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Feb 03, 2014 08:17PM
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(( he casted Jesse eisenberg as lex luthor.)
[[if they make Jesse shave his head I'll cry.]]
(( if they don't I'll cry....))
[[I guess it's a lose-lose situation]]
(( can we please nursed zack snider?* gets on knees begging.))
(( watching Tomorow people!))
[[I'd been meaning to look into that show, but I just don't have time.]]
(( Jesse's gonna be bald.))
(( here's a new story I'm writing.Prolouge
A video comes on showing a man around his 50's or 60's sits in a chair scared and nervous. The man looks straight into the camera and says" I hope this video is viewed by people of a earth that is not in the apocalypse and has no freaks. If it is let me explain history because I know firsthand that history is changed for the worse. Stupid historians mistranslating the Mayan calendar, it wasn't December 21, 2012 it was September 12th 2021. So let me set you straight on the history of the end of the world, well it wouldn't be the end of the world if this being viewed by earthlings that aren't living in this chaos. Never mind my error. At first scientists Thought it was a comet that would just past earth, they were wrong. I'm not exactly sure what it was that hit earth but it killed almost everyone and destroyed so many places. Places like New York, Japan, California, Georgia, and Alabama were wiped off the map. We had thought no was genetically altered, well technically no one was but some of the survivors children were genetically altered. Freaks, is what sensible people like me call them others call them heroes or saviors, they are the dumbest creatures of this world. I mean how could these freaks be heroes!? They are freaks and menaces. I mean there is a teenager that can freeze anything, can make his fingers so cold he makes holes in walls cause the Ice spreads the solid molecules apart, also he can-" There's a crash then a laugh. Then a loud joyful voice says" Oh doc how kind your talking about me!" The doctor grabs a gun and Points it at the person not see able in the video. Then a tall young teenager with spiky blonde hair ripped jeans and a tattered up shirt that said"Take a chill pill bro." The older man presses the trigger but nothing happened, the man checked the gun it had frozen solid from the inside.The man throws the gun down and tries to run but the young man sprints up to him and taps his should turning him into a human ice sculpture. The man then punches the frozen one smashing it to pieces. Another young man looking exactly like the other but instead wearing a leather jacket and ripped jeans man. The tall one laughs" Desmond your a nutcase." Desmond laughs" actually I'm a ice case. Get it Tar tar?" The man goes from a smile to a scowl" I told you ice for brains do not call me that! We are not children anymore! Your Desmond and Terrance, and if you dare make another ice pun I will fry you with the electricity from that camera.God how the hell are we twins!? I mean it's hard to believe by just are personalities were even related." Desmond laughs"Tar tar take a chill pill man and be cool." Suddenly the camera shuts off and a bolt of electricity knocks Desmond to the ground.
Chapter 1- The effects of war
Desmond wakes up his heading feeling like a nail was pushed through his skull and he knew firsthand how that felt, still has the scar. He looked around and realized Terrance was carrying him" Let me the fuck down mother fucker." Terrance drops him then sprints off. Desmond groans and holds his head then feels a gun pressed against his head. Desmond grins then looks up seeing 4 men all armed with machine guns and wearing helmets. Desmond grabs the gun against his head freezing the gun and the man holding it. The others try to shoot him but their guns were jammed making bobby laugh when they threw the guns down. Desmond stands up brushing him self off, as one man charges he swiftly moves to the left then punches him in the stomach knocking him back then sucker punching him right in the face making him stumble then Desmond taps his head freezing him. He then grabs the throat of one shoulder lifting him up, freezing him then throwing him down shattering him.He kicks the young solider in the back of the knee making him fall to the ground then Desmond begins beat him until he knocks him out. A solider charges from behind bud Desmond just laughs turns around and throws the man against a tree" Ima call you Fucktard. Kay? So fucktard here's how it's gonna go your going to tell me your password to get into your base." Fucktard spits in in Desmond's face making Desmond throwing Fucktard down then grabbing his legs freezing them then uses his boot to smash his frozen legs to pieces then planting his foot on Fucktards stomach" TELL ME!!" Fucktard screams" Bald eagle it's Bald eagle!" Desmond breaks Fucktards hands by stomping on them" That's so you can't crawl away to follow me." Fucktard says" Why are you so evil?" Desmond smiles and looks at him" The effects of war." Desmond the grabs the unconscious solider and carries him off to the Super beings HQ. He throws the solider down on a table and says" The pass words Bald eagle." A python slithers up then turns Into unconscious man laying on the table wearing the exact same clothes. Desmond smiles" So viper we are finally ready to smuggle the weapons and use the normos on are sides to win this war!" Viper nods then asks" What are you gonna do with him?" Desmond frowns" I'm going to kill him and bury him." Viper nods" Don't be cruel kill him honorably." Desmond nods then takes the unconscious solider. The solider wakes up in a 8 foot hole with Desmond looking at him pilling dirt ontop of him the solider screams as Desmond buries alive until the dirt silences him as it goes down his throat.Desmond laughs manically wondering if he would uselessly claw at the dirt trying to escape his death.
Well that's somewhat dark. It's interesting though.
Depending on what this is used for, I'd suggest looking at the grammar. If it's just for fun, then the story's fine.Please don't ever post on someone else's rp unless it's something like a compliment. What you did on my other rp is very rude. I was reading your post after I posted on the other rp. Please be patient.
Wow well you shattered my heart thanks . It's clear I'm a horrible writer thank you.
I never said that. I was just saying that if this was like something formal, I'd suggest re-reading it. Don't take it too personal; just trying to help. Usually when people ask me to read their work they ask for some criticism.
Sorry... I did but... Why did I get defensive well I'm me... But I showed you this for a reason... Can you be my editor? There are editors for books right?
Yea...Sure. If you want. I'm fine with that. Why? If I may ask.
Well your very smart I could tell that the first time I met you. You have a perfect vocabulary and amazing grammar and me I have great ideas and story and characters but horrible grammar...
That's fine. Why don't I PM you rather than post. It'll be easier for me. Ok?
Okay! :)Chip and dale rescue rangers
Duck tales! Duck tales!
What! You agree with what... That those theme songs are planted in my head even though I've never watch the shows!
I agree with your references. I used to watch those shows as a child.
AWWW well I wasn't able to watch reruns because around 2005 those shows were rarely on and in 2005 I was was 4!
Well they are old shows....So you're 12 or 13?
I'll be 13 in September! But in 13 years I have had more tragic things then the first 18 years of eminems life.
Sounds serious. You don't have to tell me if you don't want. If you do, I'd recommend messaging me...or anyone can read about it.
It's nothing justHad been beaten by dad.
Most of my family are like drug addicts
My dad's a wanna be drug lord!
2 Cps cases in the past year
((I'm gonna be rude here but))Sounds a bit depressing and all but I'm not feeling to sympathetic for you right now. You know there are much worst things out there right?enimem is pretty pathetic to have less tragic things than that.
