kimberly_rose’s Reviews > Sins of the Father > Status Update

Strong ending.

Generally satisfying read.

... And now the sexual can stop. Please. Too long. I'm bored. Pacing: needs improvement.

What the--?! All that build up and you're gonna give me the first full sex scenes IN SUMMARY FORM NARRATIVE? You must be kidding. Not. Impressed.

It's picking up speed now, kids! There was an earlier wobbly moment of "should I abandon this since I'm only enjoying the present moment interaction scenes and not the long, wordy "telling" reminiscing scenes," but now that the two men have met, and the race is on with James' dying pops, and the conflict of attraction complicated by messed-up daddy issues.... Oh! Golly, I'm in!

Umpire shouts, "SAFE!" Okay, redeemed. Behaviour is believable. Very well written next scene, when little quiet Charlie man-ups to the big man and the big man shuts down.

Weak motivation. Why the hell wouldn't Charlie tell James that his father is looking for him?! It's just happenstance that they met on a blind date--*lucky* happenstance they are attracted to each other. What risk in telling James the truth? Maybe make things awkward for a spell cuz James might hate his dad and not want to hear about him while Charlie likes James dad? Couples can hate each others' parents, yanno.

OOOH, big--much bigger than Charlie--muscular, gruff, tattooed, rides a motorcycle? Weeeeeeelll then! And, finally, the two MCs meet. Much too long of a wait.

The parts of the story where Charlie is reminiscing about his dead husband, Jesse, are info dumps. Very boring. Unlike books such as After Ben, the memories that make up who Charlie is now are not delivered in a lively, compelling manner. Just a blah-blah-blah manner. The parts of the story that are interacting in the present make me stop, slow down, and read more carefully. Good.