The Game Is Afoot - 1st Pass EditingI’ve done my first editing pass through the short story that I...

The Game Is Afoot - 1st Pass Editing

I’ve done my first editing pass through the short story that I posted. I addressed all of the issues I laid out in the previous post and am feeling better about the result. All of the plot holes and continuity issues have been resolved and there is more context and cohesion. The story now holds up as a story and is less of a rambling stream-of-consciousness.

There are still issues I want to address. I will do a second read-through and, as before, make a list o...