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Surprising Emotions: How Will Your Character React?

I'm honored to have David Farland with us today to give us his take on the importance of character emotions and how reactions can often surprise and enthrall readers.  



David has written and edited fifty
published books and has trained
several international bestselling
authors like Brandon Sanderson in fantasy, Brandon Mull in middle-grade
fiction, and Stephenie Meyer in young adult fiction.




David also teaches workshops, is the creator of David Farland’s Daily Kick in the Pants, an email
bulletin for writers, and, well, has the most amazing eyes (seriously, take a look!) His award-winning YA Fantasy novel, Nightingale sounds incredibly fantastic. I've included the blurb below, so make sure to take a peek!







Surprising
Emotions by David Farland




When I was thirteen, I met my grandfather
for the first time, and he told me about his life in the Mafia.  “I ran whorehouses and gambling joints in the
Midwest, for more than thirty years,” he said, “mainly from Detroit down into
Chicago.”  It’s the kind of admission
that I would expect a person to shrink from making, rather vile and
repugnant.  But you should have seen
him.  His back straightened, his chin
rose, and his gaze drifted wistfully to the horizon.  He was so proud to have been a mob boss.  




I learned a lot about my grandfather that
day, but he spoke little, so the most important things that I learned came from
visual cues.  




For writers, learning how to describe the
physical manifestations of emotions is vital. 
But just as important is knowing when
to focus on showing an emotion and what emotion to focus on.  




As a judge for a large writing contest, I frequently
read manuscripts where new authors spend a great deal of time giving me the physical
cues of emotions that we rather all expect. 
Thus, the descriptions can feel boring and over-wrought, even if they’re
honest.




You have to decide when to focus.




You see, if your character is facing a
charging rhino, your reader will expect that he’s scared.  In fact, if you depict the charge well, the
reader will actually feel some fear.  His
adrenaline will surge, his heart will beat faster, his muscles will tighten, blood
will rush to his brain, his mouth will dry. 
The physical manifestations won’t be as strong as when you actually live
through the incident, but the echoes will be there.




So I may not need to focus on my
protagonists emotions too much in that circumstance.  




But when a character has a surprising reaction to an incident, then
it becomes imperative to document what’s happening.  Surprising reactions can be one of three
kinds.




Under-reaction.  Let’s go back to
our charging rhino.  What if, instead of
having my character turn tail and run, as all of his companions do, he only
becomes slightly discomposed?  It may be
a signal he has faced death before and knows exactly what to do, or that he’s
just the kind of person who loves to face a challenge.  So as an author, I might want to spend a bit
of extra time and effort showing his reaction.




Over-reaction
can also be fun. 
Let’s imagine that our character is a seasoned big-game hunter at the
turn of the twentieth century.  He’s
Teddy Roosevelt, a war hero, with an elephant gun.  A rhino charges.  The other hunters in the party expect him to
stand boldly in the rhino’s path, take careful aim, and bring the behemoth
down.  Instead, Teddy takes one look, his
eyes roll back in his head, and he faints. 
That kind of over-reaction—the fluttering eyes, the stricken expression,
even his slow fall to the ground—might be worth a good page or two.




Wrong
Reactions.  Let’s
face it, sometimes characters don’t react to a situation the way that we think
that they should.  For example, evidence
indicates that one tribe of ancient Neanderthals both ate woolly rhinos—and worshipped
them.  To kill one, the hunter had to
face it as it charged, then hurl a spear at point-blank range as he dodged
aside. 




So how would such a Neanderthal react to
such a charge?  Imagine that his children
are hiding in a cave.  His pregnant wife is
hungry, and god has come to give himself. 
An eager hunter might react to the charge with tears of joy.  He might race toward his prey singing songs
of thankfulness.  And once again, I want
that account to be drawn to graceful perfection.





In short, when
you’re writing character emotions, don’t report every sundry emotion—surprise
us, both with the type of emotion you’re portraying and with your
loquaciousness at portraying it!



 


Nightingale











Some
people sing at night to drive back the darkness.  Others sing to summon
it. . . .




Bron Jones was abandoned at birth. Thrown into foster care, he was rejected by
one family after another, until he met Olivia, a gifted and devoted high-school
teacher who recognized him for what he really was--what her people call a
"nightingale."




But Bron isn't ready to learn the truth. There are secrets that have been
hidden from mankind for hundreds of thousands of years, secrets that should
remain hidden. Some things are too dangerous to know.  Bron's secret may
be the most dangerous of all.




This book has some pretty amazing reviews, and I'm adding it to my Goodreads! If you'd like to as well, you can find it HERE. A big thanks to David for hanging out with us today--I am now trying to think of ways to create a surprise reaction on my NANO novel! 



David has a lot of great things going on at his website (including a boatload of writing tips!) and you can find him on both FaceBook and Twitter.  



Happy writing and enjoy the weekend, everyone!

YA Author Janet Gurtler: Deadlines, Sourcebooks & a GIVEAWAY

If you are like me, there's nothing better than meeting a writer you knew online in person. Okay, okay, there is something better--having lunch with them because you live in the same city, cheering as they release books into the world, and best of all, getting to call them a friend.




Enter my friend and YA author, Janet Gurtler. 






Janet is uber talented...and that isn't just the friendship talking. She's releasing her third book with Sourcebooks, and I couldn't be happier for her! Just a few days ago, I attended her launch party (way awesome) for WHO I KISSED and had to quickly snag a book before they were all gone. (Yes, her writing is that good!)




One thing I admire most about Janet is her amazing ability to focus and write. Since May 2011, she's released 3 books! I am amazed. In awe. And completely gobsmacked that she is able to accomplish so much in such a short time!




So, I asked her here to tell us a bit about what it's like. AND, I have her newest book to give away to one lucky Muser (US & Canada only). Stay tuned and read on!  












DEADLINES by Janet Gurtler








The last two books I wrote were under contract before they
were finished. That is an amazing thing. To be able to write a book that you
know is going to be published. Trust me, I’ve written my fair share of books
tucked away that will never be seen by anyone. It’s tough to keep the faith and
keep writing when you’re not sure if your books are ever going to be published.
Well. I shouldn’t speak for anyone else but me. For me it was hard. So to know
what I’m working on will someday be encased under a cover and available in bookstores
is amazing. I consider myself very lucky.




