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Oh come on Ivie! We totally ship them. This is you we're talking about, and you're the hardest shipper I've ever seen. XD. So many good snippets on here!
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So many good snippets on here!"
Haha, I am the hardest sh..."
That's what I was gonna say....SHE SHIPS EVERYONE, ESPECIALLY THE "JUST FRIENDS" PEOPLE, SO...You can't blame us, Ivie! XD
This is totally an Ivie book. XD. Hmm... I wonder who wrote it...
(a short snippet from chapter three)
How much time passes? I have no idea. The sky begins to darken around me. Lights shine far below. They look so warm, so inviting…
I fly faster, trying to get away from the buildings. Where there are houses, there are people--men, women, children...if I know one thing, it’s that all of them would treat me the same way Father did.
And you’d deserve it, a small voice says in the back of my head. You monster…
Eventually, the blizzard stops. But my wings are stiff and heavy now, coated with ice.
Unable to fly any longer, I suddenly begin to plummet. I try to flap my wings one last time, in a desperate attempt to stay airborne, but it’s no use--I’m headed straight for the ground…
How much time passes? I have no idea. The sky begins to darken around me. Lights shine far below. They look so warm, so inviting…
I fly faster, trying to get away from the buildings. Where there are houses, there are people--men, women, children...if I know one thing, it’s that all of them would treat me the same way Father did.
And you’d deserve it, a small voice says in the back of my head. You monster…
Eventually, the blizzard stops. But my wings are stiff and heavy now, coated with ice.
Unable to fly any longer, I suddenly begin to plummet. I try to flap my wings one last time, in a desperate attempt to stay airborne, but it’s no use--I’m headed straight for the ground…
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“Alex!” I shout, walking over to the front door, “I’m walking to school with or without you!”
“Impatient as always.” Alex says, walking out of his room. He is wearing a grey hoodie and jeans, his hair still messy from sleep.
I open our door. “How about eager?”
“For school?” Alex looks at me like I’m crazy, frowning.
“Why not?”
“Must be easy to like school when you have friends,” he mutters.
“What did you say?”
“Nothing.”
We walk in silence for a while, cars driving past us, people in nearby stores and restaurants turning their signs from closed to opened. It’s not like I haven’t tried to help Alex make friends, I’ve given him pep talks, I’ve tried to make him use a hairbrush, but he doesn’t listen. I’ve only passed him a few times in school and he’s always the same, head bowed, earbuds in. He’s not even shy outside of school. Quiet, but not shy.
“Are you okay?” I ask him for the third time this week.
He looks at the street. “I’m fine.”
“Alex-”
“Piper, I’m fine, don’t worry about it.” He places a hand on my shoulder, smiling at me, but his smile doesn’t reach his eyes, it never does.
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I want to beta (or alpha!!!) this book. Can I?
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Aww, thank you! I feel bad for Alex too, especially since this is before the text messages. >.<
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When the time comes yes!
Ok don't forget me! I want to be first in line. XD.
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She rocked herself back and forth, shuddering sobs shaking her whole body.
No one came to find her. She would’ve been surprised if they had. But the aching loneliness did not fade, and the terrible, terrible grief continued to rear its ugly head over her. Towering as high as the ceiling of this library, preparing to strike.
A living, sentient being.
A monster.
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She rocked herself back and forth, shuddering sobs shaking her whole body.
No one came to find her. She would’v..."
^_^
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She rocked herself back and forth, shuddering sobs shaking her whole body.
No one came to find her. She would’ve been surprised if they ha..."
WHAT IVIE SAID. Evilness to my feels!!! :'( Beautifully sad snippet!!
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She rocked herself back and forth, shuddering sobs shaking her whole body.
No one came to find her. She would’v..."
*grins evilly* Oh, I don't deny it.... :D :'( *is still heartbroken over what I do to my characters*
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A choking sound made me swivel around. There was Hansel, his eyes enormous, his fingers slack around the handle of his satchel. And behind him, Gretel, face draining of color, mouth a round O.
"Don't faint," I managed to tell her, my voice echoing.
"This… this…" Hansel shook his head, watching Goldi as she ran up to the stairs across the entrance hall and ran her hand over the banister. He was at a loss for words, and I couldn't blame him. This was…
"This is witch magic," Gretel breathed. "We have to get out of here."
I replied with only a vague idea of what I was saying. The chandelier grabbed and held my attention; my neck would cramp if I kept it craned upwards for much longer. "Goldi obviously didn't meet anyone when she came here alone."
