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murky, brown water.
No comma
he thrusted his hand
thrust
The coals of the blacksmith’s forge, smouldering away, was
coals... were
a lean-shaped, wooden building
No comma
which annoyingly towered Sprikit by a half foot.
topped OR towered over
“Down here sir,”
A comma should always come before a term of address. I won't comment on all the instances; there are too many.
Hello Eloquence.
“Okay young fellow,
when Ferg had paid a pittance?
been paid
don’t have all that much sir!”
after all that.” Felix pried.
that,"
“Right Gentle-Brutes;
You, Ferg is it?
a table which was large and stocky, as were the chairs, to compensate for both human and Brute patrons.
"compensate" is not the right word here; "allow" or "provide," maybe.
“Ah madam,
curly, blonde hair
No comma
Isn’t that right lads?”
But you Bard,
of course.” Krog started.
course,"
“Come brothers,
Being four-feet short
No hyphen
by standing on the table the Bard found himself a good half a foot taller than Torg.
The tables are 4.5 feet high? (Previously established that Sprikit is 4' and the Brutes are 4' taller than him.)
All eyes affixed themselves on Eader,
fixed
Keeping his eyes affixed on the fight,
fixed
Broam may have had the muscles of a mountain,
might
his arms wailing on her.
whaling
Tallew stayed on her back,
Doesn't this mean she should be counted out?
Tallew The Swift, Champion Of The Clash!”
No capitals for "the" and "of".
He had as much right, well almost.
well,
the crowd were convinced of the victory and, more importantly, so would Raggel,
so would Raggel be
Vern almost brought the sword out of his hilt
sheath
“Well here, Captain.
Well,
Tallew The Swift, true to her new namesake,
name [a namesake is someone or something you share a name with]
“That’s a nice courtesy my wife is doing for you Master Bard.”
the most unique situation he had ever found himself in.
There are no degrees of being the only one of its kind (though this is a common enough usage that it's probably a lost cause now).
the Bard inquired. smacking his lips after taking a swig.
inquired,
very good story Bard,”
See you in a bit fellows.
None of it seemed to phase Tallew in the slightest.
faze
“Gentle-Brutes this is–”
But you had to let him stay didn’t you?
stay,
twenty-thousand
No hyphen (only for numbers twenty-one to ninety-nine).
He was as trapped as that stuffed fox he saw in Marney’s Wares.
had seen
He may very well get lost,
might
As he gained on the tunnels,
gained the tunnels ["gained on" would be if the tunnels were running away, and he was chasing them]
“Y-yes dear,”
Sprikit winded around the tunnels
wound
He knew this was a stupid idea!
He'd known
no pardon necessary m’captain lady,”
over, Bard.” she said,
Bard,"
