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"I'm sorry Aldan."
sorry,
"What happened?" He asked her.
he
hard, wooden bench
No comma
Brannon and Draeson spent a couple of hours of exploring the riskier parts of the city and talking to those who lived there before they reached this place.
had spent... hours exploring
"Draeson can you pass me a lantern?"
Draeson, can
well she's a child.
well,
would be nice to have you just visit for fun"
."
"Good to see you Shalyn.
you,
sleek, gold silk
No comma
their outfits complimented without matching.
complemented
like a colorful links in a chain.
Omit first "a"
She gestured to Risen that held him.
to the
"How long have you known Magus Draeson."
?
Nycol threw the stone to the ground and shattered,
and it
Brannon ran to fork in the corridor
to a
"Even just a few drops spilled blood
drops of
Brannon ran his gaze along crease
along the
small, red moth.
No comma
"I know.
"
him - and their family relationship - further. She'd
Needs em dashes throughout
The difference here, is
No comma. Also, was.
She changed in her native tongue,
chanted
and then leaned forward and to breathe
Change of grammatical direction mid-sentence
"What enemies to Donal and Lira have?"
do
Bad enough that his parents corpses
parents'
"Yes sir.
Yes,
the top most chunk of rock
topmost
For Claydan, been having someone who understood what he was experiencing seemed to be helping
Omit "been"
"Pleased to meet you, Brother Taran."
He has not actually been told his name at this point.
He reached out shake the priest's hand.
to shake
Brannon caught Draeson and Ula exchange an amused glance,
saw... exchange or caught... exchanging
would garrot themselves
garrote
this hall would be teaming with hungry mouths.
teeming
large, wheeled baskets.
No comma
A mark could to unexpected things
do
level to the third floor
with
The girl rubbed at the chaffed skin
chafed
The General may have stumbled
might
on the Karlin's neck,
Omit "the," since Karlin is his name.
"I don't mean to upset you.
"
how had Nycol gotten to the shop and managed to murder poor Karlin at the same time as he was leading Brannon and his team all over town.
?
we all have much to discuss. "Myli,
No para break, no need for new opening quotation mark.
"I have always acted in Nilar's best interests.
"
a coup in country we have
in the
for a several moments.
Omit "a"
the Nilarian army amassed,
massed
to check that she'd received any payment
check whether
it is my duty protect Nilarian citizens.
duty to
beads in her deadlocks
dreadlocks
The bishop gestured and for the palace guard to come forward.
Omit "and"
