Lit Reader’s Reviews > A Debt of Gratitude: A Pride and Prejudice Variation > Status Update

More chronological mistakes >> a visit to tenants is first announced as urgent, days pass by before the visit is mentioned again and still hasn’t taken place ! Poor tenants, hahahahah

Cheap mistake >> casual mention of a trip from Longbourn to Pemberley to detour through London — WHY? Meryton lies on the North Road, this author knows this, doesn’t she ??

More editing errors >> The initial story says Georgiana was taken from London on the fake excuse of a visit to the modiste, but telling staff she was going away to visit some friends in the country; now Georgiana is telling Darcy an alternate story in which Mrs. Younge takes Georgiana out of the city on the explicit pretense of visiting friends, the modiste rests forgotten…

What is the point in painting the 5 Bennet sisters are brave, compassionate saviors of Georgiana, if as soon as Darcy shows up, they 2 younger ones will regress to a stage of wild lack of manners, disregard for their suroundings, and careless unawareness of their rescued guest !

There is a problem with the chapters, an apparent shuffling that peoduced chronological (or logical) mistakes.

Elizabeth meets Wickham when he visits Longbourn. Later she encounters Darcy on the road to Meryton. In a later chapter she tells Darcy she thought he could be Wickham when she met him (FD)— this makes no sense unless the chapters got shuffled.

This happens again, plus a mixup about a carriage vs riders