." she said.


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen let out a breath. "Siki, that's magicians posion. Made of rattle snake venom and cow blood." He said.


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(S) siki looked at him, sword still at her neck. "I couldnt have killed you, Zen." she said. "I've killed 7 people, 7 too many, it was torcherous and i cant do it again."


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen sighed as he lowered her sword. "Yeah and you'll be killing two more when you do that. Why would he keep your sister around once your dead, huh??" He said.


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(S) "To make her do his dirty work." Siki said bitterly. She looked at Felway. She took out the scroll. "Are you sure it will help?" she asked him.


message 71: by John, (~^u^~)V (last edited Aug 12, 2010 09:52AM) (new)

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Felway recognized her, her face, her eyes. This couldn't have hurt him more, and she'd be hurt i he took the scrolls. "Just give the location of the next scroll."
"You'll find it in Kryrok." Siki said.
Felway then lowered the knife to his side. "Thank you for saving me. But im out of here." He took off running.


message 72: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments ((He ran))
Zen rolled his eyes as he jumped on Attis, "Wanna come with to find Felway?" He asked.


message 73: by (S) (last edited Aug 12, 2010 09:52AM) (new)

(S) Siki looked off into the distance. He always left. She tore off her bandana and threw it into the wind. "Im done." she said. She looked to Zen. "Yes." She pulled herself on behind him.


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen directed her to the town. "Same here. Or you could use Attis with me." He said with a shrug.


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(S) "Attis." she said, she felt almost like herself. she smiled. "Lets go."


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen rached out his hand for her to hop on.


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(S) She took his hand and hopped on.


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Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Attis 'neighed' and ran after Felway.


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(S) Sikis hair blew behind her. She loved riding for some reason.


message 80: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Felway couldn't believe what he had just heard. Siki was promised safety forever and Zen, who was he? He couldn't remember Zen, but he knew Felway. And the scrolls. He couldn't think about this right now.

He looked back over his shoulder. The two were up for the chase. Luckily Felway was headed right to a town. He was able to make it before they caught him, and he disappeared into the crowds covering his face so no one could recognize him as the thief who broke in the castle.


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(S) Siki scowled. Hopig off the horse whiile on the run and tore after felway. She couldnt stand crowds, she fought her way after him.


message 82: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen cursed as he hopped off Attis, flipping his hood over his face. He led Attis and played the violin, his one way to get into the palace.


message 83: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki wished she'd kept her bandana, she kept her head low, hoping no one saw her. She appered next to Felway.


message 84: by Kat (last edited Aug 12, 2010 10:07AM) (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen went to the center of town, playing and hoping to find Felway and Siki.


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(S) Siki could hear Zen violin. "Fel." she whisprered.


message 86: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen played a bit more firecely, waiting for them.


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John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Felway heard the playing. "What is he doing? He his just drawing attention to himself." Felway said out loud. If they think that 'I will come go back there for any reason, they are crazy.' He thought. But Felway needed that scroll and with there eight scrolls left the journey and encounters will only get harder. But still Felway kind of felt like he could trust the two.

He decided to only give away his position and not speak to them. He ran past Zen and quickly heard the playing stop. The country of Kryrok called to him, but first he needed to pass the Eillie Forest, and that scared him the most.

He got out of the east side of town, and a mile away. Eillie's dark pines waited for him.


message 88: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki grabbed Felways arm, he wasnt even going the right was. "Your going the wrong way." she said. She looked up at him, he looked so differnt yet the same. He proubly barly knew her.


message 89: by John, (~^u^~)V (last edited Aug 12, 2010 01:09PM) (new)

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"Then what way AM I supposed to go?" Felway yelled not making eye contact.


message 90: by (S) (last edited Aug 12, 2010 01:30PM) (new)

(S) Siki looked around. "East, toward the caves." she said calmly. "Zen knows those ways better than the both of us." She was a bit surprised that Felway yelled, though it must be confusing not being able to remeber much. She thought back to the day he left.


message 91: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

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Felway looked at Siki. "You want to team up with Zen? But i thought you said he would kill you."
Siki stared down at the ground and didn't respond.


((You do the flashback of Siki remember the day felway left.))


message 92: by (S) (new)

(S) ((okay!)
Siki stared into the distance, remebering the day Felway left, she remebered his face, so pure and inoccent. Zen had already left my then so it was just her and Felway, then Felway left. She remebered him smile as he walked out of their little town for adventure, but there was that look in his eye. He would miss her and Zen, and all there other friends. She looked right at him as he left that day, a tear rolled down her cheek, she remebered, as he came up and wiped it away. "Ill always protect you, siki." he whispered in her head. She hugged him. "What protecion without danger." he said, as he pulled away and smiled at her. She managed to smile a bit.

Siki snapped out of her flaashblack . "What? well umm, he might." she smiled at him. "But whats protection without danger."


message 93: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen walked up to them and sighed. "I could hear you a mile away." He said, laughter in his eyes and a ghost of a smile dancing on his lips.


message 94: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki shook her head, Zen always playling around. She looked toward him. "Really?"


message 95: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments He shrugged. "Nope." He replied. "Felway? Do you really not remember? I can't believe it." He said.


message 96: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki nodded. "You barly even remeber who you are."


message 97: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shook his head. "Who could do this?" He asked to no one in particular. "What could do this?" He wondered in bewilderment.


message 98: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked at Zen, then Felway. Then pulled out her scroll. She stuidied it for a moment, she didnt read this language. A puzzled look came over her face, one that hadent in 3 years.


message 99: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen smirked. Confused, but confused about being confused. He thought.


message 100: by (S) (new)

(S) Siki looked up suddenly. "What about a curse?" she asked.


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