Writing under contract also introduces a new concept.
Deadline. It’s kind of an ominous sounding word isn’t it?  Dead plus a line.  On the other hand, I remember hearing about
writers with a deadline before I was published, heck even after I was published,
and thinking it sounded delightful and delicious.  Mmmm. Deadline. Trust me, it really is, but
it’s also a little intimidating. Scary. Good scary. Along with the knowledge
that people are going to read the words you’re writing is the OH MY GOD
knowledge that people are going to read the words. So they better be good.  But no pressure. Right?   




The other side of the deadline is the line. And the part
where you’re dead if you don’t cross it on time.  At least it feels that way. I would be
absolutely devastated if I missed a deadline. And it’s funny that no matter how
much time I get, for me it always seems to come down to the last month.  I don’t speak for anyone but myself. For me
it all comes down to crunch time. I kind of instinctively know where I have to
be by that month and when. And then it’s messy house, take-out for the boy,
nose buried in the laptop, busy.  The
story becomes all consuming. It’s up late late at night so emerged in the story
that I sometimes blink at my son and husband and have to remind myself who they
are.  And strangely, I kind of love
it.  I’m not so sure if they agree.




Though each publishing house is probably different with
timelines, I think with deadlines you tend to write to a shorter timeline.  I know friends who have done Write For Hire
books and their deadlines are super tight.  So there’s no time to wait for your muse to
speak to you. You have a deadline, you’re expected to keep it. 




I am absolutely thrilled to be publishing with Sourcebooks. After WHO I KISSED was turned in, I signed a new three-book contract. They are
definitely a publishing house that gets behind their writers.  They are amazing at branding, all you have to
do is look at my covers to see what I mean.  











But branding also means keeping momentum going. And so does
a three book contact. This means that they want books available for certain
seasons. Publishing houses work way ahead of the current schedule.  Sourcebooks had a sales meetings not too long ago, looking at their Fall 2013 line up. So, that often means tight deadlines from
contracted writers, because there’s production and editing deadlines that have
to be met on their end.  An editor is
balancing and juggling a great number of books and doing a million other jobs
to get books out and marketed, and man they have to have awesome time
management skills. 






Fortunately, I can write fairly fast and deadlines don’t
destroy me. Though again, fast is relative. I have writer friends who can write
three or four novels a year.  Others
write one novel in two years.  So when
taking on deadlines, I guess it’s about taking on what you know you can
complete on time.

I am the type of writer who truly appreciates the revision
process. For me the hardest part of writing a book is the drafting. I have an
idea and I know where I want to go but I’m not quite sure how I’m going to get
there.  Deadlines actually help with that
process because in order for your editor to let your write your book, you have
to give them a taste of it. Chapters and a synopsis. 




The other thing that honestly helped with the tight deadline
on my last two books was the wonderful book available from this very blog: The
Emotion Thesaurus. (I SWEAR I did not pay her to say this, lol!) When writing the first draft I was often whipping down the
story and knew I’d need to plump it up and add texture and layers later. Mmmm.
Revisions. 






I found myself writing dialogue or scenes and then marking ACTION
HERE or BEAT HERE.  And later I often
consulted the thesaurus as a guide to help me to round out my scenes, to add
more SHOW and take out more TELL. 




I’m starting in on Book 2 of my Contract and the deadline is
just over six months away. Between thinking, plotting, writing, and getting to
know my characters, it’ll give me enough time to be done. Can’t wait. Best get
started!!!




~ * ~ * ~



Okay, I still don't know how she does it. Perhaps she has a clone. Or seven. Yes, I am sure this must be it! Whatever she does, I hope she keeps at it, because more books means we all win!



Speaking of, want to WIN Janet's latest, WHO I KISSED? Just leave me some contact info in the comments! 




Even BEEBS is checking out WHO I KISSED!




She never thought a kiss could kill... 




Samantha didn't mean to hurt anyone. She was just trying to fit in…
and she wanted to make Zee a little jealous after he completely ditched
her for a prettier girl. So she kissed Alex. And then he died--right in
her arms.




Sam is now the school pariah and a media sensation--how did she not
know Alex had a peanut allergy? Consumed with guilt, she'll have to find
a strength that goes way deeper than pulling off a fastest time in the
200-meter butterfly. Because if she can’t figure out how to forgive
herself, no one else will either.




Want to find out more about Janet's books?  Check out her blog, find her on Twitter and if you like, add her books to your Goodreads!

Physical Attribute Entry: Feet

WANA Commons, Lynn Kelley Author

Physical description of a character can be difficult to convey—too much will slow the pace or feel 'list-like', while too little will not allow readers to form a clear mental image. If a reader cannot imagine what your character looks like, they may have trouble connecting with them on a personal level, or caring about their plight.




One way to balance the showing and telling of physical description is to showcase a few details that really help 'tell the story' about who your character is and what they've been through up to this point. Think about what makes them different and interesting. Can a unique feature, clothing choice or way they carry themselves help to hint at their personality? Also, consider how they move their body. Using movement will naturally show a character's physical characteristics, keep the pace flowing and help to convey their emotions.






FEET




Descriptors : dry, cracked, bony, stinky, flat, arched, hairy, dainty, dirty, calloused, bunioned, rough, tan, pale, long, short, knobby, ticklish, heavy, leathery

, clumsy, loud, quiet



Things Feet Do (and other words/phrases to describe those actions)

Run: hurry, race, dash, dart, flee, hustle, jog, scramble, scurry, scamper

Walk: amble, meander, ramble, saunter, step, stride, hike, lumber, pace, plod, roam, shamble, shuffle, stroll, strut, toddle, tramp

Tiptoe: whisper, sneak, steal, patter, pad



Key Emotions and Related Foot Gestures:

Anger: stamp, kick, run, stomp, crush, hammer, pound, trudge

Worry: shuffle, nudge, scuff, shift, scrape, jitter, tingle, jump, fidget, pace

Sadness: drag, shamble, stumble, trip, weaken, go numb or limp




Simile and Metaphor Help :




Loud: I prayed no one would hear us as we crept down the hall, but with Gayle’s duck feet slapping the tile, it was only a matter of time.
Hairy: He had feet like a hobbit’s: brown and leathery and in need of a comb.




 Clichés to Avoid : two left feet, tripping over one’s own feet, clown feet, feet like boats



HINT: When describing any part of the body, try to use cues that show the reader more than just a physical description. Make your descriptions do double duty.

