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Weekly Poetry Stuffage > Week 56 - (October 15th-22nd) Poems --- Topic: Apples DONE!!

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message 1: by Kimathy (last edited Sep 17, 2011 01:07PM) (new)

Kimathy Title: Apples
By: Kimathy

tough, red colored skin
bite, juicy white inside it
beautiful apple

another haiku :]


message 2: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Good description, Kimathy! I'm ready for a nice, red apple, preferably one that's been liberally coated with caramel.


message 3: by Kimathy (new)

Kimathy thanks all, and thanks Jan. hehe, I'm not a great speller, i'll fix it!


message 4: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Nice job, Alex and Kimathy! I really like both of yours! And what a coinsidence, I'm going apple picking this weekend!


message 5: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Vivid description, Alex! You've managed to work in four of the senses. I like the metaphorical ending.


message 6: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Yes, the description is wonderful!


message 7: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Moorfield Avenue

The limbs of an old apple tree
drooped like protecting arms around
the carriage house, its roof of tile
warm in the long evening shadows.
A hedge, gone wild, fortresslike rose
along the boundary. A sundial
measured the stillness, the low sound
of yellowjackets drunkenly
darting before the weathered wall,
where apples rotted on the mossed
red brick and on the cracked flagstone.
More apples hung ripe, and they seemed
to dream of being stewed or steamed,
not left in a yard overgrown,
behind a vacant mansion, lost
in amber light of early fall.


message 8: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Nice job, M.


message 9: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Thank you, Stephanie!


message 10: by Jan (last edited Oct 15, 2010 05:56PM) (new)

Jan (auntyjan) | 199 comments Two more great poems...Al yours made me hungry, M yours painted a picture...I loved the imagery....especially 'amber light of early fall'.


message 11: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments loved yours M! Great job Al and Kimathy as well :)


message 12: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Thanks, Jan and Kirsten! I wish I had taken photos of that place before they tore it down. The mansion and carriage house had matching tile roofs and brick. The mansion had a high, columned porte-cochere in the back, and the window casings were cast of concrete mixed with fine marble. When you stood in the entry and looked up, you found yourself looking into a giant seashell cast from the same material as the ornate window casings.


message 13: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments sounds really cool... I always enjoy admiring cool architecture


message 14: by Jan (new)

Jan (auntyjan) | 199 comments Pink Lady


Pink Lady crisp
Pink Lady crunch
Just what I need
When it's time for lunch.

Sweetest, tastiest
Apple of the bunch
Pink Lady apples
Are the ones to munch.

Other apples shine
But I pass them by
Dear, sweet Pink Lady
You're the apple of my eye!


message 15: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments so cute Jan!


message 16: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Jan, I love the metrics! We should start a group in protest of contemporary poetry. We could could call ourselves the Post-Pre-Raphaelites. (Actually, that's not original with me. A friend of mine in Galveston thought of it.)


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments Redemption
by Alexis

Looking past the houses in town,
Trying to follow the scream of a crow,
Brushing past pine trees-evergreen-
Middle of nowhere, covered in frost,
A blurry shape of a leafless apple tree.

Stands alone, praying to God...
"Redemption, Redemption"-it screams against all odds
Knowing it gets to carry the fruit of a sin,
But whom should it pray, Heaven or Hell?

It dreams of the folk of the fae
A wood nymph to sooth it with lies,
The sound of a baby angel's cry...
"Redemption, Redemption"-it screams to the gods.


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments ohh btw im rude i should say:
i loved kimathy's haiku!! i so respect you for knowing how 2 do that lol
Al ur poem makes me want to go grab an apple
i loved M's poem its FANTASTIC!
and Jan you have wonderful way of twisting words into smth. beautiful


message 19: by M (last edited Oct 16, 2010 10:03AM) (new)

M | 11381 comments Alexis, I like the sound of the folk of the fae, though I don't know what the fae is. I like the image of the apple tree, "(m)iddle of nowhere, covered in frost . . ."

Yeats writes of the sidhe (pronounced shee), a supernatural people of Irish legend. The banshee (bean sidhe) is a woman of the sidhe who wails to announce an approaching death. Your line "It dreams of the folk of the fae" made me think of that.

Oh, and thank you for your encouragement, by the way!


