After I read it, I felt like Notable American Women rewired my brain. When working with unusual sentences that can achieve this effect do you do more in initial drafts or in extensive revision?
Thanks, Dan. It's been a while since Notable American Women came out, so my memory is probably suspect. But I'm pretty sure I wrote some passages of that book quickly. The thicker, weirder sentences take a lot of labor. There's no way to just spew that stuff out, though I wish I could. I guess I do a lot of fine-tuning and cutting, until things start to sound ok. I am ridiculously slow.