Natalie Marr’s Reviews > If I Was Your Girl > Status Update

Connection- “I smelled his sweet potato casserole with the marshmallows on top.” I though this was a funny quote because I think that is always the best part of thanksgiving

Appeal to emotion- “ This body, this walking prison has kept me alive for 15 years.” This is sad because nobody should feel this way

“See you tomorrow!” “No you won’t.” This is foreshadowing that Andy is going to try and kill himself

Imagery- “Something thudded against my skull as the dark around me turned red and all the night sounds were replaced by ringing in my right ear.” This is a good description because it is easy for the readers to picture what is happening

Word choice- “I ran.” This sentence is isolated and important. It shows the urgency for the moment

Appeal to emotion- “But guys guess what, she’s a he!” This moment is so sad because she just won homecoming queen and finally felt normal, but Bee told the whole school that because she was jealous

Description- “My cheeks were two red circles like an embarrassed anime character.” I like this simile because it is funny and I can relate to it

Simile- “I gripped the armrests like I was riding a roller coaster.” I like this because it is an easy image for me to picture

Favorite “I didn’t even notice when the needle went in,” I think this is funny because she was so worked up about getting her ears pierced and then she was too distracted to even notice when they actually pierced her ears

Connection- “I wanted to comfort her, but there was nothing I could say.” I can connect to this because I am really bad at giving advice and helping people if they are sad, so I know how she feels