"You'd be willing to press your luck?" she snapped, but her voice wavered. "We almost didn't escape them last time, Delmy. If we come across--"
I interrupted her. "I'm willing to press my luck."
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A choking sound made me swivel around. There was Hansel, his eyes enormous, his fingers slack around the handle of his satchel. And behind him, Gretel, f..."
AHHHHHHH I LOVE THIS
LILA
ARGHHHHHHHHHHH SO GREAT
TERRIFYING INTRIGUING I NEED MORE NOW
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Faith... *sighs* I don't know what I'm going to do with you, but these excerpts you put up have bean MEAN.Lila, that excerpt is amazing. I am so intrigued!
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Lila, that excerpt is amazing. I am so intrigued!"
*snickers* This is a very dark book two. I'm not apologizing. I'll /try/ to find something a little less angsty from one of the characters' sassy evil sister soon....XD Give y'all a break....
Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith... *sighs* I don't know what I'm going to do with you, but these excerpts you put up have bean MEAN.Lila, that excerpt is amazing. I am so intrigued!"
*snickers* This is a ve..."
I can see that. I would say that book four in My Time in Amar gets really dark. Not sure how well that will work out since it's the last book in the series as well, but I guess I'll find out when I write it.... A break would be very much appreciated ;P
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Lila, that excerpt is amazing. I am so intrigued..."
NICKI.....you be careful with those books....XD I WILL BE WAITING. Give me allllllll the dark series finales. <3
(*whispers* My series finale is incredibly dark....)
Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith... *sighs* I don't know what I'm going to do with you, but these excerpts you put up have bean MEAN.Lila, that excerpt is amazing. I a..."
Haha! Well, let's just say that when I told my sister about my idea for that book... well, she was mad at me for quite some time.
And *gulps* incredibly dark you say? How long is your series planning on being anyway?
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Lila, t..."
Four books, actually....the one I'm working on right now is the second, and it's pretty dark too...the whole thing is just getting progressively darker as it goes. So. If you think the snippets I'm sharing now are dark....JUST YOU WAIT XD
Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith... *sighs* I don't know what I'm going to do with you, but these excerpts you put up have bean ..."Cool! Mine is four books, as well. And coincidentally I'm working on my second book, too ;P
And... um... I'm not sure that's what I want to hear especially since I'm already emotionally tied to Rishatta and I HAVEN'T EVEN READ ABOUT HIM YET!!! YOU BE NICE TO HIM, FAITH!!!
Ivie wrote: "PEEPS, I LOVE DARK BOOKS, SO HURRY UP SO I CAN BUY THEM ALREADY!!! (Now that I have a job, my book budget should be building soon. XD)#allthedarkboos XD"
I know, there's probably something deeply wrong with me because I like dark books XD
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I WILL WRITE IT GUYS. I'M WORKING ON IT NOW. XD
Lila wrote: "And I'll write mine... *evil chuckling*"You'd better make sure that you do... and don't laugh like that, Lila, it's unsettling XD
Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "*evil cackling* I MAKE NO PROMISES, NICKI! NONE AT ALL! *laughs like Yzma in Emperor's New Groove* *turns into a kitten*I WILL WRITE IT GUYS. I'M WORKING ON IT NOW. XD"
And then you'll probably choke on a hairball. But seriously you would deserve it if you would just so heartlessly be cruel to Rishatta.
GOOD!!! I'm actually trying to write my second book right now, I know, finally O.O no more procrastination. Spring Break is here I plan on getting a good chunk done.
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Sorry not sorry, Nicki. *evil laughter intensifies*
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I WILL WRITE IT GUYS. I'M WORKING ON IT NOW. XD"..."
*snickering intensifies*
SECOND BOOK! YES! How dare you give me that cliffhanger, Nicki! How dare you??????!?!!!!!!!!
Long snippet of D and B?Jenni and I both greeted the girls at the door. The social worker was right behind them, and she had been right. With matted and tangled curls, stains of who knows what on their clothes, and a streak on the 3 year old’s face where she’d swiped a runny nose.
The older one placed a protective arm around her sister, “We don’t know where our dad is, so don’t you go asking us too.”
Jenni smiled and knelt down, “Then we won’t ask you. Welcome to our home dears.”
The 3 year old raised her nose and sniffed, “Smells good,” and she walked right in, looking side to side, exploring with her blue eyes.
The 8 year old was more cautious, but followed her in.
“Thank you for taking them on such a short notice. My name’s Kelly.” The young social worker stuck out her hand, “Like I said earlier, there was no heat and it was freezing in that house.”
“Dad probably forgot to pay the bill again.” The 8 year old offered.
