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one of the soldier’s legs.
soldiers'
“It is over, Bard!” Captain Phara commanded.
That isn't a command.
He was only one, little Bard.
Definitely no comma.
“Listen big fella,”
A man was standing in the centre of the crowd, sitting on a little stool,
Standing or sitting?
meaty, grey arms
No comma
A low rumbling, moan came out of the thing.
No comma
A little more forceful Sprikit,
he instantly wretched up the stuff,
retched
for some foolish, reason believe you…
No comma
As for you Tallew,
mine and, by extension, your innocence.”
my and,
brought tears to some peoples’ eyes.
people's
“Ah gerolos,
“Excellent performance porcito,”
Well Sprikit,
Sir Grent of Lurton may have slain that Bull-Eagle and Joon Breen may have
might
They may as well have been on fire!
might
after which prompted a reasonable reaction.
stripping bits of bark and smaller branches off the lower one, until he had a makeshift pile of lumber.
Lumber is specifically sawn timber.
land relinquished from the control of both the Galzarian Empire and Kingdom of Varrak as part of a peace treaty.
Disbelieve
“Listen Torg;
“Well I got to thinking
Well,
“Yeah you’re right
Yeah,
“Well as a pure spectator,”
[So many of these I eventually gave up marking them; the "well" functions as an introductory word which needs to be set off with a comma.]
“Stop bickering you two!”
“Well she’s alive,
She started to rise, her footing seemed surer.
Comma splice
Right young Torg,
I’m eighty four
eighty-four
establishments in utter disrepute.
disrepair
“Well here we are!”
“Well we had better be–”
“Oh Eamonn!
it’s alright pet.
Eamonn scratched at his beard before rubbing it on front of his grey overalls.
on the front [and "it" is clearly not his beard, as it should be grammatically, but his hand, which has not been explicitly mentioned in the sentence]
as she lay down cups of steaming tea
laid
“Yes we’ve seen all that
Yes,
“Well we’ve always had a great interest
“Oh well all sorts,
Isn’t that right Eamonn?”
The Bard himself had only drank
drunk
Fingering one of the bracelets on her wrist, the Bard watched as she took it off.
Dangling modifier; it wasn't the Bard, but "she," who fingered the bracelet.
She turned the key into the lock
in
The sight of his brother’s faces
brothers'
These were the papers Eamonn was shuffling with earlier.
had been
“Yes, yes pet!”
He may have been old,
might
But there’s hear nor hide of a mention of you two.
The expression is usually "neither hide nor hair".
she could easily snap out of her binds.
bonds OR bindings
