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Sabrina
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This looks like a good concept, but sadly it lacks some serious editing:
characters know facts that they're not supposed to, random data is given without a much needed context, sometimes the dialogue feels like it's missing core pieces.
I'll try to read some more because it could have been great, but I already know it won't fulfill its potential.
— Jun 23, 2017 01:14AM
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characters know facts that they're not supposed to, random data is given without a much needed context, sometimes the dialogue feels like it's missing core pieces.
I'll try to read some more because it could have been great, but I already know it won't fulfill its potential.
