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only two!!!
ugh, everyone calls me a book-aholic cause i can sit there all day like a statue and read.
ugh, i didn't even know when it was posted. my laptop broke.
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patience is a virtue.....becky...i think we are missin out...everyone is in australia!!!!!!
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LOL bec i'm here srry had 2 do sum stuff
hey, uh, gtg:) Seeya guys. gd luck with the books:)
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RACHEL U NEED TO WRITE IM GETTING BORED
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quick som1 catch me up :P
Rachel wrote: ":) so what hav i missed???quick som1 catch me up :P"
nothin.....becky feels bad for givin a review....and thats pretty much it
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RACHEL U NEED TO WRITE IM GETTING BORED"
Oh, srry school's hectic but i'll see what i can do
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Rebecka wrote: "I MISSED HER MOREi>ok...
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Were u really mean?? or were u just honest......
Rachel wrote: "Rebecka wrote: "um i had to reveiw a story, that sucked and i felt bad because i was mean"Were u really mean?? or were u just honest......"
everyone says honest!
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Okay, so here’s my review of Miriam’s book, the untitled book. it’s a little harsh, and I’m sorry about that but here it is. Miriam I see a lot of potential in your writing, but u keep it to simple, no twists, no getting to know the characters. You’re a fantastic writer, and you should continue that story, but u need to make it unique. What’s so different about the characters? When I read your book, it should make me not want to stop, you need to add some details, and some twists. U need to stretch it out.
Plot: 25/50
I don’t see any plot, I know the suddenly fall in love, but shouldn’t you space it out more, they meet and then they date. The end?
Description: 30/40
the description that u put all in all was great but you could have added more
For example: He walked her to her class, which was chemistry.
He walked her to her class, with a little hop in his step, when he approached the class it happened to be chemistry, go figure.
Add a little more, or over exaggerate, make it unique , make it your own.
Character Development: 20/40
I didn’t know your characters that well, there wasn’t a lot of change to them, they fell in love so quickly, that u didn’t really tell me much about the character.
Twists & Effect: 10/40
there was no twist until the last sentence.
It was a night they would never forget. Or is it?
There was really no other twists.
Dialogue & Emotion: 10/35
I saw a little dialogue. And there was very little emotion. your characters don’t react to each others emotion.
Mechanics:34 /35
the grammar and spelling is almost flawless , and so is the flow of your sentences.
It is really good.
Originality: 5/10
I’ve read so many love storys that are love at first sight and you need to make yours unique show people its different, make them want to read your story.
Overall Score: 139/250
Notes: keep it up girly
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Okay, so here’s my review of Miriam’s book, the untitled book. it’s a little harsh, and I’m sorry about that but here it is. Miriam I see a lot of potential in your writing, b..."
I don't think is really that mean, it's honest.
I think if u want people to review ur work u shud b able to accept their constructive critism
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n e way i've been bummed cos in Oz we get Blood Promise on the 26th of aug but then i was think bout it 2day, our 26th is acutally the 25th in the Us
so we actually sorta get it on the same day.......
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i was insulted lol hahaha
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i reckon it looks awesome :P
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well ur no fun lol
bec wbu???
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good luck and c ya =D
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i wudn't know where 2 begin...
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so wbu?? wat u been up 2??
u and bec still fighting or r u freinds now??
nothin....woke up at about noon over here.....and i think we ar....haha....it don't seem like she is mad at me anymore...
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lol, well that's good :P
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well.....its summer vacation over here....and school doesn't start until august...24th to be exact...so...august-june...we are in school and june-the middle of august...we are outta school
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ur summer break confuses me, cos we only get 2 week holidays (hols)
i 4get that u guys get longer than us.... hummph that's not fair haha
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