Monday Question: WTF WIP?

Last week I was editing The Blue Blazes, back from the Metal Men of the Cranky Cyborg, and in this WIP (work-in-progress) I found the following, erm, puzzling sentence:


“He sat on the toilet, dwarfing.”


The scene takes place in a bathroom, yes.


Nothing scatological.


But I have no idea what this sentence means.


It certainly… conjures some fascinating images. (And leads to the new Tolkien-esque euphemism for pooping: “BRB, I’m going to go throw some dwarves into Moria.”)


The editor was wise enough to place a very lengthy note next to this sentence, which if I recall correctly went on and on and looked something like this:


“???”


Seems to sum it up.


Every once in a while we find a sentence in our WIPs that make no goddamn sense at all.


So, that’s the question.


What curiously broken sentences have you found inside your work?

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Published on January 21, 2013 03:47
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