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How to Beat Your Fears

Step #1: Get in the ring.

MSFV's Logline Critiques, Revision Round

The entries have been posted for Miss Snark's First Victim's Logline Critique Revision Round.* Each one you critique will earn you an entry toward October's First Impact prize: a 15-page critique from Jodi Meadows, author of INCARNATE.



A logline is one or two sentences that answers the question, "What's the book about?" To critique them, you just need to say whether it sounds interesting and why or why not.



And a big welcome to the logline authors! If I messed something up, shoot me an e-ma...

Logline Revision Critiques #18

TITLE:  Listening In The Snow


GENRE: Middle Grade Fiction

Original critique on MSFV

 

In the deep of a dark Vermont winter, eleven-year-old Nathan Hayes, a shy
stutterer, breaks into the long-abandoned Specter house, willing to brave its
legendary ghosts in order to find the magic charm he believes will bring his
mother home.

Logline Revision Critiques #19

TITLE: BREAK FREE

GENRE: YA FANTASY

Original critique on MSFV

 
Indentured
servant Kiel Reaux has one goal: deliver a spell-stone to his boss, the
Baron of Old Town, and earn his freedom before his chains become a
noose. But when the delivery goes balls up, and lands him in the hands
of slavers, Kiel is sold to a priestess who promises him freedom if he
escorts her through a murderous magical jungle. Caught between the
deadly jungle and the equally deadly Baron who’s tired of waitin...

Logline Revision Critiques #20

TITLE: Twenty-Four Hour Boy
GENRE: Contemporary Middle Grade

Original critique on MSFV






Up all night, every night, ten-year old gadget-maker Hunter
Harris is happy with his freakish lifestyle. Unfortunately, when Hunter reports
a strange light and noises in the night and then a murder next door his parents
question his sanity and Hunter has to prove that he was telling the truth or
risk losing his secret life forever.

Logline Revision Critiques #21

TITLE: Amongst
GENRE: Middle Grade Fantasy

Original critique on MSFV

No one has ever left Verandale…at least not with their body still wrapped around their soul.
But thirteen year-old Enoch believes he has discovered a way to escape.

Logline Revision Critiques #22

TITLE: DEATHLESS

GENRE: YA Fantasy

Original critique on MSFV

When an army of ancient monsters threatens to overrun her country, 17-year-old fugitive, Zee, joins the army to win a reprieve from her death sentence, only to discover that she is the key to awakening the centuries-old goddesses the monsters are fighting to free.

Logline Revision Critiques #23

TITLE: Artashad

GENRE: Historical

Original critique on MSFV



When
exiled Prince Tiridates hears how his people suffer under Persian
occupation, he convinces the Romans to send a liberating force to
Armenia. The Roman warlords have their own motives, and the Persians
will violently defend their claim, but if Tiridates must achieve the
throne or his nation will cease to exist.

Logline Revision Critiques #24

TITLE: The Wanderers

GENRE: YA Fantasy

Original critique on MSFV




Clouds of dead souls are filling the skies of Erion. When a ruthless
scientist professes to have found a solution, Rhanee travels back in time to
find a way to free the dead before he succeeds and claims ultimate power as his
reward.

Logline Revision Critiques #25

TITLE: Jennifer Strange
GENRE: YA Paranormal Horror

Original critique on MSFV





Fifteen-year-old
Ghost Hunter Marcus must protect his family from a soul-eating wraith
but his only hope is Jennifer Strange who doesn't believe she can touch
ghosts.