Kelly nodded and introduced us, “Gracie, Tabby, this is Alex and Jenni Johnson. You are going to be staying in their home until we find your daddy.”
Gracie looked at us and pointed to herself, “My name’s Lily Grace, but I’m called Gracie.” She then pointed to her sister, who’s nose was still in the air sniffing, “She’s Tabby. Her real name is Zoey, but she was always playing to be a cat, so we just call her Tabby.”
I smiled and offered my hand, “Nice to meet you. I’m Alex.” She shook firmly and stepped back to stand beside Tabby.
“I’m Jenni,” Jenni waved, smiling, “Do you girls want a bath so we can have dinner?”
Tabby’s eyes went wide, and Gracie nodded enthusiastically.
Jenni took their little hands and guided them to the bathroom, leaving me to make arrangements with Kelly.
“So they don’t seem to have been abused in any way. Physically and mentally well. Gracie is a bit wary, which is understandable, strangers coming in and taking them to other strangers, but she did admit that they had been alone for almost two weeks.” She looked pained, “They’d lived on cereal and random canned things in their pantry until they ran out. Tabby was fairly excited to see someone beside Gracie.”
I nodded, trying to keep it all in mind.
“They talked quite a bit on the way here. Tabby loves cats, obviously. Gracie is a huge fan of My Little Pony. Neither of them have ever been in daycare, and Gracie hasn’t started school yet. I was able to get a couple of things from their house before we came here, but only about one outfit each and they packed a couple of toys.” She jerked a thumb behind her, “The box is still in the car. I’ll go ahead and bring it in.”
“Thank you.” I said, “Did either of them mention anything about their parents?”
Kelly shook her head, “They said a couple of random facts about their dad, he works, he’s not home a lot, and he loves Redsox. Never mentioned anything about their mom. I assume they don’t know her. Anyway. I’m gonna go get that box. You guys will probably need to go shop for the other things they will need.”
“No problem.” I said, “It’s a good way to get to know kids.”
She agreed, and went to retrieve the box.
Lila wrote: "Haha, Faith, love the Yzma image!!!Sorry not sorry, Nicki. *evil laughter intensifies*"
That didn't feel like a proper apology! All right so, I've officially adopted Hansel and Delmy... and Peter and Tink. So any bad things you want to do can happen solely to Goldi and Gretel. Understood??
Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "*evil cackling* I MAKE NO PROMISES, NICKI! NONE AT ALL! *laughs like Yzma in Emperor's New Groove* *turns into a kitten*I WILL WRITE IT GUYS. I'M WORKING ..."
Yup! Second book, or as I like to call it, my problem child XD
And as for the cliffhanger well... Mwahaha! (and now you guys got me laughing evilly, too XD)
Though since I'm actually a nice person I'll put up a snippet of the first paragraph in Time of Trepidation so here it is...
Falling off a cliff has never been high on my list of things to do. But I’m sure that’s understandable.
Ivie wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Lila wrote: "Haha, Faith, love the Yzma image!!!Sorry not sorry, Nicki. *evil laughter intensifies*"
That didn't feel like a proper apology! All right so, I've officially adopted H..."
Why does it have to be awkward? We could be like fellow surrogate mothers, or maybe we could each call ourselves their aunts XD
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YES! And it’s amazing!!!!
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I WILL ..."
BUT WHO SAID THAT?????? *shrieks*
Ivie wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Ivie wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Lila wrote: "Haha, Faith, love the Yzma image!!!Sorry not sorry, Nicki. *evil laughter intensifies*"
That didn't feel like a proper apology! All right so..."
They seem pretty precious XD
Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "Nicki wrote: "Faith/Florid Sword wrote: "*evil cackling* I MAKE NO PROMISES, NICKI! NONE AT ALL! *laughs like Yzma in Emperor's New Groove* *turns into a ki..."Um... I'm not THAT nice XD sorry not sorry ;P
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What's this talk about adopting my cinnamon rolls??? xD <3 <3 (you guys make me grin <3)
And Ivie, I think I know who you ship...
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What's this talk about adopting my cinnamon ro..."
*shrieks* HANSEL AND DELMY!!!!!!! *falls over promptly*
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What's..."
*rubs hands together* I WILL DEDUCE IT, IVIE.....
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I won't ask, but just know that I'm #curious!!! Tell me if you want, but I won't try to pry it out of you like Faith did. ^_^
@Faith - Okay, so I know your ship too. xD
*grins at both of you because I know everything and you don't*
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Yep, that’s what I was doing...it’s too early for me to try to have a ship yet...😂
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