Example: Dicey saw the woman the moment the woman saw her. The woman sat on the bottom of some steps facing out, over more fields (only these had crops growing in them) and the distant dull green of marsh grass. She wore a shapeless blouse over a long, shapeless skirt. Her feet were bare and caked with earthy dirt. (Homecoming, Cynthia Voigt)



BONUS TIP: The Colors, Textures and Shapes Thesaurus in our sidebar might help you find a fresh take on some of the descriptors listed above!

The Path To 10K In Sales: Strategy, Luck & Mistakes

I’ll admit my mind is blown knowing there are over
10, 000 Emotion Thesaurus books out there in the world. Becca and I are
thrilled, and so appreciative to all the writers and teachers who took a chance
on it. As aspiring novelists, we know just how hard it is to write and the perseverance it takes to create a book. Providing a tool
to help other writers with emotion is nothing short of an honor (sappy, I know, but
true. Writers rule and we love you guys!)




In that same spirit of wanting to contribute, we thought it
might be beneficial to share our focus as we sent The Emotion Thesaurus into
the world. We realize this is a non-fiction book, not fiction. Novels are a harder sell--instead of dealing primarily with what a audience NEEDS like NF, it is
more about what they WANT, and personal reading tastes are unpredictable.
However, much of the strategy we used with the ET can be adapted for fiction, so
hopefully novelists will find value here regardless.  




A Bit of History...




As many of you know, The Emotion Thesaurus started on the
blog as a 'set' of lists focusing on how to show a character’s feelings. Becca and I
struggled with emotion, and when we could not find a good resource to help us, we
created one. As it grew in popularity, readers asked us to turn it into an
enhanced book version. 




We chose self publishing for a few reasons, the most
important being TIME. It can take years for a book to find a publisher and then
be available to purchase, and writers and teachers needed it NOW. We also
discovered someone pirating our content for profit, so waiting any longer to
create the book would be foolhardy. We launched The Emotion Thesaurus: A Writer’s Guide To Character Expression on
May 14th, 2012.




What We Had Going For
Us




PLATFORM. Becca and I have worked since 2008 to build a place
within the Writing Community, providing resources through this blog and forging
genuine relationships with our audience. Our attitude has always been to
contribute and do what we can to add value. It was our hope that our readers would be
willing to help raise awareness for The Emotion Thesaurus book. 




NICHE. Our book tackled a topic that writers struggle with,
yet few resources were available to help. As writers, we knew exactly what type
of tool was needed to help with emotion and body language.  




What Stood Against Us




LACK OF CREDIBILITY. Becca and I were not authors (yet), nor
accredited editors, and certainly not psychologists or experts on emotion. We had
a platform, but no ‘book world’ clout. How could we possibly compete with the
biggies in the Writing Resource field, names like Donald Maass, James Scott
Bell, James N. Frey, The Plot Whisperer, or the dozens of other incredible, best-selling
authors/experts? 




SELF PUBLISHING. While the stigma is lessening, we all know bias remains. In some ways, creating a how-to writing resource and then choosing
self publishing over traditional acted as a strike against us, meaning we would
have to really prove ourselves with readers.




CONFIDENCE. This business is often a murky pool of feeling
not worthy, not good enough.  Without a
book deal in place for our fiction to give us credibility or a degree/subject-specific
education to hold up, we felt naked. Putting ourselves out there and donning
the hat of authority that comes with writing any sort of how-to guide was
terrifying. 




The Scale Tipper




PASSION, BELIEF & TEAMWORK. As writers, we knew people
needed this book. Heck, we needed it! We decided to create the best
brainstorming tool we could and put all our effort into making it discoverable to those who might benefit from it. Working as a team allowed
us to play off each others' strengths and aided in decision-making.




READYING FOR LAUNCH 




Set up a business
Paid for a professional
edit
Hired a cover designer
Outsourced formatting to a
HTML goddess because the book is full of links and redirects
Test-marketed it with a
select group of writers & used feedback to strengthen





MISTAKE:  choosing a launch date and under-estimating the
time it would take for setting up the business (two authors in different
countries is a pain), uploading, formatting challenges, fixing last minute
typos (again, our formatter Heather is worth her weight in gold!)  This created lots of down-to-the-wire
stress. Test marketing the book (while super valuable) also meant enabling changes late in the game. 




First Hurdle:
Launching A Book Without Feeling Like A Timeshare Salesman




For two writers who hate promoting, this was a massive
challenge. Look at me! I have a book! Buy
it! <---our personal
nightmare. We needed a way to let people know about the ET but not be
eye-bulging, book-waving maniacs about it. After many facetimes, we realized that to do this in a way that felt right,
we needed to return to our AUTHOR BRAND: writers
helping & supporting other writers. 




“Random Acts of Kindness for Writers” became our secret plan: instead of making our release date about us, we would do something to celebrate & thank writers. This was risky in the sense that to do it
authentically, we had to steer attention AWAY from our book’s release. However,
we felt the reward was twofold--traffic to our site,
and it allowed us a way to pour our flag-waving passion into celebrating people
who really deserve recognition and yet rarely get it. This event aligned perfectly with our pay-it-forward beliefs, driving us to do all we could to make it a success.




For
brevity's sake, I won’t get into the nuts and bolts of how we set up
the RAOK Blitz (but if enough people wish it, I can expand on this in a future post).
Suffice to say it drew thousands of visitors and hundreds of writers participated, becoming a huge ‘feel good’ week for everyone that showcased
the generous spirits of our Writing Community. :) 




Marketing Boost:  Becca and I gave away a free PDF called
‘Emotion Amplifiers’ as our RAOK gift to writers.
This PDF booklet is a companion to The Emotion Thesaurus and has a similar layout. Our hope was that if a writer found it helpful, they might check the ET as well. (It’s still in our
sidebar if you want a copy and helps with describing conditions like pain, exhaustion, stress,
inebriation, etc.)




Second Hurdle:
Reviews




A self-published book that is also non-fiction? Rough. Many professional
reviewers will not take on SP books, and those that do usually only read
fiction. So, instead of seeking out review sites, we put out a  call out to Bookshelf Muse readers and asked
if any of them were  interested in reviewing the book. After all,
the ET is BY writers FOR writers. Who better to review it? :)




We could not accommodate all the requests that came in, so
we chose some reviewers strategically for their audience reach, and others
through a random draw. 




MISTAKE:  We should have arranged for reviews much
sooner. Due to not leaving ourselves enough time to get the book ready to go,
we were unable to get a decent version out to reviewers until close to launch
or after.




