Marita’s Comments (group member since Oct 15, 2019)

Marita’s comments from the Beta Reading Group for Marita A. Hansen group.

This is the page discussion for the first chapter (possibly more) of THE COP, the 3rd episode of PLAYED.

Family secrets come out here, particularly regarding Riley. Also, some more sinister elements come to light in relation to other characters, which progress onto the fourth episode THE COACH. There are two coaches in that episode, one for the hockey team, one for the wrestling team.

I won't be sending out The Cop straight after The Cheerleader. There will be a break due to Christmas, plus I want to develop it a bit more, along with The Coach.

Emma carruthers wrote: "Chapter 5 was just so annoying cause a just want reily to wake up and see what Brooke is really like can’t wait for next chapter. Ps never seen it coming with zuko love it x"

Lol, then you'll love the next episode (The Cop).

Thanks, everyone. I'm aiming to get you the last chapter by the weekend.

Savannah wrote: "hey, so sorry I'm late but I don't have the wifi on in my kindle so I just received the chapter 4 and it was eefing amazing.

It was very interesting to go into Brooke's crazy mind and understand ..."

Cool, glad you liked it :)

This page is for the last chapter of The Cheerleader. The Cop is the next episode after this.

I've sent out Chapter 5 to everyone. Sorry it took so long.

There's only one more chapter left of The Cheerleader.

Emma carruthers wrote: "Can’t wait loved the last chapter. What’s going to happen next and to who!!!! Love it"

Great! Thanks, Emma :)

This is the second to last chapter from The Cheerleader. The episode after The Cheerleader is called The Cop.

Emma carruthers wrote: "Hope you feel better soon xx"

Thanks, Emma :) I've sent you chapter 4.

I'm sorry that I haven't sent this chapter out yet, I've been a bit busy over the last week, along with a touch unwell, so haven't had much time to work on it, but it's almost finished now. Hopefully I'll be able to send it out in the next day or two.

Emma carruthers wrote: "Chapter 3 was great finally Reilly taking control of what he wants. Can’t wait for chapter four. A hope Reilly continues to get braver and take what he wants. Come on Reilly and Lucy!!! X"

Thanks, Emma :)

Savannah wrote: "¡Yay! These was the scenes I've been waiting
Great chapter, Marita
Keep writing ;)"

Thanks, Savannah :)

Here's the page for Chapter 4 of The Cheerleader, and it's from Brooke's point of view. My editor thought Brooke was a crazy b*tch in The Cheat. Well... you'll see a whole different level of crazy in The Cheerleader! Brooke is definitely a bunny boiler.

Julieta wrote: "Omg the temptation ahhhh! But I prefer to wait 😂 I can’t read right now the chapters as I want and I don’t want to let you waiting for a review 🙈"

No worries :)

I've finally sent chapter 3 out. Sorry it's so late, it caused me a bit of trouble. Also, this chapter is R18.

Julieta wrote: "Wow! I didn’t expect that! Omg I can’t wait to see what is going to happen!

I really love how the things are wetting messy!"

Thanks :) I can send through the first two chapters of The Cheerleader if you want them straight away. I will be sending out Chapter 3 to everyone by the end of tomorrow, at the latest. I'm running a bit behind with that one.

This is the page for Chapter 3's discussion. I was meant to send it out today but family stuff got in the way, so unfortunately I didn't get enough time to work on it. I'll try to get it out as soon as I can. Sorry! Thanks for your patience.

Julieta wrote: "Omg I was a little bit lost but I’m here!
I just love how the story is going I need to read more
❤️"

What chapters have you read so far so I can send you the correct next one?

Emma carruthers wrote: "So Lucy’s mum is scary and nuts. And Lucy gave in so easy!! Reilly is getting in over his head I can feel there will be big trouble coming can’t wait. Also great two chapters loved them can’t wait ..."

Thanks! Yup, there is definitely big trouble coming, with something totally unexpected.

☺~Tina~☺ wrote: "What is wrong with Lucy’s mom? That was... man I don’t even know that to say about about her."

Lol!