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How to Pitch a Story to an Editor (or a producer!)

This article came into my inbox a few years ago. It was written for screenwriters, who do an obscene amount of oral pitching (yet another reason I prefer writing books…most of the time your pitch is on paper!). But with summer conferences such as RWA (Romance Writers of America) approaching, this seems like a great time to share an article like this that focuses on the oral pitch. (At RWA and many other writers conferences, writers have the chance to pitch a story to an editor or an agent.)

Some great tips in here. Hope it helps!

“13 Steps For Constructing A Strong Verbal Pitch”

By Melody Jackson, Ph.D.

You love to write, right? You wish that you could just write and have someone else do the dirty work of marketing for you, right? Most writers feel this way anyway. In fact, most professionals in every business would rather just do their business than market themselves. Dentists and chiropractors would rather fill teeth and crack backs than worry about how they’re going to get their next patients. Marketing wasn’t in their vision of their dream job. But it is necessary!

No matter how much you prefer writing to marketing your script, if you ever want to see your script become a movie, you have to market it.. One aspect of that oft-dreaded task of marketing is pitching. This article is meant to ease your pain.

The first way to give yourself power is to really know yourself as the Storyteller that you are! As a screenwriter, you are the modern-day incarnation of the storytellers who used to sit around the campfire and tell stories to the community. When you prepare your pitch, somehow you have to bring your story to life and captivate your audience. Pitching is an art that can be mastered. To Master anything, you must practice. Here are 13 steps to head you in the right direction.

1. Tell the minimium that you need to to get them to read your script.

Tell your story in the shortest way possible to get the job done well. Once you have gotten the exec sufficiently interested in reading it, don’t tell much more. If you overtell, you oversell, and it could backfire . An exec first listens to see if they like your idea at all. Then if they do like it, they want to save themselves the trouble of reading it if it is not very good, so at that point, they are listening to see if there is anything that ruins it for them. Once they are really excited to read it, leave your script, and get out of Dodge.

2. Work out an opening that HOOKS them right from the start.

For example, open with a question that draws them in: “What if you woke up one morning and discovered that your wish had suddenly been granted, and overnight, you had changed from a 12-year-old boy in a 12-year-old body to a 12-year-old boy in a grown man’s body? Can you imagine the fun you could have?!”

Or “Imagine this: You’ve been working at a company for 23 years. Tomorrow is your retirement party. But there’s a sudden hostile take-over … by sadistic aliens! Would you stay and help fend them off? Or would you escape through the secret trap door in the back that only you know about and let the others figure it out on their own? This is the question that Bobbie Trunkman has to face as he . . . . ”

The idea is to get a visualization jumpstarted in the audience’s mind. Get them to SEE your movie.

3. Set the stage, the mood, as you start to tell it

If you can create a strong hook at the beginning that sets the mood, then great. Other ways to open could be something lke: : “This is the story of Bobbie Trunkman, a middle-aged man who suddenly …” Or make a statement that draws them in to create the mood: “When you’re a teenager, everything matters. To Cher Smithers, it mattered more. At 17-years-old, Cher has just . . . .”

4. If you have a special location or time period, be sure to mention it, otherwise you may lose your listener.

Let’s say you start pitching about someone living in a commune – it would be one story if it’s the 1960s and a very different story if it is 2008. Same thing goes for the genre. Mention up front what the genre is. You’d be surprised how most stories could be pitched in several different genres. To test this idea, pitch your script to yourself first as a drama and then as a spoof and see what you come up with.

5. Bring your story to life by adding words that suggest taste, sight, sound, smell, touch, and feel(ings).

“When he touches her face and looks into her eyes, he is overcome with love. He reaches over and picks up a juicy red strawberry and feeds it to her. She savors the moment and the strawberry, but suddenly, a FIRE ALARM goes off. Startled, they both dash over and ….”

The more you can use words that stimulate the senses without being mechanical, the more you will create the picture and the experience in your listener’s world.

6. Use short, simple sentences.

You’re not writing a literary piece here. Your telling a campfire story. Being too literary will distract from your writing. Don’t use too many big words in your scene descriptions. Don’t use complex academic sentence structure that you can prove is grammatically correct from rules in “Strunk & White.” Use simple sentences. Ones people can grasp quickly. Easily.

7. Warm it up with guttural kinds of words, not concepts.

Stay away from psychological terms and labels, and instead show it in the actions of the character. For example, “Sally Bally is co-dependent and this has been hurting her in her life with her friends,’ is psychological. Instead, more on the court would be, “Sally Bally cannot stop herself from trying to do things for everyone around her, and it is driving them crazy.”

In the second example, you get the visual of how it plays out literallly in her life. It’s not just an assessment.

8. Tell your story basically in the order it shows up on the pages of your script, using connector words to dramatize selected moments and to keep your story flowing.