LUCK! Many
people, after buying and using the ET, were so happy with it they wrote reviews on
Amazon and Goodreads.




MORE LUCK! These
reviews swayed even MORE people to take a chance on the book, and they in turn
became avid word-of-mouth spreaders, telling writing friends and critique
partners all about The Emotion Thesaurus. This led to better sales, top
20 ranking in several (paid) writing categories for print & kindle, a strong Amazon Best Sellers Rank, and placement on the Top Rated, Best Selling & Most Wished For lists (writing).

 

Marketing Tactics -
Swag




We chose to invest in a postcard-sized bookmark that
doubles as a Revision Tool.  Many
bookmarks lie forgotten in a drawer, or they end up being recycled. We wanted
ours to stay right beside the computer during revisions, so we printed a ‘Crutch
Word List’ on one side--words we commonly overuse and need to weed out. Our
hope was that by making our swag useful, writers would hang onto it!




Spreading the word about a book can be difficult, so we put
out a call (again utilizing our blog readers) and asked if people would be
willing to take our bookmarks and hand them out to critique groups, or give
them out at conferences and workshops. This allowed us to reach out beyond our
own circle and hopefully reach new readers. 




MISTAKE (?) This was a bit pricey considering the
postage involved (some were sent worldwide), and took time to get addresses and
mail out. We had no way to track the effectiveness. And while I have heard from
people who said they saw them at conferences or were given one by another
writer, we are not sure if the ‘mail out’ idea brought a significant return. But, the
postcards are super handy to have at events where Becca and I are presenting,
and we can pass them out afterward to keep the ET in people’s minds. So overall, this swag was worth it!




Marketing Tactics -
Discoverability




The bulk of our marketing energy went into discoverability. Because we have such an amazingly supportive audience at The Bookshelf Muse, we chose a 'grassroots' approach rather than solicit big bloggers/sites for exposure. In our initial blog post asking for assistance from readers, we utilized a sign up form so the people who wanted to help us could, and in a manner that most appealed to them. The results of this was amazing--so many people offered to help get the word out! 




One of our biggest needs was bloggers willing to host us for a visit. We were overwhelmed with gratitude to see how many people were willing to do this (have I mentioned how great you all are?) and we actually had to change how our form was worded to include offering book excerpts and reblogging previous TBM posts to accommodate the response. We ended up with over 115 hosts all told.




Attempting so many guest posts caused panic attacks, obsessive chocolate binging, feelings of inadequacy *coughs* was daunting. But Becca organized everything (SHE IS AMAZING!)
and put us on an aggressive schedule that would allow us to finish them all within
a 4 month window. We created a master list of topics, most centered directly on content that would tie into Emotion & Body Language, so that each post was
a planned, quality post. The best thank you to those who offered
to help us was to write content that would bring them strong traffic, not just
exposure for us.  




GUEST POST TIP: We did our best to
thank personally every person who hosted and helped. We also shared all links on
our social networks to bring new people to their blogs.  We truly appreciated their time and energy, and their
desire to see us succeed.




MISTAKE #1: biting off more than we could chew. This
was an enormous amount of guest posts (with more requests coming in as a result of this visibility) and so it meant we were both unable to
write anything but blog content for a good 4 months. We managed to get them
done and we have no regrets because of the great exposure, but it also meant
other things slipped. There were a few blogging relationships and opportunities
we were unable to stay on top of because we were so busy posting elsewhere. We
also had a tough time commenting on blogs and getting email written. With such a strict timeline to adhere to, I worried about messing up and forgetting something vital, letting a host down.




MISTAKE #2: not thinking enough about how to keep up
with our own blog AND everyone else’s. Luckily as we met new people at
different blogs, we found folks who wanted to guest post for us. We were able
to give them exposure in return and bring some good content to the blog (LUCK!) So while we made a mistake about
over committing, it worked out. 




MORE LUCK! These
‘seed’ guest posts led to some writing communities and bigger organizations
contacting us. This resulted in book reviews and giveaways that were included
in newsletters and offered exposure with bigger audiences. The Discoverability Tour worked!




Marketing Tactics:
Giveaways




We utilized giveaways to generate interest in our book and
bring attention to some of the blogs we visited. We purposefully did not host
book giveaways during the month of May to encourage people to buy, not wait to
win. We had a few giveaways in June and then more in July, August and
September. Some were bigger exposure opportunities like being featured in a
banner at the Writer’s Knowledge Base and as a prize at Ink Pageant (thanks
guys--you rock!) We tried to go where our readers would be, and took advantage
of opportunities that allowed us to reach beyond the Kidlit & YA writer’s
network we know best in order to create inroads with Christian and other Adult genres who might not
know us or The Bookshelf Muse. 




Marketing Tactics:
Distribution Channels 




Becca and I talked about going KDP Select but neither of us
could see the benefit to doing so right out the gate. In our minds, we wanted
to ask a fair price for the books and have it available across as many channels
as possible to reach readers where they are, not where we ‘chose’ to be. We
distributed widely and included a PDF option for those who did not have ereaders
or who felt more comfortable with PDF format. For those who like numbers,
here’s the breakdown to 10,000 which we hit in September: 
















SW


iTunes


CS-Amazon.com

(PRINT)


B&N


Kindle (Amazon.com)


Kindle 

(Amazon Euro)


Kobo


PDF


Total






May


17


10


243


62


412


25




102


871






June


13


19


503


66


905


50




89


1645






July


13


22


887


78


1334


77




76


2487






August


13


33


893


56


1297


103




60


2455






September


10


32


1036


53


1282


151


21*


47


2632














































































Total: 


66


116


3562


315


5230


406


21


374


10090









*Prior to September, Kobo sales were bundled with
Smashwords. Once Kobo created their own distribution, we uploaded direct. Sony sales are under the Smashwords umbrella.




You will notice that Print is quite strong. We
believe this is partly because many writers like 'craft' books in paperback. We also have had feedback that some original digital buyers were so pleased with the ET, they later decided to invest in a print version, too.




Pricing: We chose
the 4.99 price point for digital, and 14.99 for print. We have not changed the
price nor offered the book for free. In the future we may change our pricing,
but for now it works well with Extended Distribution, which we sell enough
through to make it important to keep.




MISTAKE: not enabling Extended Distribution right
from the start. Originally we didn’t think it would do us much good, until we
realized without it, we could not get onto Amazon.ca. Seeing as I live in
Canada, it is important that the people I meet at events or at my workshops
have a way to get the book. Not doing this before May meant a six week lag of
fielding emails from Canadians unable to buy the book. 




