Cacauli’s Reviews > Elian > Status Update

yes, there's been definitely some progress since Tate Pack (finally an editor on the case), but still the same issues of "make it up as you go along", "let's describe what they're wearing" and "if you don't have a clue how to solve the plot, stall". And the names... Carrington. Really?! Nevin JUNIOR!? Why do I keep doing it myself...

_"he wanted to scream, to tell he was there, to choose him, pick him, anyone"... wasn't this a line from one of "mated at midnight"? The one with the twin unicorns?

This is me giving Vicktor Alexander another chance. I can only hope there have been significant improvements since Tate Pack (oh please pretty please).