Little Fires Everywhere
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"And the sublet in Ann Arbor, years ago now, that she'd most hated to leave, because the people who'd lived there had a daughter year a year or two older than she was, and every day of the six months she and her mother had lived there she had played with that lucky girl's collection of horse figurines and sat in the child-sized armchair and lain in her white-frosted canopy bed to sleep, and sometimes, in the middle of the night when her mother was asleep, she would turn on the bedside light and open that girl's closet and try on her dresses and her shoes, even though they were all a little too big."
Things that bother me:
1. The sentence starts with the word "and";
2. It contains 9 commas; and
3. It contains 8 uses of the word "and".
Other parts of the chapter are not quite this bad but are still quite hard to get through. I'm not usually particularly fussy about these types of things but I feel like this prose is not consistent with its critical acclaim. So far the storyline seems interesting but am not sure if I will be able to make it to the end if the rest of the book is this verbose.