Marketing Tactics: Paid Advertizing




We opted to not invest in any paid advertising. I think this
was the right decision for us, but do see us choosing a few select ads in the
future. 




Where We Got Extra
Lucky




Winning Top 20 Best Blogs For Writers with Write To Done a few months before The Emotion
Thesaurus released. This raised our profile significantly, and at a
critical time.
Once sales started climbing,
Amazon would send out mailers to people who purchased writing related
books, and sometimes The Emotion Thesaurus was listed as a ‘Those that
purchased X might also like’ pick.
A price war between B
& N and Amazon. For the last week of September, the two duked it out,
lowering the book’s price daily until the discount put it under 10 bucks.
Average sales nearly doubled for print (although sales dipped that week
for Kindle).





A Few Extraneous
Mistakes




Not soliciting endorsements. We didn’t do this in advance of
publishing the ET because we were worried about being turned down, worried
about getting the cold shoulder because we were newcomers and new authors.
Now more than ever we are seeing an acceptance of SP, and of Traditional
authors making the leap. Endorsements probably would have helped us
greatly and so moving forward we’ll be seeking them out.
Not believing in ourselves enough at the start. I think we
wasted a lot of energy on doubt because we hadn’t published before (except
in magazines) and we were afraid that while we felt The Emotion Thesaurus
added value, others would not. The response to The Emotion Thesaurus has
been nothing short of phenomenal and knowing that Illinois State
University is using it in their Creative Writing curriculum makes us
incredibly proud. A self published book going to University...who would have thought?





Thoughts to Leave You
With




Looking back, I believe we did two things right that led to everything
else:




First, we created
a book that readers are very happy with, and it fulfills a need in a way that
they are excited to share it with people they know. (We are so, so, SO grateful to
this word-of-mouth. Thank you all for doing this!)




Second, we live
our brand: writers who help and support
other writers. This is who we are! We love writers and have forged genuine
relationships with our readers. When we needed help to spread the word, people
responded, and more than that, became our advocates. There are not enough thank
yous in the world for me to say what this means to us.




If I can encourage writers
planning to publish to do one thing beyond the above, it’s to be authentic in
whatever you do. When you build your platform, start in advance and think
very hard about what your brand will be. Be yourself, be likable, do what feels
right and resonates with who you are. Understand your audience, their likes and
dislikes, and search them out. Use keywords to find blogs, forum discussions
and hashtags that will help you discover people who might be interested in a book like yours. Interact, be genuine and think about how you can add
value, not how you can market to them. Focus on giving, not getting. Trust that
the rest will come. :)   




Do you have any questions about what we did or why? Becca and I are happy to answer if we are able. And again, the biggest, squishiest, bacon-filled thank you for all your support of us and the ET. Your word-of-mouth has allowed writers and teachers everywhere to discover this book! 

Plan Ahead With The HiveWord Writing Tool

You guys know me...I sort of have a thing for writing tools. I love to find & share them with writers. One that I keep right in my toolbar is the Writer's Knowledge Base, a search engine for writers. Yep, think Google for Writers. It's awesome, and even better, customizable to your likes & remembers your searches!



So, I sort of kidnapped Mike Fleming, who is the brains behind WKB (with successful mystery author and Twitterific Guru, Elizabeth Spann Craig). A software developer, Mike creates tools that make writing so much easier and he's here to tell you about his newest website, Hiveword, so please read on!





'Hoping' For The Best


I live in Maryland near the Chesapeake Bay. We have the Bay Bridge to quickly get us across the bay to the land of blue crabs and Ocean City. There’s talk of building another bridge over the bay to accommodate the expected traffic increase over the next decade.





Photo by Jennifer Boyer

 Sounds good, right? The problem is that the public and newspapers are blasting Maryland’s civil engineers for their decision to save money by doing no design or impact planning of the bridge. They’re going to quickly pick a spot, dump off some materials, start building, and hope for the best.



Obviously, taxpayers are furious at the state’s waste of time and resources. But Justin Kidd of the State Highway Administration famously said “We’ll be as surprised as the public when the bridge is completed but this is a great way to allow the bridge builders to showcase their craft and create something wonderful. It’s going to be great.”



 Luckily, the paragraphs above are a dream sequence. While it is true that Maryland is considering another span across the bay the state would not even begin to consider building a bridge by the seat of their pants. Time, money, rework, safety issues, and wasted materials would all factor in to make the project a disaster.

 





How about your novel?


 Doing no planning at all is like the sheer hopefulness of the the fictional Mr. Kidd. You start your novel, go with the flow, write some scenes, and hope that in the end it all comes together in an artful, thrilling, satisfying whole.



Good luck with that.



Going with the flow will cost you time and money. It will cost you time because during the writing process you’ll have to conjure up the next scene when one is finished. Rework will kill you, too. You’ll have to go back and potentially do multiple drafts as you fix the mess you made in the first draft.



How can no planning cost you money? Because the time spent rewriting, rewriting, rewriting is time you could be spending writing another novel. The first one could be out the door making you money while you work on your next book. Do you want your current novel to be your life’s work or do you want to get it done?



So, the solution, of course, is to do some degree of planning up front. It’ll give you a road map or vision of where you want to end up so that you can get there as quickly and efficiently as possible.



Another benefit of planning is that you can make all of your decisions while changes are the least painful as they will ever be. Isn’t it easier to to make a wholesale change to a plotline described at a high-level in a spreadsheet versus making modifications to who knows how many scenes in a 100,000 word document? It’s much more effective and efficient to thrash at the beginning of your writing process rather than at the middle or end.





There are tons of ways to organize your novel ranging from note cards to full-blown novel organizers. I happen to offer a free online novel organizer called Hiveword that you can use today to start getting your novel under control.



Hiveword tracks scenes, characters, settings, plot lines, POV, etc., in a simple-to-use interface. Hiveword is purposefully built just for novel organization so it already speaks your language and is optimized for the task. Unlike a spreadsheet, for example, it makes sorting and filtering scenes super easy. Best of all it’s completely free.



It’s OK if Hiveword’s not for you. I understand. But you can use note cards, a spreadsheet, outline, or any of the other novel organizers to make the process of writing your novel less frustrating and more efficient. The important thing to remember is you still have the freedom to deviate from your outline if a better idea comes along. You don’t need to be a slave to the outline.