This rule of thumb helps you to organize your pitch because writers sometimes go all over the place with their pitches. As you craft it and choose certain parts to tell, first tell things in the order they happen on your pages. After that, you can craft and tweak the pitch to dramatize the story.

Use connector words like “and then,” or “meanwhile,” and “but finally,” or “However, back at …” to keep your story flowing and building from point-to-point .

9. Know your story inside and out.

Know your story well so you don’t get lost in the middle of your pitch. If they ask you questions, you must have answers. If you prepared your pitch a long time ago or haven’t read your script for a while, get it out and read it again. Then practice your pitch to make it fresh.

10. Keep in mind that when you are on the phone, they cannot see you, so your voice inflection becomes ultra-critical.

If you manage to get yourself the opportunity to pitch to someone, remember there are hundreds of different things they could be looking at while you are pitching, and they may be doing two or three other things. They are distracted from the getgo and can easily be further distracted, so you must do all you can to engage them. It may be a big moment in your life when you get a Hollywood agent on the phone to hear your pitch, but they are basically looking for a reason to hang up on you. But knowing this, you can go in armed with a mesmerizing pitch that you have perfected the telling of.

11. Speak to them intimately – not at them. Listen to them listening to you.

Don’t talk at people. Speak to them in a conversational tone. Not too softly, not too loudly. Match the other person’s level to a degree. Try to connect with them energetically.

Think of it this way: Is it just me, or have you ever been talking to someone on the phone and gotten the distinct feeling they are not listening to you? That’s what I’m talking about. Listen to them as you pitch — it is an art to be able to do it. When you are speaking with an exec, you are listening for them listening to you. If you think they aren’t paying attention, you have to change it up to get them to listen again. How you do that is a whole other discussion on communication, but you can start by listening for their listening.

12. Be careful about comparing your script to other films and mentioning actors that could be right for your movie.

Comparisons can have positive and negative connotations, not to mention they can seem pompous and naive. Being a marketer myself, I love “postioning” things for the market, meaning telling the buyer how something fits into the marketplace and what it is “like.” However, if you do it with your script, you have to have a very strong sense of how things will occur to your listener.

I’ve heard more than one writer say, “My script will be bigger than Titanic.” As soon as those words fell out of their mouths, they lost credibility. Even though it may prove to be true, saying it shows a lack of savvy and it shows that you don’t understand the audience you are pitching to. A producer doesn’t want to hear you say that about your own script. It’s not that you can’t compare your script to other successful films or suggest actors who would be right for it, but you need to tread those waters very lightly and carefully because of the implications. If in doubt, leave it out.

13. Practice, practice, practice, and practice.

Write out your pitch. Read it out loud. Rewrite it. Practice it over and over. Keep doing that till you have nailed just what you want to say. Then practice your pitch in the mirror like the person in the mirror is your audience! Record yourself and see what you think. Practice with a friend till they say, “Wow, that sounds really good.”

If you haven’t done much pitching or verbal storytelling, it may be a challenge at first. But just keep at it. Practice your storytelling skills by dramatizing every anecdote you tell. If you go to the store and someone almost hits you backing out, go tell someone about it and dramatize it. Make it entertaining. Make it interesting. Paint a picture for them. See what they respond to. Have fun with it. Then practice with your script story, and you’ll get better and better. And at some point, we’ll never be able to shut you up. And that’s what we want. Kind of.

Story on!

Republished with permission per: Melody Jackson, Ph.D., publishes “Plugged in Hollywood,” the Bi-weekly E-zine on Marketing for Screenwriters. She has helped thousands of screenwriters polish their scripts and get them read by top agents and producers in Hollywood. If you are ready to jump-start your career, finalize your script for marketing, and have more fun pursuing Hollywood success, get your free subscription now at www.SmartGirlsProductions.com.

© 2008 Smart Girls Productions, Melody Jackson, Ph.D.

Are you going to RWA or another writing conference this summer? Got any plans to pitch? What about pitching tips? Anything to add to the above list?

Happy Mother’s Day – Adventures in Parenting, Story Ideas, and Fashion Pants!

My first kiddo ... all decked out in pink. Maybe that's where it started?

Happy Mother’s Day, all you mom’s out there! This post originally appeared about seven years ago on THE MOMMY BLOG, but I thought it was appropriate for the occasion (with minor tweaks), especially as reading back over it makes me realize how much has happened since I first became a mom (the fact that I now have two kids springs to mind!). Enjoy…and have a great day!

I write books. Lots of books. And I’ve never been short of ideas. It’s the where of the ideas that’s the big question, and one I’m always afraid to examine too closely, lest I see the man behind the curtain and the fantasy comes to a screeching halt. When people ask me (and I get asked a lot!) I usually tell them I get my ideas at Wal-Mart. Cheaper than Nordstrom’s, anyway. And there’s a little bit of everything to choose from.

