Rai (is hard to please)’s Reviews > As the Fallen Rise > Status Update

voilà
https://tinyurl.com/atfrhighlights

fuck this. I’m just gonna post a link to the rest of the highlights.

“The crust had bubbled and the pepperoni was black.”

How did this happen so quickly

“I worry about both of you.”

We stan neighbor dude

“Greer’s voice was cracked and hoarse after the scream.”

She screamed loud enough to make her voice hoarse… in her apartment???? Where other residents live????? I get that she’s angry and grieving, but I genuinely cannot imagine.

“Exhausted and frustrated, she took a deep breath and let out a cathartic scream.”

In your apartment?? Weirdo.

(…) “the scent which had been from the kitchen.”

Just weird. Try:
“The oven timer went off, and when Greer looked up, she spotted a frozen pizza sitting atop the middle rack through the oven window.”
“The oven timer went off, and when Greer looked up, she spotted the empty box atop the counter beside the oven and realized what the apartment had smelled like since she’d walked in earlier—Pizza.”

(…) “we don’t have an account under that name.”

Well, duh. It’s under “Anna.” You know this, G

“I’m being safe, Delia, I promise.”

lol

“I just want to make sure you’re safe, Greer. These— these creatures are playing a game centuries old. We don’t know what they want.”

Yeah. Listen to the attorney, G