The next time you start a novel why not try to plan it first? I bet you’ll be happy you did rather than simply hoping for the best.

How about you? Do you find planning more efficient or does the siren song of just type-type-type work better for you in the long run? (See what I did there? ;-) )





Mike Fleming is a software developer who runs two sites for writers. Hiveword is his online novel organizer and the Writer’s Knowledge Base (WKB) is a search engine for writers. The WKB now has personalized features for accessing the 18,000+ articles on writing as curated by Elizabeth Craig. Both Hiveword and the WKB are free and share a common login!



A lack of organization can sometimes mean the difference between starting a novel, and finishing one. If you've been looking for a way to keep everything in one place to keep you on track, I hope you'll check out Hiveword. Nano is fast approaching, so this might be a great time to try it with a new project!  



Oh! I would be remiss if I didn't mention that WKB also has a newsletter, which features some of the most popular searches month to month, and a ton of other useful content for writers. I enjoy reading it, so check it out if you like! :)




Okay Musers...do you know/use Writer's Knowledge Base or Hiveword? If you could create the perfect Writer's Tool, what would it be?

Physical Attributes Entry: Knees

By Memphre via Wikimedia Common

Physical description of a character can be difficult to convey--too much will slow the pace or feel 'list-like', while too little will not allow readers to form a clear mental image. If a reader cannot imagine what your character looks like, they may have trouble connecting with them on a personal level, or care about their plight. 



One way to balance the showing and telling of physical description is to showcase a few details that really help 'tell the story' about who your character is and what they've been through up to this point. Think about what makes them different and interesting. Can a unique feature, clothing choice or way they carry themselves help to hint at their personality? Also, consider how they move their body. Using movement will naturally show a character's physical characteristics, keep the pace flowing and help to convey their emotions.

 

Descriptors: dimpled, wrinkled, knobby, bulging, scabbed, scraped, scarred, hairy, lumpish, chapped, blotchy, freckled, knotted, dry, smooth, cracked, leathery, creaking, popping, grinding, arthritic, bandaged, weak, soft, rough, swollen



Things Knees Do:



Bend: stiff; rapid; awkwardly; painfully

Stiffen: clench; tighten; support; strengthen

Give out: tremble and release, causing collapse; momentarily weakness which causes a hitch and catch



Key Emotions and Related Knee Movements:


Fear: loosen, tremble, clench together, bring knees up to core, making oneself smaller & less noticeable


Unease: rubbing or stroke knees to soothe, gripping knees with hands, moving knees, shifting the body, picking at scabs to take mind off of feeling


Excitement: stiffen, tighten, lock


Relief: weaken, loosen, soften, sag, give out



Simile & Metaphor help:


Bony: Her bulging knees creaked as she sat, a knobby reminder of her ski accident.


Dry: Her pinched knees lined up just below her dress hem, white and chapped like she'd knelt in chalk.



Clichés to Avoid:

knees knocking together; knees giving out as a prelude to uncontrollable weeping



HINT: When describing any part of the body, try to use cues that show the reader more than just a physical description. Make your descriptions do double duty.


Example: The old man wore a faded Army cap and walked like his joints pained him. With every step, his knees strained and groaned, trying to hold their weight. Like soldiers carrying too-heavy packs, they struggled gamely on, doing the only thing they knew to do.



BONUS TIP: The Colors, Textures & Shapes Thesaurus in our sidebar might help you find a fresh take on some of the descriptors listed above! 

Jodie Renner on Uncluttered Prose

Today I'm at SEEKERVILLE, a supportive Writing Community that is celebrating their 5th birthday. They kindly invited me to join in the celebration, so I hope after you're finished today's post on tight prose you might drop in (and maybe WIN a copy of The Emotion Thesaurus!) I'm posting on Reader Empathy: Catch It & Keep It.



While I'm there, author and Freelance Editor Jodie Renner is bringing us a lesson in prose tightening! Jodie specializes in thrillers, romantic
suspense, mysteries, and other crime fiction, as well as YA, mainstream
and historical fiction. I know this can be a trouble area, especially during action scenes where there's a lot of body movement and emotions being conveyed. So please read on to see the before and after as Jodie gets rid of words to distill meaning!






SMOOTH OUT THAT CLUNKY, CLUTTERED PHRASING


 by Jodie Renner, freelance editor, @JodieRennerEd



One of my main jobs as a fiction editor is to teach novelists how to streamline their writing and take out all those little words cluttering up their prose, getting in the way of meaning, slowing down the pacing, and impeding reader enjoyment of the story.



For many writers, it takes practice to break old business or academic writing habits and learn to write in a more casual, to-the-point, compelling way for fiction. Many of my newbie novelist clients are highly educated professionals, so they especially have to unlearn overly correct, formal writing habits.



Here’s a short example of overly erudite writing, from a novel I edited years ago, with the name changed:



Before: Jason recommenced after the abrupt interruption, with a scowl in the direction of its origin.



After: Jason scowled at the interruption, then continued.



As the editor, I suggested the “after” rewording, then commented in the margin, about my suggestion: “Less wordy, more direct. No need to say “abrupt interruption,” as an interruption is by nature abrupt. And it’s a given that his scowl would be in the direction of the origin of the interruption.”



Here are more examples of taking out unnecessary words for better flow. I’ve adapted them from my editing, but changed the names and details to provide anonymity for the writers. Of course there are often several different ways to pare a sentence down, and these are just possible solutions.



Before: She looked quickly down the narrow street in the direction they had come.



After: She glanced back down the narrow street.



Before:
“Excuse us for a moment,” Gordon said, through clenched teeth. When they were far enough from the group so they could speak without being heard, he whispered, “What the hell are you doing?



After:
“Excuse us for a moment,” Gordon said, through clenched teeth. When they were out of earshot, he whispered, “What the hell are you doing?"



Before: Charles grabbed her arm and pulled her bodily to the edge of the street out of the path of the oncoming car.



After: Charles yanked her out of the path of the oncoming car.





 Before:
As soon as Chris started to rise, Nathan saw it as an indication he was going to follow, and started off back in the direction of the elevator, this time worrying less about his silence and more about haste.



After:
As soon as Chris started to rise, Nathan turned and hurried toward the elevator.





Before:
The car drove slowly through the large complex heading in the direction of a secluded building at the back of the facility. It was located on the shore of the river. The vehicle came to a stop next to the entrance to the building.



