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Li
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Besties...
This is rough. Awkward grammar, actual typos, etc.
Extraneous outfit descriptions and mentions of eye colors
The mystery is decent so far, but the romance is quite insufferable
— Dec 14, 2022 02:44PM
This is rough. Awkward grammar, actual typos, etc.
Extraneous outfit descriptions and mentions of eye colors
The mystery is decent so far, but the romance is quite insufferable
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Li
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To quote Kennie JD:
"It's all fun and games and books and media and tv until you meet a dude like this. And you're like , but then you realize he's always catching a case. Then you realize he has a violent temper always, and not just when it's attractive and heroic to you."
— Dec 18, 2022 10:29AM
"It's all fun and games and books and media and tv until you meet a dude like this. And you're like , but then you realize he's always catching a case. Then you realize he has a violent temper always, and not just when it's attractive and heroic to you."
Li
is 54% done
"The fact that he played it in her presence, the fact that he had taken her to his space, slaept with her, had risked something when he had told her he wouldn't, said much more than he ever could."
Yeah, that he lives that invertebrate life.
— Dec 18, 2022 07:46AM
Yeah, that he lives that invertebrate life.
Li
is 50% done
The 4 star rating continues to leave me stunned and confused.
If this were fanfiction, I wouldn't care about the typos and errors as much, because fanfiction is self-indulgent and a free expression of creativity imo
But once you start asking money for your writing, I feel there's like a bare minimum to uphold.
And that minimum is to, like, read it over a second time to pick out the most obvious errors
— Dec 18, 2022 03:52AM
If this were fanfiction, I wouldn't care about the typos and errors as much, because fanfiction is self-indulgent and a free expression of creativity imo
But once you start asking money for your writing, I feel there's like a bare minimum to uphold.
And that minimum is to, like, read it over a second time to pick out the most obvious errors
Li
is 50% done
The romance has gotten worse, somehow. I need several restraining orders for Deverell for the fringe possibility he might be an actual person.
All things considered the scene where someone takes their own life was decently written. It probably would've been more impactfull if there weren't typo's littered about.
Corvina's hearing of voices continues to be a macguffin.
— Dec 18, 2022 03:44AM
All things considered the scene where someone takes their own life was decently written. It probably would've been more impactfull if there weren't typo's littered about.
Corvina's hearing of voices continues to be a macguffin.
Li
is 25% done
Besties...
This is rough.
Awkward grammar, typos, extraneous outfit descriptions,etc.
The mc and her love interest's eye color get mentionned so many times, I don't want to ever hear the word purple or silver again
The mystery aspect is descent enough up to this point
— Dec 15, 2022 12:07PM
This is rough.
Awkward grammar, typos, extraneous outfit descriptions,etc.
The mc and her love interest's eye color get mentionned so many times, I don't want to ever hear the word purple or silver again
The mystery aspect is descent enough up to this point

