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It's always strange to me when an author decides to jump ahead in time when it means skipping two characters getting to know each other. All of a sudden they are bonded, maybe even in love, but I as the reader have lost out in being able to make that same bond with them - I don't know what they know and it dampens the impact, the attraction. Jump time but don't skip the important stuff.
— Apr 05, 2014 06:01AM
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Ok. Some creative bits, some good bits, one hot bit and that was it.
— Apr 05, 2014 06:55AM
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Ok well, this has gotten better. Although, it's reminding me of a short with similarities that was more clever, sly, with impact. Vee shall see... vee shall see.
— Apr 04, 2014 05:01AM
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Apr 05, 2014 06:05AM
You tell 'em honeybunch!!
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Jumping time def works and is a good tool, but not so much in this case, I'm a'feared to say.
Andrea wrote: "Jumping time def works and is a good tool, but not so much in this case, I'm a'feared to say."No I agree cos the story was so short anyway...
*nods* I agree that I knew you agreed lol :D
Andrea wrote: "*nods* I agree that I knew you agreed lol :D"Lol. :)
