ARE THESE FIRST LINES GOOD STORY HOOKS?
Artie is either on a bus or robbing a business when each story begins. There are buses, limos, alleys, and always, beautiful women involved in the first paragraphs. I didn’t plan on the busses, limos, and alleys when I started writing the series. But I think they worked in each story and worked with a series. Here’s the first line from each story. Do they draw you in, or do I need to work on my first lines?
Artie and the Long-Legged Woman: Artie watched with horror as first one beautiful leg emerged from the white limousine and then an equally gorgeous leg followed.
Artie and the Brown-Eyed Woman: The scream brought Artie to the window.
Artie and the Red-Headed Woman: The bus bucked and came to a stop in the middle of the street.
Artie and the Green-Eyed Woman: Artie Applegate stepped into the dark alley and closed the jewelry store door behind him, his hands still gloved.
Artie and the Big-Footed Woman: Artie tightened the grip on his athletic bag as the bus jounced over another manhole cover.
The good news is that all stories now available in a “bundle.” It includes the first four previously published stoies and the bonus last one, “Artie and the Big-Footed Woman.” If you buy it through Untreed Reads, the publisher, you get a free bonus short story, “Going Where the Wind Blows.”
http://store.untreedreads.com/index.php?main_page=product_info&cPath=6_224&products_id=1932
Also available at Amazon and Barnes and Noble now, and other places soon, like Kobo.
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