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March 8, 2013
First Impact: INGENICIDE by Joan He (Query)
Despite all the noise ($2M in two days, guys! Keep it going!), it's time for another First Impact Critique,
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.
The random numbers have favored critiquer Melodie Wright for February's prize. Congratulations, Melodie! And the rest of you r...
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.
The random numbers have favored critiquer Melodie Wright for February's prize. Congratulations, Melodie! And the rest of you r...
March 6, 2013
TORMENT KICKSTARTER IS LIVE!
We have 30 days to raise almost a million dollars, so go pledge now! GO! GO! GO!
Wait. What is this? Where are we?
You may recall I'm a designer/writer for a computer game called Torment: Tides of Numenera, which is a successor to a game I helped make 14 years ago called Planescape: Torment. The new Torment will only happen if we reach our funding goal on Kickstarter. Hence the noise.
Planescape what now?
Planescape: Torment. A computer role-playing game from 1999 that won a lot of awar...
March 1, 2013
8 Things That Are True
1. There is only one flavor of Pop Tart.2. Firefly is still on the air. Wash is fine.
3. No one's ever made a live-action version of Avatar. Also I am an Earth Bender.
4. Bacon is good for me.
5. Eventually, my logical, well-supported arguments will convince people I am right.
6. There are only three Star Wars movies, but they might be making a fourth (WE'LL SEE, ABRAMS).
7. Rivendell is real. It looks exactly like this. It's in New Zealand, and I will visit Elrond there someday.
8. A...
February 26, 2013
First Impact: SHADOWCATCHERS by Kimberly Callard
It's time for another First Impact Critique,
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.
Remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible for either $10 for Amazon or B&N OR a 20-page critique from me.
This
week we have the query for an upper-MG fantas...
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.
Remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible for either $10 for Amazon or B&N OR a 20-page critique from me.
This
week we have the query for an upper-MG fantas...
February 25, 2013
February 22, 2013
What I've Been Doing Instead of Blogging
I hate having only First Impact posts go up, but I am trying to make money at this writing thing, so. Anyway, here are some of the things I've been doing in the last few weeks instead of blogging.
ON TORMENT...
Designing an alignment system. Basically codifying all of human experience and emotion into little boxes so we can tell the player things like, "You're Lawful Good." (Note: We're not using Lawful Good.) FUN LEVEL: High.
Thinking about what makes RPG combat interesting. There is quite...
ON TORMENT...
Designing an alignment system. Basically codifying all of human experience and emotion into little boxes so we can tell the player things like, "You're Lawful Good." (Note: We're not using Lawful Good.) FUN LEVEL: High.
Thinking about what makes RPG combat interesting. There is quite...
February 20, 2013
First Impact: WANDERERS by KayC
It's time for another First Impact Critique,
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.
Remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible for either $10 for Amazon or B&N OR a 20-page critique from me.
This
week we have the first page of a YA fantasy f...
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.
Remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible for either $10 for Amazon or B&N OR a 20-page critique from me.
This
week we have the first page of a YA fantasy f...
February 12, 2013
First Impact: DRUID'S MOON by Deniz Bevan
It's time for another First Impact Critique,
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
BUT BEFORE WE GET THERE, I neglected to announce a winner for January. That winner is . . . . . . . . . K Callard! E-mail me at adamheine@gmail.com, and let me know if you'd like the gift card or the critique.
The rest of you remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible...
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
BUT BEFORE WE GET THERE, I neglected to announce a winner for January. That winner is . . . . . . . . . K Callard! E-mail me at adamheine@gmail.com, and let me know if you'd like the gift card or the critique.
The rest of you remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible...
February 6, 2013
First Impact: THE LEGACY OF THE EYE (first page) by Patricia Moussatche
It's time for another First Impact Critique,
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.
Remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible for either $10 for Amazon or B&N OR a 20-page critique from me.
This
week we have the first page of a sci-fi novel...
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.
If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.
Remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible for either $10 for Amazon or B&N OR a 20-page critique from me.
This
week we have the first page of a sci-fi novel...
February 4, 2013
Torment Concept Art
Hey, if you're interested in that game I'm working on, we've got some concept art up.
This first shot is a work-in-progress picture of The Bloom, a literally living city, with tendrils creeping through other dimensions. The concept artist who did this is one of my (new) favorite artists ever. His name's Chang Yuan, and you can see more of his work here.
This next shot is one of the weapons in the game. Our setting is kind of a Dying Earth setting, where the highly advanced technology of...
This first shot is a work-in-progress picture of The Bloom, a literally living city, with tendrils creeping through other dimensions. The concept artist who did this is one of my (new) favorite artists ever. His name's Chang Yuan, and you can see more of his work here.
This next shot is one of the weapons in the game. Our setting is kind of a Dying Earth setting, where the highly advanced technology of...
