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Awesome, thank you.
As the sun is rising in the east, its also setting in the west. This only affected by the size of the planet.Then I read about days in Alaska during the summer solstice and thought, woah, how crazy would it be living without nights. How would we adapt?
I was inspired by this discovery.https://science.nasa.gov/science-news....
However, I thought. What if it my planet was more like a 'magnetic floating globe' caught between two equal gravitational pulls. It could be far enough away that its own gravity allowed for satellites but far enough away that the stars cause it to spin like a top rather than orbit.
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Wow, that's amazing. I've never heard of someone creating a playlist for a character. Montaaaage.Hmm, i think I have rock band in my storage....
Kwame (voiced by LeVar Burton) – Hailing from Africa, Kwame possesses the power of earth.Wheeler (voiced by Joey Dedio) – From Brooklyn, New York City, United States, Wheeler controls the power of fire.
Linka (voiced by Kath Soucie) – From the Soviet Union (Seasons 1 and 2) and Eastern Europe (Seasons 3-6), Linka has the power of wind.
Gi (voiced by Janice Kawaye) – Hailing from Asia, Gi controls the power of water.
Ma-Ti (voiced by Scott Menville) – From Brazil, Ma-Ti wields the power of heart.
Suchi (vocal effects provided by Frank Welker) – Ma-Ti's pet spider monkey.
When you mentioned your favorite element as life, I went back to captain planet and thought of you asking monkeys for help.Heart! Hear me friends, I need your help!
lol.
I am thrilled to be a part of your beta team though =D.
Hamar is a planet revolving between two sons. It is enveloped by continual sunlight except for the crepuscular minutes between sunrise and sunset. Surrounding Hamar are five moons. As the planet spins on a twenty five hour revolution one moon grants the planet an hour of darkness after every four hours of light.An hour five times a day where violence seems to escalate. Both the demand for violence and the need for protection have fueled the creation of guild houses called Gardens. Three main Gardens govern the regions of the world, each by a council of powerful magicians.
The Gardens are elaborate capital cities ruling by tyranny disguised as world hubs of trade, wealth and fortunes to be made. Within the Gardens are sheds. Each shed is responsible for recruiting, training, and filtering out the soil of the Garden. Its intention is to separate the weeds from the flowers while growing each flower to possibly assist ruling the garden.
Our three heroes are Zalazak, Ubika and Sukca are excited to be recruited by their local shed. Having escaped the foster care system they have been busy washing dishes and scrubbing floors of their local shed working for table scraps. Now that all three are eighteen they can join as recruits together.
Sunka wishes to become the most famous magician in the world. Ubika wishes to be wealthy and Zalazak wishes to marry Ubika. Together they vow to stay close and become something other than kids eating off of other peoples plates.
I will use this topic to help design and map out my next novel, working title is "The Sunset Slayer."Chapter 1:
https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...
Chapter 2
https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...
Chapter 3
https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...
Chapter 4
https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...
Chapter 5
https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...
Did you finally complete your novel?Post it here for everyone to know!
Feel free to answer the ones you want. 1. Dark Green
2. Beach
3. Romance
4. Savory
5. Magic
6. Spring
7. Earth
8. Pizza
9. 9
10. Braveheart
11. Vanilla World of Warcraft
12. The ugly betty turned beauty queen.
13. Red Rising should have stopped at book 3.
14. A puppy sized dragon.
15. Patrick Rothfuss
16. Ready Player One
17. Epic/High
18. Tinkering with tools.
Feel free to answer the ones you want. Its just for fun, help you learn about other GODS.1. Favorite color?
2. Mountains or beach?
3. Romance or gore?
4. Savory or sweet?
5. Magic or realism?
6. Favorite season?
7. Favorite element? (Fire, Water, etc)
8. As you are about to head into battle, what would your last meal be?
9. Lucky number or sign?
10. Favorite movie?
11. Favorite Video game?
12. If you could ban one trope from all future books, what would it be?
13. Unpopular movie/game/book opinion?
14. If you could have ANY animal for a pet, what would it be?
15. What author, DOA, do you most wish you could meet?
16. Favorite book?
17. What's your favorite subgenre?
18. What is one thing you like doing besides reading/listening to books?
So the only problem is that it takes my word document and compacts it all together lol. I swear it looked much nicer when I wrote it. There is no edit button so I cannot go back and space things out to make it more easily read. Either way, I hope something in there helps you.
Hi Danee, welcome to the GODS.When you get a chance can you create a new topic under Coursera Reviews using the title of your book as the subject. I've got some time I'll hop over and read your first chapter now.
LOL. No. Actually, my ADHD provides a consistent inconsistency. Actually my first book was like that. The organization was none if any at best. If I went back and rewrote it, it would be such a stronger book but I decided to leave it alone. The main character is very immature and I feel like the writing reflects that.
It was coursera that first introduced me to the 1500 word count for a chapter. This was influential to me because my beta readers really applauded small chapters. They wanted to know that a bad scene wouldn't last long but if the story was getting good, they wouldn't get stuck by reading 'just one more chapter.'
When I am targeting a YA novel I now shoot for the coursera 1500 and when I am doing an epic I make each chapter 2,500 to 3k words.
Are you setting your chapters based upon word counts? Oh, those live forever scenes... try to set it up so that it starts on its own chapter. Then you can dedicate that entire chapter to the one scene.
No worries. It happens. Every program tries its own security feature and honestly it only makes it more difficult for the user. I'll try to redownload it this weekend and start the first chapter on monday.
That link might help?
Beata, I got your message but I wasn't able to open your file. When I tried to see it, it said preview not available. So I clicked download and it said unable to open. Maybe it works schriever to schriever?Perhaps you can copy all and paste it into another program if the pdf save doesn't work. Google docs or word.
Really? Well, alright. Welcome to the GODS lol. Run with it. Let me know if I can be of any further help.
