Mel’s Reviews > The Introspective Debate of Owen Brody > Status Update

I'm really liking the potential of this, but I don't get who's talking to who and what's happening half of the time. The paragraphs are separated where they shouldn't be (mid monologue) and attached when there's a jump from one scene to another. It takes me out of an otherwise good story.

Brody was something of an accessory; people invited him, he came, and that was the extent of his interaction. Kehkehkeh. I love this already! :)

People, help me out here: hoe old is somebody in the 9th grade supposed to be?