WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at a Middle Grade Opening

Critique By Maria D'Marco

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: Three

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through August 1.

This week’s question:

Is this a strong beginning and would it make a child want to know more?

Market/Genre: Middle Grade

Note from JH: Since I took the holiday off last week, I'm doubling up this week to keep on schedule. Enjoy!

On to the diagnosis…
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