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[Amauris]

geberally slavery was a time were black people were treat like animals. however there was some slave that had luck that were treat better than others just because they were strong and had more skill. furthermore some of the slave had goal to one day be free to live a god life as human. for instance in the narrative life of frederick douglas, douglas had goals to be a free man thats why he fight to get hes dreams comes true. in conclusion all the people in the world are equal because what makes us different form animals is that we reasoning thats why every humas in the world have to have rigts and a voices because no one is better than others.

[Justine]

You did a great job using the transitional words! And, I can see that you really understood the text The Narrative of the Life of Frederick Douglass.

Now, let's start cleaning up some of the mechanics mistakes that will help you to get an even higher score on the Regents!

FIRST THING: WATCH OUT FOR SINGULAR AND PLURAL!

There are a few places where you made some mistakes with this:

"however there was some slave that had luck that were treat better than others just because they were strong and had more skill."

Should be...

"however there WERE some SLAVES that had luck that were treatED better than others just because they were strong and had more skillS."

Just those little changes make your writing seem much cleaner, crisper, and more academic.

Another one:

"furthermore some of the slave had goal to one day be free to live a god life as human."

Should be...
"furthermore some of the SLAVES had GOALS to one day be free to live a god life as human."

Make sure to check all of these today during your new posts... and please capitalize the first word of your sentences!

Ms. Marjorie and I were just talking about how great your ideas are - keep up the good work, Amauris!

- Ms. J