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this room, Is that clear?
is
who had been served his father as a squire
Omit "been"
"Ylani sensed in him.
it in
"Well that is a concern.
Well,
Brannon nodded slowly turning the information over in his mind.
Needs a comma to remove ambiguity; was the nod or the turning slow?
"What about your own talents, Ambassador.
?
A broken wine bottle and been split into shards
had been
"If you try anything," he said. "I won't
said, "I
Tell my why you did it.
Tell me
And now she'd been recalled and no longer the Ambassador,
and was
"No!" Shouted Narayan
shouted
more perceptively slipped into Ren's mannerisms.
perceptibly
I'm sorry, Draeson but
sorry, Draeson, but
as if to sooth him
soothe
"I'm thinking," Nycol began slowly, watching Draeson through narrowed eyes. "That
eyes, "that
he realized he Nilarian mage had
the
been a spell intended to harm Alyra or simply smash his way out of the cell by force, Draeson couldn't be sure,
Oh, come on. He's smarter than that.
at the time spell was cast.
the spell
"I'm fine," she said, "But
"but
She reached into her pocked
pocket - and how does she have this stuff in her possession?
"Good night lover,"
night,
"We never knew you had such a thing as this." Ylani said.
this,"
large, lacquered coffin
No comma
careful not to breath too deeply.
breathe
It will be better if you answer as if you were her,"
Opening "
"What happened to them.
?
I have no intention leaving."
of leaving
pouring oil under door
under the
fought the urge the cough.
urge to cough
could only feel icy wash of fear.
an icy
narrow, three story building,
No comma
"Brannon you were at the masquerade.
"Brannon,
" Brillen, tell him
Excess space
Who'd been at the stonemason's house when they died.
After, not when.
" Brillen, innocent
Excess space.
"Of course, it's not.
No comma when this is just a confirming phrase.
medal he himself had been wearing
Carrying
Brillen sat on balcony railing.
on the
Draeson had once lifted him over a fence in pursuit of a suspect
And levitated them several times earlier in this book. Continuity!
I struck Reanna
It
and closed door behind her.
the door
This was what had him feeling fuzzy and fearful of late.
had had
the huge double-doors
No hyphen
bookshelves filled histories and law books
filled with
where she and Brannon fought.
had fought
Brannon." Nycol said,
Brannon,"
the sharp slap of stung his cheek
Of what?
to lay flat on the grass.
lie
inside incomplete containment circle.
inside an
single, gliding stride.
No comma
