Last week I was editing The Blue Blazes, back from the Metal Men of the Cranky Cyborg, and in this WIP (work-in-progress) I found the following, erm, puzzling sentence:
“He sat on the toilet, dwarfing.”
The scene takes place in a bathroom, yes.
Nothing scatological.
But I have no idea what this sentence means.
It certainly… conjures some fascinating images. (And leads to the new Tolkien-esque euphemism for pooping: “BRB, I’m going to go throw some dwarves into Moria.”)
The editor was wise enough to place a very lengthy note next to this sentence, which if I recall correctly went on and on and looked something like this:
“???”
Seems to sum it up.
Every once in a while we find a sentence in our WIPs that make no goddamn sense at all.
So, that’s the question.
What curiously broken sentences have you found inside your work?
Published on January 21, 2013 03:47