Writing: The Great and Wonderful What-Ifs

My grandson came to spend the night on Tuesday, and he asked me if I could help him write a story.  Nate’s 16, and when he’s serious about something, he delves into it.  I have no idea if he’ll follow through or not, but he was in the mood to get answers.  “What do I do first?” he asked.


“What kind of story do you want to write?” I asked.


And he gave me an in depth idea he’d been playing with–a guy who could call back any of his ancestors in time to pick their minds.  Pretty interesting.  He knew the setting.  He knew what each ancestor did in their previous lives, and he wanted lots of atmosphere.  All good, and it would make a great opening hook, but it wasn’t a story.


“Why not?” he asked.  Every detail was vivid in his mind.


“What does the hero want?” I asked.


“To talk to his ancestors.”


“Why?” I persisted.


He didn’t have a clue.


“Every story starts when some event knocks your protagonist off course, changes his life for the worse, and he has to DO something to fix it, to get his life back to normal.  Your protagonist needs a problem, a problem big enough that he can’t ignore it.  That’s called the inciting incident.”


Nate thought about that.  He decided that his hero should like a girl, but she didn’t like him.


“Not good enough,” I said.  “Like isn’t a strong enough passion.  The more the protagonist cares about the problem, the more it affects him, the stronger the emotional impact when he can’t have it and the harder he’ll try to achieve it.  The stakes have to be high, almost impossible.”


“Okay, maybe he loves the girl and something’s keeping them apart if his ancestors can’t give him a way of keeping her.”


“Great,” I said.  “What’s keeping them apart?”


Again, no idea.  So we played the game of “What if?”


Finally Nate said, “What if she catches some disease and one of the ancestors was an alchemist and might know how to cure her?”


Aaah, now that could work.  But there had to be more, or this would be a very short story.  “How could this go wrong?” I asked him.  “You never want to make it easy for the protagonist to achieve his goal.  What if he tried calling the ancestor, but something messed  up?”


“I know!  What if he called the wrong one?  What if one of his ancestors was a bad guy, and when Andre (we were making progress-he had a name for the guy) brings him back, he doesn’t want to return to the grave?”


Now, we were talking.  The protagonist has more problems than he knows what to do with.  Nate had the beginnings for a story.  He had enough ideas percolating for the opening hook, the inciting incident, the internal motivation, and the first story twist.  A good beginning.  Enough to get him through the first fourth of his pages.  Where he goes from that, I don’t know.  We’ll have to play another game of “What ifs.”  But along with that, “What can go wrong?” is another useful tool when you’re stuck for ideas.


I hope your protagonist finds an almost insurmountable problem that drives him all the way to the end of your story or novel.  But if he doesn’t, ask yourself, “What if?” and “What can go wrong?” and have fun.



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Published on September 27, 2012 11:48
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message 1: by Judith (new)

Judith Post Thanks, Donna! Hope you're writing away.


message 2: by Donna (new)

Donna Lodge Judy:

Great post--and your grandson is lucky to have a terrific teacher! It would be great if every new writer had a mentor to help them understand how important the bones of a story are (no pun on Nate's story of one of the ancestors not wanting to return to the grave. :) Tell Nate he has the beginning of a very good story.

Donna Lodge


message 3: by Judith (new)

Judith Post Thanks, I will. That kid has a gift for language. I don't ever want to go against him in a debate.


message 4: by Donna (new)

Donna Lodge I am, aye yam, as Popeye said. BTW, my high school nick name was "Olive Oyl!"


message 5: by Judith (new)

Judith Post Mine too. All I did was grow tall with no shape until I finally stopped growing. My other nickname was Beanpole. You'd think it would have scarred for me life. Luckily, it made me really good at basketball, so I didn't much care.


message 6: by Donna (new)

Donna Lodge Always a positive strategy to turn lemons into lemonade. Look forward to your next post and next books. What's coming out and when?


message 7: by Judith (new)

Judith Post Lauren's approved four more novellas, so I hope they go up soon. I think they're going to try to stagger them. I'm finishing two Halloween novellas, but it takes so long to get them online, not sure they'll be up in time. But they're still fun. And then two more after that. And two more....


message 8: by Donna (new)

Donna Lodge Your output is amazing. I would love to be half as prolific as you! Congrats on all about to be published.


message 9: by Judith (new)

Judith Post Mine's short. Yours is long. Long takes...longer:)


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