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Daph
is 42% done
I'm only reading because of Lorenzo and Dominic.
With Mynx's success, couldn't she hire an editor or gone over this a little more closely? Just like the last book, this one is riddled with the same, repetitive eyesores: could care less (means you care a little), reign in emotions (who's crowning feelings?), teeth set on edge, etc. It just reads sloppy, and that's disappointing because she's a good storyteller.
— Aug 29, 2014 02:46PM
With Mynx's success, couldn't she hire an editor or gone over this a little more closely? Just like the last book, this one is riddled with the same, repetitive eyesores: could care less (means you care a little), reign in emotions (who's crowning feelings?), teeth set on edge, etc. It just reads sloppy, and that's disappointing because she's a good storyteller.
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Daph
is 85% done
I'm bored with all the back and forth, flashbacks, and soap opera-like melodrama. I do like the added threat, though, and hope that isn't truly resolved.
— Aug 31, 2014 06:45AM