And I have written all over the board: Superheroes descended from Greek and Roman gods (that whole mythology thing was just a cover story, don’t you know?), a cat determined to marry her master (here’s an update: this one’s being re-released next week! The Cat’s Fancy!), a kick-butt female super-spy mixed up in a James Bondish plot, a Nick & Nora-like couple out to solve a mystery. A woman sucked into a real life version of a computer game, with high stakes consequences: play the game… or die (THE GIVENCHY CODE). And, of course, a Demon Hunting Soccer Mom.

But ask me where I got an idea, and I really couldn’t say. I can give you a vague answer. In some cases, I can talk about how I was brainstorming with friends, and somehow the book finally appeared. But I can’t really pinpoint that actual spark. Honestly, I’m not sure I want to, again for fear that if I look too closely, the spark will fizzle.

Lately, though… Lately I’ve discovered a wealth of book ideas living right here in my house. My daughter, C, all of age three, and brimming over with such imagination that it puts me in awe, and makes me think that coming up with story ideas for twenty some-odd books was really no big thing at all. I mean, if the kid could type, I think she could fill the Library of Congress! (And, yes, I realize that all kids of fabulous imaginations, but she’s my first, so I think I’m entitled to brag and be in awe of the great creative genius that is my child!)

Some of the ideas are so great, there’s gotta be a book in there somewhere. Take chick lit, for example. So many chick lit books have a component in fashion. My daughter, has, apparently, been reading the books on my shelf, because suddenly she won’t wear anything if it’s not “fashion.” (Now, I dress in Old Navy and old t-shirts most of the time—trust me, it looks better than it sounds. So I assure you she’s not getting this from me!). Every morning is a huge ordeal finding clothes to wear to day care because they must be “fashion shirts” and “fashion pants.” Unfortunately (for me, anyway), C’s concept of fashion means that it’s pink. ALL pink. Not pink with white flowers or tiny blue lines or a hint of green stitching. PINK. Needless to say, I do a lot of loads of pink laundry.

But that’s gotta be a book, right? Can’t you just see it? FASHION PANTS, by Julie Kenner. A heartwarming and humorous story about a young woman who has this pair of pink pants and she shares them with her friends, and they’re sort of magic because they fit everyone. And the friends travel around and … oh, wait. That’s been done. Hmmm.

Okay, well, how about this: Angry Superheroes. Yes, you heard right. Why does my daughter like to be an angry superhero? I have absolutely no idea. But she makes the squinty face, and clenches the fists, and goes into the stance, and it’s all my husband and I can do not to totally crack up. (My parents just left, and I think I spent half the visit trying to convince C to “do the angry superhero face for grandma and grandpa!” She never did. Creative, maybe, but not an actress.)

We were at Sea World last week, and during the 8 minute breaks between wave sessions, we played Angry Superheroes Rescue The Good Guys about, oh, five million times. They may be angry, but these superheroes are definitely out to save the world.

That, folks, could be a book. And one day, it just may be…

What are your plans for mom’s day? I’ll be heading out to visit my mom…and bringing flowers. And I’m pretty sure that a “surprise” brunch is in store for me. Can’t wait!

Join me, Rosemary Clement-Moore and Victoria Laurie Saturday May 12 at 11am!

From YouTube to Humor to Amazing Art … It’s Fabulous, Fun Friday!

I was scoping out some of my really old blog posts and ran across these memorable sites. Too good not to mention again!

Happy Fun and Fabulous Friday!

First off, I LOVE this fun Publishing 911 dialogue from Paperback Writer

Operator: Publishing 911, what’s your emergency?

Reader: Yes, this book I’ve been reading has, you know, something really bad in it.

Operator: What is the bad thing, ma’am?

Reader: I can’t say that over the phone. But it’s really, really bad.

Operator: I need to know what the bad thing is, ma’am, or I can’t help you.

Reader: Can’t you just take my word for it and send the police to arrest the author?

read the rest here!

This spoof on March of the Penguins absolutely cracks me up. Especially the part with the seal.

And I love, love, love these 3-D sidewalk art images. You can see more at Impact Lab

Isn't that just the coolest thing?

and this one is awesome, too!

Got any Fun Friday sites to share?

Chance to win a Kindle Fire, Visa Gift card, and fantabulous books!

Kindle Fire! Visa gift card! Julie Kenner books! J.K. Beck books!

Don’t forget about my “the more entries, the better the prizes” contest! Read all about it here!

Contest!!!

Oh, yeah, baby! Got a cool contest going! Why is it cool? Because you guys determine the coolness of the prizes!

Check it out:

SPREAD THE WORD….Because the more folks who enter, the better the prizes!

With three J.K. Beck books coming out back to back in June, July & August, plus a new Demon Hunting Soccer Mom release right about the same time, I’m trying to spread the word as much as possible … and that means great things for you!