After:
They drove slowly through the large complex toward a secluded building by the river and stopped next to the entrance.



Before:
The General was red with fury, his face contorted and looking more like a grotesque mask than being part of a human face. He made no effort to respond.



After:
The General was red with fury, his face contorted like a grotesque mask. He made no effort to respond.



 Before:
As Brad spoke, Katelyn raised up the small burlap shoulder bag she had been wearing since they left the apartment, shaking it to ensure that Gerry would see it—the documents and electronic storage devices that it contained jostling around in its disorganized interior.



 After:
As Brad spoke, Katelyn raised her shoulder bag in the air, shaking it so Gerry could see it, causing the documents and electronic storage devices to jostle around inside.



Before:
Kevin looked quickly back at Tyler, who dropped his arm holding the gun and gave a purposeful glance first to his left and then his right. He looked back in their direction, stared fiercely for a moment, and began walking calmly, slowly, towards them.



After:
Kevin looked back at Tyler, who lowered the gun and glanced both ways. He looked back at them, glared at them for a moment, then began walking slowly towards them.



You Be the Editor:
It’s your turn. Here are five more unrelated cluttered sentences. Can you help us smooth them out? Choose two or three to declutter, then give us your suggestions in the comments, and Jodie will choose one winner to receive the Kindle version of her Style that Sizzles & Pacing for Power e-book, and two more winners to receive a free PDF of the book. (You don’t need a Kindle to read their e-books, by the way – you can read them on your PC.) Thanks, and have fun slashing!




1. “You must never touch anything in this room if I don’t tell you to or if I haven’t given permission,” he said.




2. Donna glanced up at the imposing house and examined the ornate façade of the residence.




 3. Derek looked over at her as well, a questioning expression painted across his face.




4. Jack stared incredulously at the man. He felt bile rush into his throat as his unbridled hatred surged into his conscious mind.




5. “So you killed Daniel too,” Linda spat, her emotions instantly changing from fearfulness to more aggressiveness. If she had a weapon, she would kill the man right then and there.






Ha, I tell you after writing The Emotion Thesaurus, I am itching to get rid of those telling emotions and instead make the emotional showing more prominent, and I bet you guys are too! Can't wait to see what you come up with!



You can find Jodie at her website or group blog, Crime Fiction Collective. Her ebooks, Writing a Killer Thriller and Style that Sizzles & Pacing for Power are part of her An Editor's Guide to Writing Compelling Fiction Series.


GIVEAWAY HAS ENDED--CONGRATS TO THE WINNERS!

Jodie Renner on Uncluttered Prose

Today I'm at SEEKERVILLE, a supportive Writing Community that is celebrating their 5th birthday. They kindly invited me to join in the celebration, so I hope after you're finished today's post on tight prose you might drop in (and maybe WIN a copy of The Emotion Thesaurus!) I'm posting on Reader Empathy: Catch It & Keep It.



While I'm there, author and Freelance Editor Jodie Renner is bringing us a lesson in prose tightening! Jodie specializes in thrillers, romantic
suspense, mysteries, and other crime fiction, as well as YA, mainstream
and historical fiction. I know this can be a trouble area, especially during action scenes where there's a lot of body movement and emotions being conveyed. So please read on to see the before and after as Jodie gets rid of words to distill meaning!






SMOOTH OUT THAT CLUNKY, CLUTTERED PHRASING


 by Jodie Renner, freelance editor, @JodieRennerEd



One of my main jobs as a fiction editor is to teach novelists how to streamline their writing and take out all those little words cluttering up their prose, getting in the way of meaning, slowing down the pacing, and impeding reader enjoyment of the story.



For many writers, it takes practice to break old business or academic writing habits and learn to write in a more casual, to-the-point, compelling way for fiction. Many of my newbie novelist clients are highly educated professionals, so they especially have to unlearn overly correct, formal writing habits.



Here’s a short example of overly erudite writing, from a novel I edited years ago, with the name changed:



Before: Jason recommenced after the abrupt interruption, with a scowl in the direction of its origin.



After: Jason scowled at the interruption, then continued.



As the editor, I suggested the “after” rewording, then commented in the margin, about my suggestion: “Less wordy, more direct. No need to say “abrupt interruption,” as an interruption is by nature abrupt. And it’s a given that his scowl would be in the direction of the origin of the interruption.”



Here are more examples of taking out unnecessary words for better flow. I’ve adapted them from my editing, but changed the names and details to provide anonymity for the writers. Of course there are often several different ways to pare a sentence down, and these are just possible solutions.



Before: She looked quickly down the narrow street in the direction they had come.



After: She glanced back down the narrow street.



Before:
“Excuse us for a moment,” Gordon said, through clenched teeth. When they were far enough from the group so they could speak without being heard, he whispered, “What the hell are you doing?



After:
“Excuse us for a moment,” Gordon said, through clenched teeth. When they were out of earshot, he whispered, “What the hell are you doing?"



Before: Charles grabbed her arm and pulled her bodily to the edge of the street out of the path of the oncoming car.



After: Charles yanked her out of the path of the oncoming car.





 Before:
As soon as Chris started to rise, Nathan saw it as an indication he was going to follow, and started off back in the direction of the elevator, this time worrying less about his silence and more about haste.



After:
As soon as Chris started to rise, Nathan turned and hurried toward the elevator.





Before:
The car drove slowly through the large complex heading in the direction of a secluded building at the back of the facility. It was located on the shore of the river. The vehicle came to a stop next to the entrance to the building.



After:
They drove slowly through the large complex toward a secluded building by the river and stopped next to the entrance.



Before:
The General was red with fury, his face contorted and looking more like a grotesque mask than being part of a human face. He made no effort to respond.



After:
The General was red with fury, his face contorted like a grotesque mask. He made no effort to respond.



 Before:
As Brad spoke, Katelyn raised up the small burlap shoulder bag she had been wearing since they left the apartment, shaking it to ensure that Gerry would see it—the documents and electronic storage devices that it contained jostling around in its disorganized interior.



 After:
As Brad spoke, Katelyn raised her shoulder bag in the air, shaking it so Gerry could see it, causing the documents and electronic storage devices to jostle around inside.



Before:
Kevin looked quickly back at Tyler, who dropped his arm holding the gun and gave a purposeful glance first to his left and then his right. He looked back in their direction, stared fiercely for a moment, and began walking calmly, slowly, towards them.