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments fae...i thought of fairy, as an illusion as something that it craves to have the absolute...
and yes i know the legend of the banshee i love reading legends xD...though all are sad


message 21: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Good job, Jan, your's was so cute. Um...your's was interesting, Alexis.


message 22: by Kimathy (new)

Kimathy M- very visual, i love it!

Alex- i am in love with this! :D

Jan- cute! :]

Alexis- wow. that is really really good! :D


message 23: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Thanks, Kimathy! Now if I can come up with a story.


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments thanQ Kimathy :)


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments M wrote: "Thanks, Kimathy! Now if I can come up with a story."

i have no idea of a story i'm going to pass this one


message 26: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments I try to build a story on experiences I've had. That way I don't have to make them up entirely. When I was a kid, my sister and I and my parents went in an old pickup truck to an apple orchard, where we spent a beautiful, dewy morning picking apples Dad would later mash up to make cider. Autumn has always been my favorite time of year, and in my memory that morning is like a moving watercolor.


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments so sweet i cant wait to read your story


message 28: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Thank you, Alexis. It's sort of stalled out. I think it's going to be another zombie story.


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments hahaha awsome xD
you'll become the next stephen king


message 30: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments How nice of you to say! I think I could bring myself to write just about anything if I thought it would make me the kind of money Stephen King has made.


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments haha yea he had real luck! i only read Salem's Lot i liked it...i told that to my Romanian teacher( romanian is my mother tongue) and she began babbling how this kind of literature make young kids misunderstand the true values of literature...i think somewhere between the lines she made me stupid...anyway i did like it...i wanted to read The Shining too but time is a lil bit short for me right now...high school senior year...but...

Have you tried to publish your work? It's awsome you know.


message 32: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Salem's Lot is one of my favorite horror novels. It's the best thing I've read by Stephen King.


message 33: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments As much as I love apples and have some ideas running through my head, not sure if I'm going to have time to write a poem this week! Ah well, we shall see.


message 34: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Come on, Kristen! You can do it! Years ago I thought about writing verse for greeting card companies. I was terrible at it, but I found that having a deadline made all the difference for me (I'm very scattered). I still remember some of them:

My valentine is pretty,
And fair as day is fair.
My wife is only gritty.
I wish she'd wash her hair!

Here's a Christmas card verse:

Women will follow me around this Xmas!
But I'll be in the ground before the nexmas
because the men's cologne that I am wearing
exceeds so far the bounds of common daring.
Then friends will look upon my grave aghastmas
and sigh, "That Xmas must have been his lastmas."


message 35: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments lol


message 36: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments That was a much kinder response than I've gotten in the past. Thanks, Stephanie.


message 37: by Stephanie (last edited Oct 18, 2010 02:49PM) (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Lol, M, you crack me up sometimes. They were cute.


message 38: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Dark & Morbid greeting cards. Alex, you could start a new line!


message 39: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments lol, cute M


message 40: by M (new)

M | 11381 comments Go, Kristen! (Four days left to post.)


message 41: by Stephanie (last edited Oct 18, 2010 05:36PM) (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments You could always do Halloween greeting cards, Alex.


message 42: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments maybe i can write tomorrow while i spend 5.5 hours in the dance department office getting paid to do nothing...


message 43: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments lol, awesome, sounds good. How much are you getting payed?


message 44: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments it's my work study job for school, so it's minimum wage. $7.25 or something. Idk, I get $1200 for the year, so it's not that much.


message 45: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments $7.25 a hour?


message 46: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments yea, i think that's what it is...


message 47: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Nice.


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments M wrote: "Come on, Kristen! You can do it! Years ago I thought about writing verse for greeting card companies. I was terrible at it, but I found that having a deadline made all the difference for me (I'm ve..."

Lol, i laughed so hard!!

and yes Stephen King sure knows how 2 horrify his readers


message 49: by Stephanie (last edited Oct 19, 2010 10:59AM) (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Title: Blinding Apple

The sun was bright, and the apple
was a shiny red.

I held it to the sun,
it glinted off the bright surface.

I turned the apple's shining surface
toward me, to admire it.

That was when it all
went wrong.
I screamed.

It was like a blinding flash;
No, it was a blinding flash.
Yet, it was unlike anything I've ever seen.

I'm staring at a wall;
it should be white.
It isn't.

The once white wall,
is red. Everything is red.

That was the last time I went apple picking.


message 50: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments interesting... I think I'm going to try to work on mine now...


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