How?  Because the more people who enter at Julie Kenner Books & More and J.K. Beck Books (that’s right, two sites…two chances to win!) the better the prizes!

Here’s the deal.

Shadow Keepers, Book 4

The contest will close at 11:59 CST May 21!  No matter what, two winners will win a signed copy of WHEN PASSION LIES from J.K. Beck’s pool of entries, and two winners will receive signed copies of any book in Julie’s backlist (subject to availability) and a electronic copy of PAX DEMONICA once it’s ready for shipment, in either .mobi or ePub format.

Now Demon Hunting Soccer Mom Kate Connor must face one of her most trying challenges yet: international travel with a toddler!

But wait … there’s more!

Once the entries hit 750 at either site, an additional winner is added (for the site or sites that hit or exceed 750 entries). That winner (or winners if both sites hit the required numbers of entries) will receive the Julie Kenner or J.K. Beck prize listed above PLUS a $50 Visa Gift Card. (So enter both and you have a chance to win at both!)

But wait…there’s more!

If (and only if!) the entries hit 1500 on both sites (that’s 1500 Julie Kenner entries and 1500 J.K. Beck entries) on or before the close of the contest, an additional winner is added. That lucky winner drawn from the pool of total entries will win all the foregoing prizes and … drumroll … a Kindle Fire!

And, just to make things interesting, if the entries hit 2500 at both sites, I’ll give away two Kindle Fires (both winners drawn from the combined pool of entries).

So follow the links above to my Facebook pages. Find the little icon on the menu bar that says “contest” and follow the instructions. (Here are the direct links to those contest page apps: JulieKennerBooks Contest and JKBeckBooks Contest

And tell your friends! The more folks who enter, the more potential prizes!

Today is Bossing Day!

Are you all ready to celebrate in the joy that is Bossing Day, the newest Hallmark holiday to hit the shelves.  Wait.  What????

Ah, never mind.  The little elves have informed me that Bossing Day is not an international, national, state or even local holiday.  Apparently it’s limited to my house only.

Yes, that’s right. Today at the Kenner residence, the kids are taking over. It’s called Bossing Day because, you guessed it, today my kids get to boss mommy! (First thing mommy is going to do? Let them sleep in however long they want. Ha! Freedom!)

How did this amazingness happen? Last week, in a fit of project-mania, the girls took a tri-fold presentation board and worked out a presentation of everything they wanted: More screen time (shot that one down). No school during the summer (ah, no, sorry but doing some school during the summer gives us flexibility during the year; trust mom, it’s better this way). Bossing Day, wherein the kids are the boss and they can have, as they specifically mentioned, ice cream for lunch. That one I agreed to. How bad can it be?

Actually, knowing my kids and their little imaginations, this may have been a mistake. Thus the sleeping in. They can’t boss if they’re not awake. Bwahahahahahahahahahahaha.

Today’s Tip of the Day – If you need to squeeze in some extra work leftover from the weekend, give your kids a Bossing Day. Chances are they’ll want to play the Wii all day and you can get caught up guilt free!. I hope… I hope …

I’ll update my status throughout the day (see the sidebar thingie on the left and Twitter/Facebook). I’m sure you are all on pins and needles to know how Bossing Day progresses. Aren’t you? Aren’t you…..??????

Shoulda been writing, but …

Instead, I’ve spent the evening semi-procrastinating by making timeline photos for Facebook and fiddling with the landing page for my website. What can I say? It’s fun! (Though considering it’s Friday, maybe that just makes me pathetic???)

Stupid Kid Tricks-fun times in mommyland

Last night, I was sitting reading at my eldest spawn’s Glee Club practice. Break time comes, and all the kids come bursting out, followed by the teacher. Nothing out of the ordinary there, right?

But then the teacher looks at me, points to the Spawn, and says, “Has she ever done the eye thing for you? We were all totally freaking out!” — at which point all the little girls (the spawn is 10), start to giggle and snort and point and laugh.

I have to admit that, yes, I’ve seen the eye thing. How she does it, I don’t know, but the spawn can look at something and make her eyes vibrate. Yes, vibrate.

It. Is. The. Freakiest. Thing.

And she doesn’t know how she does it (as an aside, we spent a couple of grand on vision training, so I have doubts that this talent is a good thing).

Yes, this is how my child amuses her friends.

But the really cool thing (says the wannabe techno geek) is that I can’t capture this phenomenon on video. I guess she vibrates at the exact frame/second rate!

Ah, kids. Good times. Good times…..

Got stupid kid tricks? I’d love to hear about it!

So psyched! “Dead Friends & Other Dating Dilemmas” is on kindle, nook and Smashwords!

best friends, romance, ghosts and the Texas Hill Country ... and only 99cents!

Check it out on the Kindle, Nook and at Smashwords!