After:
Kevin looked back at Tyler, who lowered the gun and glanced both ways. He looked back at them, glared at them for a moment, then began walking slowly towards them.



You Be the Editor:
It’s your turn. Here are five more unrelated cluttered sentences. Can you help us smooth them out? Choose two or three to declutter, then give us your suggestions in the comments, and Jodie will choose one winner to receive the Kindle version of her Style that Sizzles & Pacing for Power e-book, and two more winners to receive a free PDF of the book. (You don’t need a Kindle to read their e-books, by the way – you can read them on your PC.) Thanks, and have fun slashing!




1. “You must never touch anything in this room if I don’t tell you to or if I haven’t given permission,” he said.




2. Donna glanced up at the imposing house and examined the ornate façade of the residence.




 3. Derek looked over at her as well, a questioning expression painted across his face.




4. Jack stared incredulously at the man. He felt bile rush into his throat as his unbridled hatred surged into his conscious mind.




5. “So you killed Daniel too,” Linda spat, her emotions instantly changing from fearfulness to more aggressiveness. If she had a weapon, she would kill the man right then and there.






Ha, I tell you after writing The Emotion Thesaurus, I am itching to get rid of those telling emotions and instead make the emotional showing more prominent, and I bet you guys are too! Can't wait to see what you come up with!



You can find Jodie at her website or group blog, Crime Fiction Collective. Her ebooks, Writing a Killer Thriller and Style that Sizzles & Pacing for Power are part of her An Editor's Guide to Writing Compelling Fiction Series.

Twitter, Writing Resources & Clichés

I love Twitter. I think it's because I really enjoy connecting with people who are passionate about their writing and it gives me a way to share all the cool writing articles, tools and resources I discover. Every day I read posts where writers offer insight on some aspect of craft, and it's amazing to read. I learn new things all the time, and man, I want to share them! So, Twitter is my tool to pass things along on the conveyor belt of knowledge.



The funny thing is that I didn't always 'get' Twitter.  In fact, I joined up because the super talented Courtney Summers was talking about it one day on her blog and I figured I'd check it out. I started up an account and...did not see why I would want type in a sentence about how bored I was or what TV show I watched or how my dog barfed on the chaise lounger (again). Back then in 2008, Twitter was still just figuring itself out, and hadn't really started to claim its power as a personal network builder and information highway. So, I did what a lot of people do...took a look around and left.



Fast forward two years. I tried it again, and this time, I GOT IT! Hurray for Angela! Everything became easier--I found information quicker, I met and connected with people in a fun way, and it pushed me into the bigger world of writers and creative types, not just those who wrote what I wrote. I found Twitter so valuable I started a second account. @AngelaAckerman is where I chit chat and post writing articles and @WriterThesaurus became my niche account to tweet links to really unusual resources and tools that made great writing aids. Twitter was the perfect way to 'collect' all these creative and informative resources I've stumbled on over the years. Now, my @WriterThesaurus account is closing on almost 400 TWEETS!  



That's a lot of cool writing resources and tools!



But, 400 tweets is also a lot to sift through, so, I figured a few 'themed' post might help organize my finds! Recently I posted on my friend Shannon O'Donnell's blog, Book Dreaming, sharing Motivating Tools to Keep Your Writer's Butt In The Chair. And today my friend Martina Boone at Adventures in YA & Children's Publishing is helping me share Links for YA & Kidlit Writers (and Teachers!) So, if either of these might help you, swing by and have a look. If you like them, pass them on so more people will discover these sites!



I'm also visiting Book Blather today, home of YA author Marilee Brothers, who is one of the nicest people you will ever meet. I'm discussing clichés there (and offering a small excerpt of The Emotion Thesaurus too!) I hope you'll stop in!




Tell me, have you discovered a strange/cool/neat/helpful writing tool or resource? If so, let me know in the comments--I love finding new sites to visit!

Physical Attribute Thesaurus: Hands

Courtesy of Wikimedia Commons

Physical description of a character can be difficult to convey—too much will slow the pace or feel 'list-like', while too little will not allow readers to form a clear mental image. If a reader cannot imagine what your character looks like, they may have trouble connecting with them on a personal level, or caring about their plight. 



One way to balance the showing and telling of physical description is to showcase a few details that really help 'tell the story' about who your character is and what they've been through up to this point. Think about what makes them different and interesting. Can a unique feature, clothing choice or way they carry themselves help to hint at their personality? Also, consider how they move their body. Using movement will naturally show a character's physical characteristics, keep the pace flowing and help to convey their emotions.







HANDS




Descriptors: stubby, masculine, feminine, arthritic, knobby, clawed, elegant, manicured, rough, calloused, pale, gnarled, smooth, greasy, dirt-creased, fat, strong, limp, dimpled, veined, liver-spotted, bony, sweaty, slick, soft, skilled, shaky, graceful, rigid, scarred, freckly, open, closed, clenched, gentle, bejeweled, uncertain, weak, wrinkled, lined, smooth





Things Hands Do (and other words/phrases to describe those actions)


Hold: grasp, grip, squeeze, bruise, clutch, clasp
Tremble: quiver, shake, flutter, fidget, bounce, quake, tremor
Gesture: flap the air, point, wave, dismiss others, shoo, slap, giving a thumbs up or ok sign, clap
Connect with Others: shake hands, slap on the back, hold hands, squeeze a shoulder, pat a knee, rest approvingly on a child's head, stroke hair



Key Emotions and Related Hand Gestures: 




Anger: slap, punch, strike, hit, shake, clench, curl, pound, slam, push, shove, rip, tear, destroy, kill, choke, grab
Happiness: exuberant gestures, holding others, waving and flapping
Worry: fidget, wring, flap, twist, flit
Fear: shake, tremble, quiver, held out in front



Simile and Metaphor Help:                             



Elegant: Her long-fingered hands wrapped primly around the pitcher, two genteel ladies holding court at tea time.
Knobby: His hands were knobby and twisted—more like sea coral than human flesh and bone.




Clichés to Avoid : man hands, hands that look skeletal or spider-like, fists clenched in anger with nails biting into the palms





HINT: When describing any part of the body, try to use cues that show the reader more than just a physical description. Make your descriptions do double duty. Example: 

We girls called him The Octopus, because of his hands. They were rubbery and cold and seemingly everywhere at once.




BONUS TIP: The Colors, Textures & Shapes Thesaurus in our sidebar might help you find a fresh take on some of the descriptors listed above!