First Impact: THE LEGACY OF THE EYE (first page) by Patricia Moussatche

It's time for another First Impact Critique,
where we take a look at your queries, first pages, back cover copy, and more.
You want to make an impact right from the start. We're here to help
you do that.



If you'd like to submit your first impact material, send it to firstimpactAE@gmail.com. Details here.



Remember, anyone who offers their comments this month is eligible for either $10 for Amazon or B&N OR a 20-page critique from me.






This
week we have the first page of a sci-fi novel...