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Casey Nakamura
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Wattles version so I'm not sure how the page #s correspond? Chick, run-on sentences is not a respectable writing style anywhere. Comma usage is something most frosty graders should be proficient at. And using a thesaurus to look up ever other word does in no way make you a good author.
— Oct 17, 2011 12:28AM
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Casey Nakamura
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Stop being contradictory! Are you supposed to be standoffish, or try to fit in? Are you new to earth and ignorant of things, or are you experienced enough to somehow know what A dad will tell his kid hen he comes home with a ridiculous story? And make up your mind; are you in present or past tense! (<-- my biggest pet peeve). And I know these sentences are terrible but I'm reviewing, not writing
— Oct 17, 2011 12:31AM
